MG FF DEMON'S ANGEL Last Pt&Epilogue28/1/2013 P-98 - Page 13

Nice part...
Really maan mai aakad kut kut kar bhara hai...
Watever aditya said is soo true.. Well maan needs thse type of word treatment from sum1... Good job aditya...
I love this story.. It is different frm any other story... N also u r using pure hindi words. It gives a feel to it...

now finally they r out
maan wants 2 save geetakshi anyhow
n this is gud sign
also he was dreaming about her
dheere dheere he will fall 4 her
waiting 4 next part

richa update is realy awesome

Thank to god. I mean janu ji ko
Ab to maan ne apna brain use kiya , apne ego ko side me rakhke.
Awesom janu

wow lovely update dear..atlast my maan proved he was smart...i love te update dear.

Wow lovely dear so both escaped fm there...hmm ab aage kya hoga????

so finally maan n adi escaped .. yieee

and maan started realizing his feeling for geet that its not ony ust but something else ..

superb part

NOTE
Guys plsss apne comments do as dey encouraged me and if i m wrong somwhere plsss do also tell me...so that i improve my self...



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*DEMON'S ANGEL*
PART - 11

MAAN & ADITYA both suceeded in escaping frm d range of security guards. Both ran fastly nd panting heavily,but hd a relief of saving frm d tribal people.Both r sat calm down,but suddnly whipering sound broke deir relif moments. Both alerted wid a voice whch piercing deir heart's nd echoed badly in deir ears. Both cant able 2 resist dis.

MAAN:ye itna bhayanak rudan(crying sound) kiska ka hai?

ADITYA:ye awaj udhar se aa rai hai,chal k dekhna chahiye.

Both agreed nd went in d directin of voice coming. Dey saw an old temple coverd wid hey grass,having in avery bad condition. Goddess Durga's statue ws situated in between d main area. 1 tribal lady was crying badly nd praying 4 hr son. Hr voice hv d pain whch she feels exactly. She pleaded 4 d sake of hr only son. Although Maan doesnt bother dis kind of happnings,coz no1 able 2 affect on hm,bt dis time he cant able 2 stop hmslf. He wnt 2 dat lady.

ADITYA:Yuvraj ruk jaiye kaha ja rahe hai aap?waha khtra ho skta hai.

Bt Maan ignored hs warning nd entered in temple.

MAAN:suniye aap is tarah se ro kyu rahi hai?

Lady stop crying hearing strange voice. She turned 2 hm nd shoked.

T.WOMN:ap?

MAAN:tm hume janti ho?

T.womn:ha aap unhi do ladko me se 1 hai jise aaj Jhingara k paas bhejna tha.

MAAN:lekin tm ro kyu rai ho?

T.WOMAN:kyunki hr 15 din bad Jhingara rakshas(demon/monster) k paas humare kabile walo ko do admi bhejne hote hai.

MAAN:lekin kyu?

T.Womn:uski bhuk mitane k liye.agar himne aisa nai kiya to wo 1 hi bar me sabko maar dega.isliye sardar ne uske sath sauda kr liya.is baar jab aap or apka sathi pakde gaye to mujhe laga mere bete k pran bach jayenge.lekin ab sardar ne yahi nirnaye(decision) liya hai ki wo mere bete ko hi bhejenge. Mera 1 hi beta bacha hai wo hi mera iklauta shara hai uske bina main kaise jeeungi.pati ko to pehle hi kho chuki hu or aj bete ko b kho dungi.

MAAN fills wid sm unusual feeling do nt able 2 undrstand dem. He felt weired at hr cond. Lady ran frm dere. Aditya came 2 hm.

ADITYA:chale yuvraj?hume abi sarn kamal ko dhudna b hai jisme pehle hi pure 2 dinn barbad ho chuke hai.

MAAN:nai Aditya main in sbko aise museebat me chhodke nai ja skta.

ADITYA:to kya karoge tm?

MAAN:kuchh b lekin inhe aise mrne k liye to nai chhodunga.

ADITYA:apne bare me socho Maan,Geetakshi k pas jada samy nai hai.

MAAN:aj tk srf woi to kia hai.sirf apne bare me socha hai.lekin pta nai nai kyu aaj mera dil mujhe is baat ki izzazat(permission)nai de raha ki main inse muh mod k chala jau.

ADITYA:wah kya baat hai khud apni praza ki jindagi ko maut se b battr(worst) banane wala insan aaj insaniyat ka path pda raha hai.

MAAN glared hm:tume jo sochna hai sochte raho.

ADITYA:or Geetakshi uska kya?

MAAN:wo sirf meri hai use to bhgwan b mujhse chhen nai skte. Duniya ki koi takat aisi nai hai jo use mujhse chhen ske.wo meri hai meri thi or meri hi rahegi.

ADITYA:kya karna chahte ho?

MAAN:in kabile walo ki madat.chahe tm sath do ya na do.

ADITYA:chalo tumhara sath to main apni akhri saans tak nai chhodunga.

Both return 2 d places of tribal people. All stunned seeing dem again. All sadness vanished bcoz of confusion.

T.HEAD:tm dono yaha pe?tm wapis kyu aa gaye?

MAAN:aap logo ki maat karne k liye.

T.HEAD:madat or wo kaise?

MAAN:tm hume us Jhingara k paas bhejna chahte the na...(he luk at all feared faces)hum taiyar hai.

All shocked hearing hs disclaimer.

T.HEAD:kya pagal ho tm log.sb sach jante hue b maut k muh me jana chahte ho,wo b khud?

MAAN:tume kya farak padta hai?jaise pehle tum hum2 ko bhejne wale the waise hi ab bhej do.

SARDAR:tme shayad pta nai hai wo kitna khatrnak hai.

MAAN:hmne kaha na hum jayenge.

Both get ready 2 go in hs den. Dat temple Lady cm 2 dem nd blessd both.

T.LADY:beta tumne mere bete ki museebbat apne sir le li kyu?tumari maa ko pta chalega to usko kitna dukh hoga.

ADITYA:meri maan nai hai maaji.

MAAN:or na meri.lekin ap fikar mat kariye ab wo rakshas kisi ko nuksan nai pahunchayega.

LADY:main tm 2 k liye prarthna karungi or tb tk jal or ann nahi luni jb tk tm 2 sahi slamat laut k nai aa jate.

She kissed both on deir 4heads. Both wnt inside d den,which smelled so badly. Its roof cvrd wid bats who luk more scary in mid nite. Deir is a complete darkness evrywhere. Both moved 4wrd sloly 2. Suddnly Aditya fall on grnd coz smthing ws struk in hs foot. Maan stretched hs hand 2 help hm. Unwillingly he tuk hs help nd stand bak on hs feet.

MAAN:dekh k chalo.

ADITYA:mere pau me kuchh atak gaya tha.lekin wo tha kya?

Both lukd down nd found lot of human skelton dere nd many bones. Both luk at each other.

ADITYA:yuvraj hume savdhani se aage badna hoga ye mujhe thoda khatrnak lagta hai.

MAAN:sahi kaha hume yojna bnani hogi.

ADITYA:main 1kam krta hu,pehle jake main pta lgta hu ki uski takat kya hai.

MAAN:kaise?

ADITYA closd hs eyes nd trned hmself in2 a snake. He crawled frm deir...