Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 34

Wonderful update

Indu I'm literally clapping and cheering for this part. Take a bow. From start to end it was just amazing. Aarti's past is truly affecting her and now Payal has already started sensing it when she asked her mother whether Aarti's father loved her. Aayu is so adorable. I loved the part where he went knock knock may I enter the hug zone and the way he was teasing girls for easily crying.

The most fun part and close to my heart is the kids teasing their mother on her expressions/gesture when she scolds or gets angry. It's exactly how I feel when my mother tries to scold me or tries to get angry as it looks really funny. Sometimes when she's "scolding" I would just burst out in laughter and she would too. So thank you for bringing back that sweet memory.

Haiyee.. The romance part was too good. I nearly got a heart attack Indu (that was the speed my heart was beating). Yash untied the knots of her blouse with his teeth☺️ I nearly fainted with this line and that kiss.. *sigh* *sigh* "gheri lambhi saans".. Thank goodness it stopped there, if not I wouldn't be alive to comment. ☺️☺️ It was so beautiful that Yash knows his Aarti so well that even though she tries to hide, he can just look through her.

I was honestly shocked and really sad/hurt when I read the last part that Aarti who was 10 years old felt she deserves to be hated. No kid should feel that way. That one line is more than enough to show the dept of insecurities and hatred she felt for herself. It was so saddening as this kind of self hatred and low self esteem leads to kids taking adverse actions. Thank goodness Yash was there to save her.

Oh Indu you're just amazing. I just love your work more and more. Every update is showing a little more of Aarti's past which is really hard to relive. I can't stop saying this that you're just a fantastic writer and each updates just makes me feel so much. I absolutely loved everything about this updates. The family moment, the kids teasing their mum then the almost just desserts and aarti reliving a little of her past plus yash visiting aarti's diaries was just beyond spectacular. I love love love it. All the jhappi's and hugs are for you my dearest favourite writer. 🤗

awesome..indu di...i m speeechless..i dont know what to say more...will just say..keep it up...n continue soon

Indu, it's morning at my side, and you made it a beautiful start for me!
Reading this wonderful update while sipping my cup of coffee was like having a heavy breakfast. Such a treat!

Well, what can I say now. I thought the first part will put me on becoming an emotional again. But Aayu took it away.. LOL! to his naughtiness.. The way he and Payal enacted Aarti about her anger to RD. Such cute moment!

Aarti's reaction to Payal was understandable, she was just being protective to her. She don't want her to expect everything into a perfect picture. She just want her to realize that everybody has a chance even the worst person on earth. And I think this perception made her become through Yash. Loved the hug part too..

I love the bonding between Pradhi and Aarya. They seems to be very close to each other.

And the way you wrote about the bedroom scene, sensuous yet romantic. Yash really knows Aarti very well. And he loves her so much that he can even sacrifice his need before hers. Thanks to her diary!!

DIARY (sigh)... it reminds me with my childhood(again). I can relate with Aarti this time. I too, used to write a diary during my childhood. But unlike her, it has a different story. It is the best way to burst out both pain and happiness. It was like speaking on your own self. Just until my own Yash came..

Looking forward to Aarti's past..

*HUGS

Dear friends,

I have just finished reading the responses till now, and as always you all overwhelm me...in not only being generous with your compliments but also being with me in the flow the story is taking us. The latter makes me feel so loved and cherished and so very comfortable with what I am doing.

I know I am about to touch a sensitive issue here. Please free to tick me off as and when you feel like...if not here, then by pm...whatever makes you feel comfortable. Believe me I shall welcome all the suggestions with absolutely open mind.

I take this opportunity to thank all the readers, silent or active (whether by commenting or clicking the Like button), for all the support. You have no idea how much I appreciate your walking the story with me.

Please give me some time to respond to everyone.

Take care.

Love you all.🤗
Indu

@Indu: I was hoping against hope that you would not take this route.

Indu fabulous update!

Originally posted by: Abie10

Wow! Indu lovely update 👏 👏 enjoyed the kids imitating Aarti and RD.
Hmm what are they hesitant to tell payal until her seventh year and Aarti's past . This story is so much getting into me can't wait for the next update.

Thank you, Abie. Well, if the parents have something to tell Payal when they think she is old enough, then it has to be something about her, right? I am surprised no one noticed the number of years Yash and Aarti are married...Shouldn't that have rung a bell?😊

Originally posted by: InduG64

Thank you, Abie. Well, if the parents have something to tell Payal when they think she is old enough, then it has to be something about her, right? I am surprised no one noticed the number of years Yash and Aarti are married...Shouldn't that have rung a bell?😊

Originally posted by: MelodiousDreams

@bold: Oh God. I had registered that little fact when I read it, but now the murkiness of the fog is clearing just a little bit more...Oh God...

(Edit: I'm hoping that I'm reading way too much into this now...that what I'm thinking isn't what you've planned...I'm going to stop talking now and wait for you to narrate more before I jump to conclusions)

Borna...all I can say at this juncture is Payal's story is part of Yash's past...and that Aarti's saga is separate from this.