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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

Look who's here...that's so cool 😆 ( i use to say that back in the day...just came to my head again)

Firstly'I must comment on how much I laugh during these chapters? Madhu's dialogues are like a remedy to soothe away a hard day'the idea of broken English was like of speck of geniusness (that is not a word :P but u know what I mean) 'there were so many funny moments in the last 4 chapters despite the seriousness of Madhu's ( I actually wrote Geet here before, I guess Maaneet are on my mind) condition that you touched on'I still smiled and laughed throughout'

Every writer makes up words. If it wasn't for making up words, we would be living in Orwell's 1984. I happy that you are happy. I am sorry for all the extra cheese. IDK.

PTSD ( post traumatic stress disorder) is what looks like Madhu is suffering from, where a trauma affects a person time and again'the reliving of the trauma moments, the flashs'it takes years to recover..but you presented it well'showed a short leap to show the recovery..made it realistic. RK's care and affection'I awwwed

I was worried you would turn technical on me. I know bits and pieces from Intro Psych but, never took another course. Thank you.

You know when some people fall in love, they fall hard and fast'that is the case with both Rk and madhu. RK may be denial but the boy is in love already with his wifey'at least Madhu is rather direct with her feelings telling him he likes him'

Story is moving really well hun'really waiting for the next update'let's see what you have in story

Teaser: Rishibala visit the Eden ballet center.

Laikin...every Eden has its serpent. Will this Adam and Eve be able to survive its venomous fangs?

Reya <3

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

Haha...all that hard work and u ignore the comment😆..but i just gave my 2 cents on PTSD on a comment...i am still doing my undergrad in psyc...but i likey the name..i accept 😃


Fine, commented. I knew you were an undergrad but, can your name get any awesomer that this?
I am glad you accept but, for future reference, you didn't have a choice in the first place😛
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: iiDona


Fine, commented. I knew you were an undergrad but, can your name get any awesomer that this?
I am glad you accept but, for future reference, you didn't have a choice in the first place😛

Jeez..that's comforting..to know that my opinion doesn't matter a lot when it comes to my name😆..i know that ur name is jasleen...i am going with Jas for now unless i too have a light bulb moment 😆..
i tried not going all Shrink technical on you but what can i say ? somethings can't be helped..😳
Chalo...i gotta grab some lunch...it's time to eat on my side of the world...i have been sitting on laptop ever since i got home...
Catch u later babe 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

"Aaah so tired Madhu. I knew it was a bad idea from the get go. I only did the stunts cause you wanted me to".

"I no such thing". Madhu massaged his back. His tensed muscles relaxed from her touch.

He murmured. "You did say you wanted a strong man".

"Show off. I make golden milk".

"Biwi yeh beemaron vaala, haldi ka doodh; mein toh changa bhala hoon".

"Drink up. My mum make everyday two time. How I stay so fresh?"

"Aapki khubsoorti ka yeh raaz hai Madhubala ji. Chickni kamar pe teri meri dil phisal gaya". RK slipped his hands under the fabric that covered her waist.

Madhu slapped his hand and sang, "strongly jaado chal gaya".

"She flirts back. Come here my Russian biwi". He sized her up and down, openly checking her out.

"That just to lift your spirit".

"Sure. Mein bhi dekhta hoon how long you can keep up this act".

"Sekhenge", she smiled.

"Dekhenge, biwi. DE-KHEN-GE", RK responded while Madhubala made faces at him. He pressed a few buttons on his phone and asked Madhu to accompany him somewhere.

"Where are we going?"
"To a place where the memories of you and your mummy exist".

RK opened the wooden doors to an empty auditorium with a stage the size of a football field.

"Welcome to the Eden Ballet Centre, Madhubala. This is build to mimic the one in Moscow". Madhu was so awestruck that RK had to push her up the stage.

"Now, do your thing. I want to see you dance, just for me". Madhu appeared nervous as if this was her first time performing. She fumbled with the props for a bit. Then, she came off the stage.

"I never ballerina. Only couple of lessons. I just".

"You wanted to impress me. A job well done, biwi. I am impressed that you would go to such lengths to charm me. I know you like me and that's charm enough. Why the lie?"

"You no believe if I say. I, I really the Tsar princess. Live fun, money, clothes, food, family. They kill King, Queen and my dad survive. He marry mumma. We live secret palace. No tell anyone. They want money. They kill mumma. I run save me life".

"Enough! Enough of this bullshit", RK was red with anger. He pressed on Madhu's wrist till she winced in pain. "I like you. In fact, I love you. But, how do expect me to move forward with you when you won't tell me the truth. First, you were a mafia gang member. Then, a ballerina and now, a princess? Tomorrow you will wake up and decide to be a time travelling zombie. I want the truth. The truth and nothing less". He walked off leaving a shocked Madhubala on the floor.

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After about thirty minutes of pacing outside the auditorium doors, RK entered to find his wife in the same spot where he left her. He sat down in front of her and looked her in the eye.

"I apologize for what I did earlier. I overreacted. May I take you home?"

She did not even blink in response.

"I will take that as a yes". He lifted her up in his arms and head out. She did not resist but, did not give her usual look of approval either.

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"I will get us both some food", RK was repenting for his anger outburst earlier. Madhubala maintained her silence. He could not find Madhu as he walked back with his world renounced cream of mushroom soup. Finally, he decided to check in the washroon.

He found her fully clothed and shivering under a cold shower. RK was reminded of their first meeting; a memory he never wanted Madhu to relive. He tried waking Madhu out her trance, in vain. As he proceeded to turn off the shower, he felt her hand gently touch his leg. He picked her up from the ground and made her stand up. She continued to scream as they both stood underneath the cold running water. Eventually, she became too tired to support her body weight. She dropped herself in his muscular arms and let him carry her. She squealed in pain, looking intently at her husband for comfort. He let her do whatever she wanted; whatever she needed to let out her emotions. She buried her face in his chest. The husband and wife stood under the shower; him healing her wounds. When she stopped screaming, he took her out.

RK took off her clothes and for a second, admired his fair maiden. He quickly snapped back to reality when he heard Madhu shiver. He decided it was best to change her into the grandma night wear, if he were to avoid being inappropriate. He tucked her under a thick duvet and put her to sleep. He pondered if he was the cause of her misery. Was it him being too hard on her that triggered her breakdowns? He came to a conclusion that he should let her be. That, he should enjoy the present Madhubala, the one he had chosen as his wife. Not to worry about the Madhubala she may have been, the Madhubala who makes his wife cry.

If you can't tell by the overwhelming amount of updates, I am enjoying my holidays :) Now, I have learned from my mistakes and will not reveal any deadlines but, I am in writing mode. YES, you may expect to be bombarded with PMs from my side. I hope you don't despise me after the two week run. K. I am done.

Edited by iiDona - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
whoa happy happy moments, then out of the blue comes RK's outburst, but then again Madhu won't tell him anything. Liked the update! 👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
Lovely update dear.

Like RK, even I'm confused 🤣
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Vsoujanya

whoa happy happy moments, then out of the blue comes RK's outburst, but then again Madhu won't tell him anything. Liked the update! 👍🏼


I hope the outburst was justified. I felt as though the poor guy had been enduring for so long.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: PristineSoul

Lovely update dear.

Like RK, even I'm confused 🤣


The clouds of confusion are temporary, you have my word. I will begin to reveal the truth fairly soon. Quite hard for me to be hush hush for too long.
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Posted: 12 years ago
amazing parts...
sorry for late comment...
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Posted: 12 years ago
It ws a bit senti. M also wondring abt Madhu's past dat wht is truth.

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