SHIKAR (A Dangerous Love Story) RTMC FF 39 on 148 - Page 27

Created

Last reply

Replies

1k

Views

162.9k

Users

57

Likes

2.1k

Frequent Posters

Priyart12 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
hmmm ye bat bhi shi h 🤣
di meri pyari di khao ho ap plzzz ud dedo na
apki pyari pyari do bhne (me n rashu 😛 ) w8 kr rhi h
bachcho ko w8 krana achi bat nhi hoti to plzzz ek ud dedo na 😳
sweetsanyo thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: princesspriyart

hmmm ye bat bhi shi h 🤣
di meri pyari di khao ho ap plzzz ud dedo na
apki pyari pyari do bhne (me n rashu 😛 ) w8 kr rhi h
bachcho ko w8 krana achi bat nhi hoti to plzzz ek ud dedo na 😳


bache ro denge!!!!!!!!😭
ridzzi thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
where r u dhanu...??????...😔
plz update...
yaar that's not fair...
itna excitment jagake full week gayab...😒
no updates...not even a short one...😒
plz update soon...atleast update shikhar...meri excitment iskeliye kuch zayda hi bad rahi hai...😍...just couz of u...
luv u...😊
Freethinker thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 13 years ago

Part 11



Veer quickly opened the glass window...took a glass and was about to pour his drink when he remembered Chandni's words...



"i hate drinkers...i don't understand why people drink...you know Veer that is the worst thing one can ever try"



he smirked "yes Chandni...you should try first to know whether its worst or the best thing one can try"



he poured the alcohol and gulped three to four glasses... even when he had so much alcohol he was always aware of what he was doing...he took off his shirt and flung it carelessly on the bed... " Chandni, this restlessness is not going to lessen now"

Soon he closed his eyes...



----

Next Day

It was early morning and Chandni was ready for her college. She preferred walking, it was a narrow path, isolated from the main road...only few pedestrians could be seen walking...the path was surrounded by tall trees and bushes...it was convenient for her to walk with her high boots, because of the rains. It was windy, her long hair blew all over her face...the college was few minutes on the walking distance...



the moment she entered the college she heard somebody calling her, it was none other than her friend Maneka... "where were you?" she said while running towards Chandni...



Chandni smiled at her "how are you?"



Maneka was out of breath "oh...i tried calling you...but your mother said you went out for some project"



Chandni gave a broad smile "yes...i went to Kureong" and started walking towards her building



Maneka looked surprised "Kurseong!!!! why didn't you tell me..."



Chandni didn't look at her but she was still smiling "well it was all so quick that I couldn't think of telling you" she said while adjusting her stole in the front...



-----



Manohar wasn't surprised to see Veer all dressed up and that too so early... "Veer it will take one hour to reach at University in Darjeeling"



Veer snapped back "who is going to Darjeeling?" he made a frown and walked outside



He looked at the beautiful mountains surrounded all over the place...he could see the snow clad mountains far away... "never have I seen anyone so beautiful, who knows when and where shall we meet again, the world can't stop me now, I have made a vow to myself" he said while putting on his jacket...



He took out his bottle and started walking towards the the other side of the hill...for some reason he wanted to be alone... there was silence...all he could hear was the sound of the blowing wind... he was sipping his drink sitting on the hill when he saw young gurkha boys asking him loudly in their language "Kasto Cha?" (how are you?)



Though Veer couldn't understand a single word, he still waved his hand while drinking...they walked past him "Pheri bhetaunla" (will meet again) and waved their hands...



------

Maneka kept the books in her bag "fine...so when are you going back to complete your project?"



Chandni thought for a while "may be tomorrow...can't say anything...its raining and I can't do anything until it keeps raining at the site"



Maneka confusedly asked her "i don't know if that's what I feel...but you have changed a little..."



Chandni reluctantly answered back "i won't change unless destiny wants me to..."

they walked towards the gate...



Maneka and Chandni walked towards the narrow path outside the college...she was changing or the destiny wanted her to change... Maneka asked her "so tell me about this change".



------

Kamini was at the temple when the preist was performing the prayers, it was one of the important prayers that Kamini performed for her Grand daughter... she was offering the ghee to the holy fire when she remembered the words that the priest had said for her grand daughter...



" the soft treading of her feet will wake up the sleeping destiny, this fair girl, if touched a stone, even that will become a diamond. The rainbows, clouds, flower buds and stars are all her features...may the shade of her beauty always shine like this. May no one's evil eyes cast on her"



Kamini was worried for Chandni...she wanted to protect her from the evil that was prevailing on the earth, and it will somehow make its way to reach her grand daughter.



----
Manohar approached Veer while he was walking towards the nearest town... "Veer...wait..." he said while running towards him...



Veer was least bothered...he wanted to be alone...Manohar asked him "Veer...you made me run so much...why didn't you stop?"



Veer didn't look at him and kept on walking "i want to be alone..."



Manohar smiled "you want to think about her...i know you...well I think she is..."



before Manohar could say anything Veer replied "she is naive"



Manohar smiled and looked carefully at his friend "you seem different with her as compared with other girls..."



Veer smiled "because she is different...i don't know why she dwells in my heart"



-----

Chandni closed her eyes "i don't know what sort of change this is..."



Maneka surprisingly looked at her " what?? whom are you talking about?



-----


Manohar's mouth was wide open with shock... "what??? she dwells in your heart...what relation do you have with her???"



Veer closed his eyes "i don't know what sort of bond is this...what sort of dreams are these..."
------



Chandni took a deep breath and opened her eyes "i don't know why a stranger seems so intimate and right...i don't know why I am constantly lost in thought, anything I say...I say haltingly and fearfully..."



Maneka was totally bewildered by her answer "Chandni I hope no one has casted a spell on you..."



-----



Veer continued " i don't know why she stays every moment near my heart..."



Manohar baffled "what???"



Veer closed his eyes for a second "keep burning me with your desire, by coming into my dreams..."



-----



Chandni stood still for a moment "i don't know about the spell...all I know is that I am not in myself...someone has stolen me..."



Maneka dazed at her "what??? stolen...but..."



Chandni took few steps without looking at Maneka "there is always a bizarre feeling around me..."



Maneka finally hold her hand to stop her "what??" '.. Chandni marveled at her jolting features...



Maneka "do you even know what you were saying?"



Chandni couldn't understand how she uttered something unusual...she wasn't unfamiliar but there was something disturbing her...she looked at her friend "nothing...i was just scaring you..." she smiled...

Maneka took a sigh of relief "oh thank God...i got scared...don't you ever talk like this again...it seemed you were somebody else and not Chandni..."

----



Manohar shouted loudly in his ear "have you gone insane...???"



Veer came back to his senses "what did I say??"



Manohar questioned back "what were you talking about??"



Veer diverted to look at the few shops down the hill... "lets go there..."



Manohar was astonished at Veer's unpredictable behavior "it seemed you were a completely different person and not Veer"



---



Chandni looked at Maneka "ok tell me when is Rohan coming??"



Maneka shyly smiled "he will come in December...you know after five months..."



Chandni adjusted her hair "five months is not a very long time...it seems you are so much desperate"



Maneka smiled "you are right Chandni...i am dying to meet him now...this time when he comes I will marry him..."



Chandni laughed "you are so eager to marry..."



Maneka said embarrassingly "yes yes...you laugh...you will understand when you will fall in love with someone..."



Chandni looked into her eyes "that day will never come..."



----



Kamini looked shockingly at the priest "but I don't want her to meet her fate that will betray her"



Priest smiled at Kamini "they are fated to meet one day, as when the spring comes...flowers are predestined to bloom..."



Kamini was worried "but I don't want Chandni to suffer...she is too young to face this evil..."



Priest closed his eyes and smiled "whatever happens is for good...we can only pray..."



----





Next day



Every Morning Kaka looked at the black crown in his box...no one is powerful enough to act against God's will...he only prayed God to give Veer strength to face this life... he never stopped Veer from anything...he knew he only has five months with him...his hands trembled at the thought of it...his morning always started with this fear...

he heard the door bell...he kept the box back... and wiped his moist eyes...

"good morning Kaka" Chandni said while taking off her sunglasses...



Kaka was happy to see Chandni "hello Chandni...it is so good to see you...please come in..."



---

Veer's phone was ringing continuously from last two days but he didn't bother to pick the call...he was never interested in those girls, even when he was in Mumbai...no one had the charm to indulge him in anything without his wishes...

but he found himself diverted to the new one, the urge beyond his control...



He looked at his call list and saw his girlfriend Misha's no...although he didn't even bother to tell her his whereabouts but she didn't failed to call him again and again...finally he dialed her no when he heard her voice downstairs...his attention was dragged back to Chandni...her voice was enough to capture his eye... he disconnected the phone and saw her standing near the kitchen...



She wore a short black dress, that fitted her so well...her fair skin was glowing, that could make anyone fall for her...he saw her dragging her bag and walking towards her room...



The great Veer Riachand, womanizer par was unnerved...he went back into his room for another drink...screw the brew, I need whisky...



-------***********






Edited by Freethinker - 13 years ago
sweetsanyo thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 13 years ago
so amazing ud di.😳

well i jus thought veer won't be dat easy to change.
i could have bet on thisat least i would have earned sm thng,...che!!! missed it yaar!
though under her proximity he behaves, but still the same wen away frm her.
the dialogue u gave to him during nite ws mindblasting...
well he is sooperbo in this case👍🏼-RAAT GAYI, BAAT GAYI...😎...sooperb boss.😆

in morning he ws early to wake...😲...
poor veer, can't sleep due to restlessness n chand's dreams...😆...
the dialogues u give them while they were thinking of each other were really so apt,
u deserve a pyaari, lovely shovley jhaappi here.🤗
dis ud ws best wen they think of each...
chand talking to maneka n veer to manohar.😃
gosh! veer don't want accept that she lives in him, his senses want to feel her...thats y he exclaims his love always out of consciousness, wen he is back wid his mind, he rejects...kabhi nhi sudherga yeh ladka.
same goes with his partner chand......
both are equal in attitude, consider themselves on top of world...
they both neglects that they r fallen for someone......

gosh!!!...kya hoga inka...!!
bhaagvaan bharose h yeh dono...or to say, di bharose h veer-chand coz di is writer.

u mean the black box is still intact?????????
but chand touched him right??????
then hw come?
i m confused here di...

veer thinks of calling his good for nothing gf,...why???
he wants to escape frm chandini i guess...😉...her trance is not letting him breath...
but he cuts the call as soon as he hears her voice...
dat surely means she is above all useless gals in his life for him...😳...
happy for this
she wore a short black dress, surely killed veer...😍...
n he is back is again in his very true avatar...
hats off to veer...😉..he is the one piece in world.😃
😳
terminal line- screw up brew, i wanna wishky...😆...
mind blowing again...⭐️..

so here goes ma punch line, wid no modification at all...coz ma di is as usual sopper in this ud too...but i can bring a little modification as ur writing, i m enjoying more n more...

u r amazinggg...and authentic...
love u di.🤗
ud soon.
wa8ing😳

Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
Priyart12 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
o god kaisa h ye ldka chodne ki jagh ulta chand ko drink try krne ko kh rha h 😛
or ye kya koi bhi manne ko tyar nhi h hmmm bt truth is truth
tum dono ko pyar ho gya h ji
for veer
ye ldka haaye allah kaisa h diwana
kitna mushkil h yaara isko smjhana
such me veer ko smjhana bhut mushkil h
bechara manohar pta nhi kaise jhelta hoga
bt kya kre jhelna to pdega hi akhir uska best buddy jo h 😆
veer ki gf 😡
vo hak sirf ek ka hi h chand ka
wah wah kya bat h gf ka ph cut kr diya chand ki aawaz sun kr 😳
ye to hona hi tha 😆
w8ing for next ud
Edited by princesspriyart - 13 years ago
sweetnandu thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 30 Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 13 years ago

hey.. just yesterday i was thinking about the update.. :)

story is turning too mysterious.. and dam interesting..
please reveal some secrets yaar :)
aamirkhanfan thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
great update
it is turning very interesting
ridzzi thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
awesome update...👏
veer is never going to change...but i am happy that he is controlling himself infront of chandani n not misbehaving...n not revealing his true face in front of her...😊
n they shared their feelings with their fr8's n denied it at same moment...god...what to do with them...really not able to understand...😕

''...He looked at the beautiful mountains surrounded all over the place...he could see the snow clad mountains far away..."...never have I seen anyone so beautiful, who knows when and where shall we meet again, the world can't stop me now, I have made a vow to myself...''

Kehtein hai khuda ne,Iss jahan mein sabhi ke liye
Kisi na kisi ko hai banaya,Har kisi ke liye
Tera milna hai uss rab ka ishaara
Mano mujhko banaya tere jaise hi kisi ke liye

''...Chandni took a deep breath and opened her eyes "i don't know why a stranger seems so intimate and right...i don't know why I am constantly lost in thought, anything I say...I say haltingly and fearfully..."

Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta,Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Kaise hum jaane,Humein kya pata
Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Tu humsafar hai,Phir kya fikar hai
Jeene ki wajah yahi hai,Marna isi ke liye

Kehtein hai khuda ne,Iss jahan mein sabhi ke liye
Kisi na kisi ko hai banaya,Har kisi ke liye
Ho ho ..hmm..oh ooo..hey

''...Veer smiled "because she is different...i don't know why she dwells in my heart...,i don't know what sort of bond is this...what sort of dreams are these...,i don't know why she stays every moment near my heart...he closed his eyes for a second "keep burning me with your desire, by coming into my dreams...''

Hmm..Meherbaani jaate jaate,Mujhpe kar gaya
Guzarata sa lamha ek,Daaman bhar gaya
Tera nazaara mila,Roshan sitaara mila
Takdeer ki kashtiyon ko,Kinaara mila
Sadiyon se tarse hai,Jaisi zindagi ke liye
Teri saubat mein hai,Duayein hai usi ke liye
Tera milna hai uss rab ka ishaara
Mano mujhko banaya tere jaise hi kisi ke liye
''...Chandni closed her eyes "i don't know what sort of change this is...,i don't know about the spell...all I know is that I am not in myself...someone has stolen me...,there is always a bizarre feeling around me...''
Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta,Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Kaise hum jaane,Humein kya pata
Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Tu humsafar hai,Phir kya fikar hai
Jeene ki wajah yahi hai,Marna isi ke liye

''...Chandni couldn't understand how she uttered something unusual...she wasn't unfamiliar but there was something disturbing her...''

Kehtein hai khuda ne,Iss jahan mein sabhi ke liye
Kisi na kisi ko hai banaya,Har kisi ke liye

Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta,Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Kaise hum jaane,Humein kya pata
Kuch toh hai tujhse raabta
Ho ho ..hmm..oh ooo..hey...😍


poor dadi is also in worry for chand...grandmaa...just chilax...jo bhi hota hai ache k liya hi hota hai...so don't worry...apka ye evil person hi apki princess ko is evil duniya se bachayega...he will change...ur princess will change him...dekhna...she is born for it...😉
n that box...kaka...is also worry...why is every one worried...so much......god is their for everyone n for everything...just leave it on god...he will take care of everything...
n chand is back...veer saw her...n lost...😍...i really want him realise his feelings for chand...he should understand that it's his love for chand that is making him crazy...not lust...
n thank u for the long update...🤗
update soon...
luv u...😊
Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
sparksfly thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
woow... di...dat was amazing !! 👏
just luvd it !!
Veer wont change so fast...but he atleast rembrd her words...
he was NJOYNG himself in d beautiful darjeeling all by himself !!!
pehele to he h8d d place !!!
well, jab pyaar hota hai...to sab accha lagna lagta hai... 😆
luvd d words Chadani n Veer said 2 manohar n maneka...
so..poetic...bEaUtifUl !!!!! me was lost in its ambiance...😍
n both didnt realise d powerful words they had spoken...
wats dis mystery ?? 😕
Veer is TOTALLY mesmerised - hypnotiised by Chandani !!! 😃
n she is also changng... 😉
she said she'l never fall in luv...y ??? n wats d story of her dad???😕
stOry is really xcitng !!!
u r a brilliant writer !!!
luv u...🤗
plzz ud soon...
P.S- u luk realy cUtE !!
Edited by sparksfly - 13 years ago

Related Topics

Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: jasminerahul

3 months ago

Friendship story

I am planning to write a friendship story. I will choose the love interest of Paras Kalnawat and Karan Kundra according to the choice of the...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: zajedno

7 months ago

Goodbye my mother, the whole story.

My mom. In 1943, World War II was in full swing. Various things happened in the Kopić family. One of the most recognized families in Poland at...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: sarveshjoshi42

8 years ago

Rivanya and Raina ff - Love me like you do

Ritik Mehra : Business Tycoon and Elder brother of Raghav Shivanya Kapoor : Doctor and Elder Sister of Naina and love interest of Ritik

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: sarveshjoshi42

8 years ago

Rivanya,Ishveer,Swasan and Shivika ff - Ishq wala love

Here are Characters of the Story Ritik : elder brother of Shivaay , Ranveer , Sanskar and love interest of Shivanya Shivanya : elder sister of

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: sarveshjoshi42

8 years ago

Rivanya,Ishveer,Raina,Ragsan and Vikresha ff - My love is only for u

Let's me introduced the Characters Ritik Raheja (Arjun Bijlani) : A very rich business tycoon and elder brother of Ranveer and Ragini Ranveer

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".