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Posted: 13 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: MR21

Alanta 🤗...why you are saying it a stupid thing 😡...I dont agree with you...now stop thinking that we all will give you dhakka and make you to run from the forum...


Now come up with a new story as early as possible 😃

Ramya🤗...Thanks a lot dear for the support..now after reading all your comments...I am relieved. Actually I was not confident right from the beginning of this one and now even at the time of its ending I was still having a feeling that its not up to the mark...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Far from the stupidest Alanta, as you called this SS - it has to be one of the most beautiful GK stories. I'm a sucker for metaphoric/figurative/alluded story telling, and I love how you accomplished that here, with a few diary entries - just 5 to be precise, and you had told an entire story. I loved how the Gulaal in your story was obstinate and yielding at the same time, like a person with so much love to give, that after she lost Vasant she picked a diary to give it that way, and when Kesar stepped in, she didn't resist or wall out his coming into her life consciously! When she did try to fight him - it was, like you said, too late. So in a way, this Gulaal, is more like the Gulaal from the show right after Vasant's death - who was still willing to pick up the pieces and fight for her existence and purpose - than the Gulaal in the show after a decade, who was much more an automaton than anything else!

This has to be my favorite from all your writings so far Alanta 👏 Keep writing!

xx
JZee
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww Alanta,that was so beautiful.I loved it.The way Gulaal said Goodbye to Vasant was so emotional.but I am glad that she is finally ready to take the next step with Kesar.The scene between Kesar and Gulaal was nice.Kesar knows the importance of Vasant in Gulaal's life and he doesn't mind at all.loved that.It shows his maturity.still there's that tiny feeling of hesitation in his mind na which Gulaal instantly recognizes.I loved the way she cleared away all his doubts and Vasant once again helped them out na just like in the show.This was a wonderful read Alanta and I am so happy that you decided to share it with us.and please...don't you dare call this stupid cause then I will be forced to borrow Piu's terrorist kitten and use it on you😆so no more negative talk.
ok...and please come up with a new one😃

Alanta kutty This jhappi is for you🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago
#64
arey meri virginia wolf thanks for this lovely ds i love how u bring new concept everytime and really i m becoming a huge fan of ur style lovely how gulaal use to tell her emotions about kesar to vasant it reminds of kesar who use to complain about gulaal to vasant vasant is so lively between them he was not an obstacle but an connecting link between them here gulaal could understand her feeling about kesar through vasant seriously lovely ds i hope u give us new one very soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#65
alanta 🤗 finally i got to read all the parts of DE, muahhh yaar, lovely, i loved each n every part so much n specially the part where gullu was jealous of talli ya yun kaho she wanted kesar to be with her n to concentrate on her, awww lovely 😃 😳 sorry yaar i was ghayab n late commenting forgive me yaar, n love u dear, return with some more thoughts n write ups very soon, vl wait for u 😃

P.S: I just loved loved loved the last lines where u have narrated how vasant's soul traveled to the sky being all light up n being very happy n contented to see gulaal being happy in her life with kesar 😃 it was brilliant yaar 😊

Edited by kiran_trudecent - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: JZephyr

Far from the stupidest Alanta, as you called this SS - it has to be one of the most beautiful GK stories. I'm a sucker for metaphoric/figurative/alluded story telling, and I love how you accomplished that here, with a few diary entries - just 5 to be precise, and you had told an entire story. I loved how the Gulaal in your story was obstinate and yielding at the same time, like a person with so much love to give, that after she lost Vasant she picked a diary to give it that way, and when Kesar stepped in, she didn't resist or wall out his coming into her life consciously! When she did try to fight him - it was, like you said, too late. So in a way, this Gulaal, is more like the Gulaal from the show right after Vasant's death - who was still willing to pick up the pieces and fight for her existence and purpose - than the Gulaal in the show after a decade, who was much more an automaton than anything else!


This has to be my favorite from all your writings so far Alanta 👏 Keep writing!

xx
JZee


Jzee🤗..sorry dear..I know I am quite late with the reply...
Thanks a lot Jzee..and am so glad to know that u liked this DE...your comments always inspire me a lot...Thank u so much for ur lovely comments...it means a lot😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: minizz

awww Alanta,that was so beautiful.I loved it.The way Gulaal said Goodbye to Vasant was so emotional.but I am glad that she is finally ready to take the next step with Kesar.The scene between Kesar and Gulaal was nice.Kesar knows the importance of Vasant in Gulaal's life and he doesn't mind at all.loved that.It shows his maturity.still there's that tiny feeling of hesitation in his mind na which Gulaal instantly recognizes.I loved the way she cleared away all his doubts and Vasant once again helped them out na just like in the show.This was a wonderful read Alanta and I am so happy that you decided to share it with us.and please...don't you dare call this stupid cause then I will be forced to borrow Piu's terrorist kitten and use it on you😆so no more negative talk.
ok...and please come up with a new one😃

Alanta kutty This jhappi is for you🤗


Mini..Thank u so much for liking the last part...yes Vasanth remained as an integral part here too...Thanks a lot dear..Oops Piu's terrorist kitten 😲nahin mini..aisa mat kar..Return hugs yaara🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: arti07

arey meri virginia wolf thanks for this lovely ds i love how u bring new concept everytime and really i m becoming a huge fan of ur style lovely how gulaal use to tell her emotions about kesar to vasant it reminds of kesar who use to complain about gulaal to vasant vasant is so lively between them he was not an obstacle but an connecting link between them here gulaal could understand her feeling about kesar through vasant seriously lovely ds i hope u give us new one very soon

Arti🤗..if only I could tell, how much I missed u...
...Thank u so much dear,...me getting goosebumps 😛...and am so glad that u liked it and ur comments mean a lot ..Thanks a lot once again😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: kiran_trudecent

alanta 🤗 finally i got to read all the parts of DE, muahhh yaar, lovely, i loved each n every part so much n specially the part where gullu was jealous of talli ya yun kaho she wanted kesar to be with her n to concentrate on her, awww lovely 😃 😳 sorry yaar i was ghayab n late commenting forgive me yaar, n love u dear, return with some more thoughts n write ups very soon, vl wait for u 😃

P.S: I just loved loved loved the last lines where u have narrated how vasant's soul traveled to the sky being all light up n being very happy n contented to see gulaal being happy in her life with kesar 😃 it was brilliant yaar 😊

Kiran🤗so glad to know that to know that u finally came across with all the parts of the DE...arey u caught it exactly...😳...why sorry dear..u commented na..and that itself means a lot..yeah I will try..and am so glad to know that u loved the last part..thank u for noticing it..and that was what I was trying to bring through these Diary Entries...Thanks a lot dear

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