MayUr OS Gallery: OS 19 - Upd Pg. 114 (5/7/2011)

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sariska sujaini

@sariska_mnarti

Dazzler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#821

Lovely os

Loved it

Do write more

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Coffee

@coffee_beans

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#822

Another beautiful OS by you, Akku. The beauty of ur writing beats all ! <333

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Sabah

@a little faith

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#823

At first I thought Mayank Sharma was nervous was the title of this piece. Either way for a first verse it is tremendous enough. Stoic Sharma shaking, now that is a sight!

Maybe, he would have to die today?...What if this really is your last day on earth? 😆 cute

He decided then and there that he would get the door fixed the next day. I love such detailing that isn't sudden, just part of the narrative so doesn't throw you off course BUT at the same time prolongs the ride in a way those mini bumps of a roller coaster ride, those unexpected surprises that make it all fun.

I loved the plot device of having Nupur read aloud an article which she then negates or affirms in tone or gestures, whilst elucidating the story. Cleverly done.

his dimples digging in his cheeks Nicely penned.

I thought I was romantic Wonderful twist

I liked the whole son/ mother and father daughter symmetry and the intelligent running joke was inspired.

Lovely OS. With love, Sabah

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Fantasia.

@Fantasia.

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#824

JIGER!! 🤗. I AM BACCKK!! . .😎

Okay so starting in chronological order from where i left.. 😎

OS # 7:

🤣 😍 Wonderful Work! .. 😳

OS # 8:

ahhh . BEAUTIFUL!! .. 😍 😍
The scene where nupur was sleeping on the kitchen table, with dried tears had my heart in a fist .. 😭 .. then her disappointment and that not able to fight . SO REAL!! .. and the ending was so romantic .. 😳 .. i really love the description of kisses you give . ☺️ 🤣

OS # 9

O.M.G .. Can i just scream? .. IT WAS FREAKING AWESOME!! .. 😍 😍 .. AHHH .. Nupur going all in awe of her teacher and then her teacher giving her the most un expected remark .. ☺️ .. LOVED IT! ..

OS # 10:

*TOUCHWOOD* X INFINITY!.
awwwiiieeesss ... 😍 😍 . The Sharmas .. 😍 😍

Will be back again!! .. InshAllah,

Blessings and Love
Fantasia 🤗

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Fantasia.

@Fantasia.

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#825

Finally thread opened .. and I AM BACK!! .. after long i know .. BUT atleast i am BACK!! 😳

OS # 11

Lovely!! Had a wonderful time reading it - The characters were so apt an the ending was unexpected!!. Bravo!!

OS # 12

Ahhh!! Jiger!! You brought back the heavenly MN consummation!! 😍 BEAUTIFUL! ❤️

OS # 13

Just the way akki writes!! Excellent and crisp!!

I will be back soon jiger!! Reading your work is a treat!! 🤗

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