Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 21

Originally posted by: ksfan2

beautiful..superb update di..it was really nice...i loved it so much...waiting for the next update..thanks for teh pm

Thank you.😊

Indu di i was restraing myself not to read before weekends when i have my peace of mind but then their I am

Originally posted by: RA17

Indu di i was restraing myself not to read before weekends when i have my peace of mind but then their I am

I have been sparshed with your samarpan

coming to update love this will be a very small word to say but sigh i am right now not where my feelings can be penned down so may be by weekend you will find me agian

aplogies for delay may be i am big tubelight which takes its own sweet time in lighting up till the tym my mood is brigten up with your reflection

thankds di for brining another aarya which will make us go to a different places with you

aayu yes he is always close to us and payal nanimassi ansh prateik and paridhi son

lot of things but that willl take a while now i guess i know how i am please bear will come back soon

also not to forget the way you reply each of your reader is even more delight to read

thanks a ton di .. take care.. god bless😊

Hi Ria...It's just fine dear friend. You take your time in reading the chapter. Reading fiction is own-time activity and not perforce reading for some exam...so chill! I am right here as and when you collect your thoughts about Samarpan's beginning. I am just so touched with your phrase "sparshed with your Samarpan"...🤗

The journey is on for sure. This time I have taken a little more difficult route, but if you and everyone here are with me then I hope to complete this journey too successfully.😳

Indu, my friend! 😃 I'm late to the opening party, but I had a chance to read your first installment to Samarpan. Such a good beginning!

"While walking the caves, maaji developed pains. They rushed her to the nearest hospital. Your mumma came into this world after an operation, but maaji died due to complications. I was with daadima when the nurse brought mumma out in the room, wrapped in a sheet. Ma told me to wait in the room with the nurse as she rushed out with dadu to be with your nanaji who had gone into a shock," Yash looked gravely at Palak, who was listening attentively to each word, and decided not to divulge more. It was Aarti's decision to make as to how much to tell Payal. Both of them had noticed Payal's growing fascination to learn more and more about their past lives. She was also keenly observant of his and Aarti's interactions. She was at an impressionable age

…an age when the romance factor affects deeply; for her, her parents' love affair had no parallel. He didn't want to dent her fairy tale notions. When he had expressed his concern over Payal's naive yet rigid ideas about love and romance, given what she sees of her parents, Aarti had told him to leave it to her to deal with their daughter.

I really like how intuitive and involved you've made Yash and Aarti as parents, not wanting to indulge Payal's idealization of romance. At the same time, it's easy to understand her curiosity about their love story and idealizing it. What a heartbreaking beginning for Aarti's journey! Quick question, Payal is the one fascinated with Yash and Aarti's love story, am I right? Palak is mentioned here too. Is she as interested in the story as Payal is? Or is Payal the only daughter in the family? Just want to make sure I'm reading everything accurately. 😳

Aayu is so adorbs. A little marine biologist in the making? Love Yash's moment with Aayu about Karan and Rohan:

Yash held Aayu by the shoulders and said, "Aayu, look at me!" And when he wouldn't, he held his face between his hands and turned it up to him, "Aayu, the very fact that you found it difficult to tell me the reason and the very fact that you can't look me in the eyes should be enough for you to realize that what you have been made to believe is wrong. You know your friend, son…why are you letting someone else judge your friendship? What Karan is to you is felt here (he poked a finger into his son's chest)….Ask yourself what you believe, and your heart will give you the answer….Hmm!!"

Have I said how much I enjoy the way you write Aarti and Yash as parents? ❤️

As he dipped his head, Aarti pushed him away lightly, laughing, "That has to be the cheesiest pick-up line, Yash….even for a birthday boy."

"Oh yeah! I'll show you tonight how cheesy I can be Mrs Scindia."

"Thanks for the tip off, Mr Scindia."

"I warn you, Aarti…no hanky-panky…I want my just desserts before midnight…before my birthday gets over officially."

. . . .

"It's not fair, Aarti….at least on my birthday I should get to romance my wife anywhere I like."

Aarti chuckled, "You are worse than Aayu at times with your tantrums."

"Yeah right….even his tadpoles get to mate out of their habitat…but I don't." He pouted as he pulled her closer.

. . . .

"Mumma….guess what?"

"That's cue for me to leave…till tonight then," saying Yash winked at his wife, ruffling his son's hair as he walked out.

Oh my word, Yash and Aarti are a riot! 🤣 I couldn't resist quoting these parts above. Great banter between them. Pari and Prateek are a sweet couple. I enjoyed their interactions with Yash, Aarti, and the kids. Hopefully we'll get to see their Ansh soon. And Shobha, Yash's girlfriend, is love. The closeness between each member of the family is beautiful. They all mirror their PV counterparts so well.

"What about you Mr Scindia? If you want your just desserts, you better hurry up…otherwise…ahem…you'll miss it. Oh well…I better go. I have to set up the dinner." She turned with a smile and was immediately held by her wrist and jerked back, as her back went and crashed into Yash's chest. He brought his mouth near her ear and whispered seductively, "The game is on Mrs Scindia, but beware, now I won't be satisfied only with just desserts. I shall collect my winnings through the night." And then turning her he gave her a hard, hungry kiss before striding off, shouting, "Kids, come to the kitchen." Aarti was left standing with blissful anticipation…She pressed her hands against her heart. It was amazing how even after so many years of marriage he could still make her heart beat this fast and make her feel all wobbly and expectant as she was on their first night. Aarti knew she will never be able to gauge the depth of her love for him till she died. She had not known the sun till he had brought her out from the dark prison she was in….and now he was the reason her sun rose each morning.

Oh my goodness, Indu! That last paragraph is just delish. I love what you've written so far of Yash-Aarti's little family in Samarpan. Payal and Aayu have such wonderful and distinct personalities. The Yash and Aarti dynamic is delightful -- they are very mischievous, romantic, and flirtatious. ☺️ It is no wonder Payal is enthralled by her parents love for each other and I'm just as intrigued about their back story as she is. Wonderful, light-hearted beginning!

Looking forward to your next installment whenever you have the chance. 😃

Aha Jac...there you are. As long as you joined, it doesn't matter what hour you join in. 😊

Thanks for giving your approval. It means a lot to me.

For starts, Yash and Aarti have two kids, Payal (16) and Aayu (10). While writing the Prologue I had mistakenly typed Palak in one instance (I am so used to writing Palak and Ansh...in fact the first time I typed Mishti for Aarti)😳...I rectified that later. One more clarification for you: Shobha was Aarti's mother who died after giving birth to Aarti. The old lady is Aarti's naani's twin sister.. and the only relative from her mother's side.

As for Yash and Aarti...they are much older in the present day, married for some years but that hasn't dampened their ardor for each other. I had to incorporate the kind of interaction a very-much-in-love couple with two grown-up kids would likely indulge in. I an satisfied that everyone seems to find their interactions natural.

I shall get to their beginning soon, so please stay with me...🤗

Originally posted by: InduG64

Aha Jac...there you are. As long as you joined, it doesn't matter what hour you join in. 😊

Thanks for giving your approval. It means a lot to me.

For starts, Yash and Aarti have two kids, Payal (16) and Aayu (10). While writing the Prologue I had mistakenly typed Palak in one instance (I am so used to writing Palak and Ansh...in fact the first time I typed Mishti for Aarti)😳...I rectified that later. One more clarification for you: Shobha was Aarti's mother who died after giving birth to Aarti. The old lady is Aarti's naani's twin sister.. and the only relative from her mother's side.

As for Yash and Aarti...they are much older in the present day, married for some years but that hasn't dampened their ardor for each other. I had to incorporate the kind of interaction a very-much-in-love couple with two grown-up kids would likely indulge in. I an satisfied that everyone seems to find their interactions natural.

I shall get to their beginning soon, so please stay with me...🤗

Hi Indu just read ur feedback on my feedaback and I have full faith that u will do justice to the emotional scenes that arise, you've just got to be in that zone when writing. The moment of brilliance will find you and hey u have us all supporting you so keep the faith:)

Originally posted by: J12L85

Hi Indu just read ur feedback on my feedaback and I have full faith that u will do justice to the emotional scenes that arise, you've just got to be in that zone when writing. The moment of brilliance will find you and hey u have us all supporting you so keep the faith:)

Thanks J. It feels safe and serene when supported so overwhelmingly and with such genuine warmth. I shall certainly give it what I have.

It took me a lot of days to reply to this beautiful story.

I loved the antics of Aayu. I Hope he gets cheekier by the day. Aayu does not even remind me of Ansh but of Arti and a bit Yash! Also I have fallen in love with the way you have depicted him wish you would give some physical descriptors for the child. I imagined him as a lanky kid with beautiful eyes and long sensitive fingers who does a lot of running more than walk because he gets to places quickly that way and talks very fast! Tell me if I am wrong!😆

Loved Arti and her love for Yash and her mischievousness.

Loved Yash upstanding ness he is still the same at heart after all these years. I could feel his essence through your story.

I had trouble with naanima , daadima , naanimaasi: Trouble understaning how related they are to Arti from which side of the family coz I'm not too familiar with these terms. ( Wish you could give me a footnote after the chapter if you include a term other than English. I believe this would help some other readers too! Well if you consider it I would be so happy!)

Loved the story and will revisit again when you update! Please pm me!😃

Indu you've started doing it again my dear, you've made me a fan of Samarpan and fall in love with it also, in the first part itself. Read it 2-3 times. 😊