An Abhiya OS: I am with you forever..edited--

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Indu

@Paint.It.BlacK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

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tamoha(tora)

@..tora.tangled.

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Posted: 12 years ago

...um...u have to wait fairy...tilll i can comment...coz u've left me speechless...

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this was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏absolutely stunning, fabulous, dreamy, beautiful...the concept was so unique and the setting was sooo different...and the way u described the whole os...u've got me totally floored!! ❤️ the meadows, apple trees, and the forbidden love of abhiya blooming in their midst was really really heart-warming... i loved this abhay, naughty, cute sensible, humorous, full of life, living out each moment that this life has to offer, how could piya help falling in love with him???it was inevitable...😳

that part about abhay not being there when the leaf of the tree fell reminded me of the story "The last Leaf" u know...and that letter...oh..it was so heart-wrenching yet so lovely at the same time.😊.

So you better be careful not to shed tears as I will be there as well.

the above line was really really touching...i loved this line so so much!!

i know it has a sad ending😭, but yes, abhay and piya are indeed together...as abhay will be alive in piya, in her love, as long as she lives and after she dies, they will be united in heaven, where abhay waits for his "sweetheart"...😊.

i feel its abhay's character u painted best here...i could literally feel him jumping from the page...er i mean, my laptop screen u know!!!⭐️

fabulous fabulous job done fairy!!!👏can i hit u??😆 becoz u doubted that no one would like it?? just kidding...here's a biggg hug for u..🤗.

write more and more!!⭐️

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Mandy

@BeyondHorizon

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

Sorry for unreserving this late but well ur responsible too in a way u know 😛 After reading the ending trust me I literally cried 😭 It was so so beautiful! Ur best by far 👏 Hats off to u for tat 👏

Well wat shd I call u now? Idiot, moron, duffer, stupid, crazy etc etc etc 😡 n u know perfectly know y I am hurling all the profanities at u now 😛 U say u write badly or not upto the mark or watever crap it is u think abt ur own writing abilities Then wat do u have to say abt this, huh? 😡 One more time u dish out tat crap to me, I swear I'll come over to chase u with a broom 😛 Now I wonder how I shall go abt our joint FF 😕 I can never ever write something so subtle n beautiful 😳

I just loved the way u started this OS 👏 Pia admiring nature n making her friend who doesn seem to care much to stay back n appreciate it 😊 Looks like ur a big nature lover urself else there's no way u could have written this out so well 😊 Loved Abhiya's first encounter n our Abhay was charming as usual n this is the best characterisation of Abhay I have ever come across 😳 Infact reminded me of Eric Segal n Sparks 😉 Pia seemed to love her mom who was way too ambitions to spare a moment to understand her own child The way u portrayed their relationship was fantastic. U literally bring ur characters alive with ur words 😳 Also loved Abhiya bonding 👏 It was so pure, so chaste n u depict it so wonderfully n I am really in awe of ur writing skills 😃 Also loved their moment when they discuss abt seasons. It was very significant to this story n the moment Abhay told her not to fall in love I picked up on the clue that something was wrong n also when he seemed to hesitate to take Gomz to hospital I realised its not bcoz he doesn want to but he isn in a condition to do it all by himself BTW wat was he suffering from? Then the moment when Alisia comes to tell Pia abt Abhay breathing his last 😭 Pia who had already began to feel something for Abhay felt shattered n couldn pull herself together. She couldn even bring herself to read the last note Abhay had left for her 😭 Only one person could pull her out of her trance n tat had to be the one who had been absent for most part of her life 😭 - Her mom! It was heartbreaking to read that letter part. I wish I could quote a particular line that touched my heart the most but I am unable to as the whole thing is beautiful in itself. Trust me thats the best piece of writing u have ever written 👏

All in all a heartbreaking 🥺 but brilliant OS 👏 I would have commented yesterday itself but I was too emotional 😭 Couldn bring myself to do it

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Shria

@-JuniorAngel-

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

this os was just superb but emotional at the end loved it, it was just awsome😳

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Trishna

@trishnawaliya

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

a beauifull, beautifull, beautifull and most beautifull story u knw i am short of adjectives to describe this even my word beautifull is less 4 this heart touching story thanx 4 sharing this... u knw the way u describe the surrounding, scenary, and relations its great work... u knw at climax i start crying...thanx once again

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Diya

@Fearless_Lover

Trailblazer

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

Res. :D

i knw i m late as usual...srry 4 dat 😳

lets cm 2 d updt

shocking ...ys it ws shockin 4 me...1st of all i felt its a romantic updt... abhay ws full of lyf ... d way he teased piya, luked at lyf ws different..comparison between winter & lyf ws d bst prt of d updt i nvr thought abt it...

letter..ahhh .. u md me cry 😭😡 u r 1 of d bst IF writers seriously ...i m ur fan nw

ending ws sad bt powerful ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

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Resh

@SheDevil

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

LOL whn Abhay said its better 2 have an apple thn medicines I knew Abhay will die😆

I always say love never means live wid each other but live 4 each other so this was brilliant😳

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megha sharma

@MS-meghasharma

Sparkler

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Posted: 12 years ago

beautiful and m speechless to write anything...u have made me cry... i have tears after reading abhay's letter.I remembered a story i read when i was in school regarding that last leaf...the way u wrote everything was outstanding.

the bonding b/w pia and her mom in the last part really was touching and her mom was indeed surprised that even after neglecting her she still cared for her.

even though the os has sad ending but i really wanted pia and abhay to meet and talk once before he died...and yeah even they aren't together they would always remain with one another...

it was splendid .

thanks for pm