Maaneet ff- Inhuman Ties pt25pg138/NOTE pg141

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Stuti

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Posted: 13 years ago

#651

awesome update shivu 👏👏

loved the part... maan finally proved innocent :DDD

the gunda's yr... what re! lol...

thanx for the pm ;)

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#652

Originally posted by: piya-
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Hey my darling sis what a wonderful update

The best part was Maan was prooven innocent and that too by Geet

Ok here is a stupid poem from me I am assuming that Geet is narrating this poem

"Humare beech chahe laakh faasle aa jaaye tab bhi main ye jhutla nahi sakthi k mujhe tumhari parwah hai

Duniya k saamne laakh jhooth bol lu par khud ki hi parchaye se darr lagta hai..kyunki aaj bhi issmein mujhe tumhara saaya nazar aatha hai

Iss dil ka kya karu jo marke bhi tumhare naam se dhadkne ki gustakhi karta hai

Main laakh tumhe bhulana chahu par phir bhi meri yaado mein ek bus tumhara hi basera hai

Kal chahe jo bhi ho par mere rehthe tumpar koi musibat aaye aisa main hone nahi dungi

Apni nafrat ko kabhi bhi tumhare mohabbat k saamne kamzoor nahi hone dungi"

Ok Shivu now don't be angry with your Di pata hai iss update ka first comment aur wo bhi maine apni bakwas poem se spoil kar diya...

Hmm...so Abhijeet finally apne dil ki baat maan hi gaya no ways Geet is not a vampire...Hotha hai Abi pyar mein dimag thoda kam kaam karta hai

Good to see ACP apologising to Maan ... najaane Maan ko kya kuch nahi suna diya

Continue soon my jaan

And yes don't b sorry next time MH ka summary tum hi likhogi I will wait for u

Love u and once again sorry for my stupid poem

-Piya

haw dekho zaraa...itni khubsoorat poem ko stupid keh rahi hai! 😆 kisi ko bhi sunaongi na...to wo paagal ho jayega...next Update mein poem to pakka add hogi!

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#653

Originally posted by: stuti_naksh4eva
awesome update shivu 👏👏

loved the part... maan finally proved innocent :DDD

the gunda's yr... what re! lol...

thanx for the pm ;)

tu phir se thanks bol rahi hai?

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#654

Originally posted by: pratiksha2009
thanks god man save form trouble yeah finally , good yaar no thanks yr, but maan ke barme sochte hui hunting kar rahi thi yup...so to hai, this is not good kyun re?, are hamare abhay ko dekho kabhi hunting karte hue dikhta nahi wo to sahi hai...humesha un lights ke paas daudta dikhta hai, lekin jab plan karta hai tab sirf plan ke bare mai hi sochta hai maine notice nahi kiya, isliye to pichli baar party mai aaya to vampire ko dhudne yeah pia aur alina ko dekhne ke bajay vampire ko dekh raha tha kya kare bechara 😉😆, anywas topic change ho gaya arey haan..., abhijit thinks geet is not vampire yup..., very good kyun... abhijeet ko Geet maar hi de to achcha hai, uski health ke liye accha hai hmmm, maan ke upar se ek charge hatgayayeah... hat hi gaya, kahi aur problem mai to nahi fasega wo problem prone hai😆, aur philosophy vampire se kubsurti se kabhi cid bhi dele dimag wale ban jate hai, itne sare reason milte hai fir bhi yakin nahi karte, jah ho 😆 amazing philosophy🤣

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#655

Part 22
Poem by my Piya di:

Humare beech chahe laakh faasle aa jaaye tab bhi main ye jhutla nahi sakthi k mujhe tumhari parwah hai

Duniya k saamne laakh jhooth bol lu par khud ki hi parchaye se darr lagta hai..kyunki aaj bhi issmein mujhe tumhara saaya nazar aatha hai

Iss dil ka kya karu jo marke bhi tumhare naam se dhadkne ki gustakhi karta hai

Main laakh tumhe bhulana chahu par phir bhi meri yaado mein ek bus tumhara hi basera hai

Kal chahe jo bhi ho par mere rehthe tumpar koi musibat aaye aisa main hone nahi dungi

Apni nafrat ko kabhi bhi tumhare mohabbat k saamne kamzoor nahi hone dungi

Next Morning:

Maan woke up early and found that Geet was not sleeping in her room. Rather she stood in the lobby gazing at the wall. Maan got up and put on his clothes- Black shirt with a black over coat. Upper two buttons were open showing his bare chest. He put on his watch and then his leather boots. When he was coming out he saw that Geet stood like a statue- not moving at all. She never blinked her eyes nor did her chest expand denoting she wasn't breathing.

Maan: Geet! Main chalta hoon!

Geet turned back. Maan was shocked to see her eyes. They were blood red.

Maan: Geet! Tumhari aankhein?

Geet gave him a confused expression: ji!

Maan: tumhare aankhein are super creepy!

Geet looked at her reflection in the painting. What blunder she had done? She was thinking about Maithili and the nomads and whoa! She did look creepy with those eyes. She quickly pretended to rub them: kuch chala gaya hoga! Waise Mr. Khurana, aap jaa rahe the?

Maan: hmm! Bye!

Geet didn't reply.

*~*~*~*

Milind: arey Maan! Tum bina khaye hi chale jaoge?

Maan: nahi main theek hoon...waise bhi mujhe naashte mein-

Ayesha: pasta aur dark coffee chahiye! Hum jaante hai!

Maan: yeah!

Ayesha: aaiyye! Sab tayyar hai!

Maan sat down to eat. As soon as he gulped a bite, his eyes moistened.

Maan: yeh kisne banaya hai?

Ayesha: maine aur Leher ne...kyun achcha nahi hai?

Maan(thoughts): Geet, tumhare haathon se bani cheezon ko pehchanne mein kabhi dhoka kha hi nahi sakta. Un dino ke yahi to kuch yaadein hai mere paas...unhe main kabhi dhundli nahi hone dunga! Kabhi nahi! Chahe hum saath ho ya na ho!

Geet was hearing his thoughts. It was nearly impossible to control her emotions!!

Good Morning Mr. Khurana

Maan turned back and saw ACP sir standing at the door. He quickly stood up in reverence

Aap baithe rahiye!! Hum to aapka haal janne aaye the!

Maan: main theek hoon! Dekhiye!

Great!!

Meanwhile, Abhijeet went near Geet and hugged her passionately: good morning doctor!

Geet: heya Abhijeet!

Abhijeet: chaliye!

Geet: kahaan?

Abhijeet: aap main aur backpiper!!

Geet: what!! 😆

Abhijeet: just kidding, ek coffee pe chalte hai!!

Geet: umm...

She looked at Milind. He signaled her that it was ok if she went. But one thing she had forgotten to inform him so she communicated with his thoughts

Geet: Milind, kal raat humare compound mein ek ajeeb se gandh thi! Na ek janwar ki aur na hi kisi Vampire ki! Us gandh mein samudri namak ki bhi khushboo thi! Koi hum pe nazar rakh raha hai shayad!

Milind: hmm, Abeer aur Leher abhi jaate hai! Main bhejta hoon!

Geet: dhyan rakhna! Aur Maan ko akele mat jaane dena!

Milind: kyun?

Geet: agar Maan pur khoon ka ilzam laga hai! To iska matlab hai ki Maan ke khilaaf koi bahut gehri saazish ki jaa rahi hai!

Milind: hmm, theek hai! Tum jao!

Geet: yeah!

Geet: chale Abhijeet! (to ACP) sir hum thodi der mein report karte hai! Lekin emergency ho to please bula lijiyega!

ACP: hmm, jao jaldi phir!

Abhijeet: thank you sir!!

*~*~*~*

Maan had finished his food and was burning with anger and jealousy. But around he could see Milind roaming to and fro in tension. Abeer and Leher were out hunting for the scent and Ayesha was using her mind tricks to detect the trespassers. But to Maan, it was a situation of grave tension.

Maan: Milind, main chalta hoon!

Milind(absent mindedly forgetting Geet's caution): hmm! Bye!

Maan: bye!

Maan was driving back to his hotel. The window pane of his car was pulled down and he was enjoying the smell of dew over the quivering leaves. Moreover, yesterday whatever happened had made him really happy. But suddenly, he had to apply brakes. A pregnant woman was lying helplessly on the road and his husband was shouting for help. Maan came out and ran towards them.

Maan: kya hua! Aap chaliye meri gaadi mein...main aapko hospital le chalta hoon.

Man: dhanyawaad sahab! Aapki badi meherbani hogi! Aap do minute rukiye...main samaan lekar aaya!

Maan: aap chinta na kare!

And saying this...the man disappeared. Soon...a heavy iron rod banged into Maan's head.

*~*~*~*

Geet and Abhijeet were sitting in their favourite coffee shop. Geet sat there sipping coffee.

Abhijeet: waise abhi thode din baad Police Felicitation Function hai! Aap aa rahi hai na?

Geet: ab main to doctor hoon!

Abhijeet: but you're a cop. After all aapko army training bhi mili hai na!

Geet: hmm, agar invite hoga to why not! After all, aapka samman hoga aur meri team ka samman ho to mujhe wahaan hona chahiye.

Suddenly, Geet started feeling restless.

Abhijeet: aap theek hai?

Geet: Abhijeet, main jaati hoon! I am not feeling good!

Abhijeet: main aapko chhod doon?

Geet: no its fine! Main chali jaungi! Waise aap Bureau jaiiye! Main bhi aati hoon!

Abhijeet: jaisa aap chahe! Aap theek hai na!

Geet: yeah! No! I mean yeah I am ok!

Abhijeet: ok!

*~*~*~*

Geet was scuttling through the forest trying to sense what was wrong. But all she could see was Maan in her closed eyes! And then she suddenly stopped.

Maithili: look whose here!

Geet stopped: Maithili!

Maithili: aaj to tum khud bakhud humare changul mein phans gayi!

Geet smirked: really!! Is ghalat faimi mein mat rehna Maithili!

Siddharth: really Geet!!

Geet saw Siddharth appearing from behind Maithili. She moved back not in fear but she wanted to escape but she was trapped.

Maithili: you're too subtle Geet

Siddharth: tumne agar us din us insaan ko humare liye chhod diya hota to shayad

Geet: kill me! If you can!

Maithili became angry at this mock and she opened her fangs and pounced towards Geet. Geet was ready; she whooshed away from there and then caught Maithili by her neck. Siddharth was about to attack Geet from behind when cold masculine hands caught him and nailed him to the ground. Another set of feminine hands encircled Maithili's neck helping Geet.

Geet turned back and saw Maithili's look alike gazing at Geet smiling. Her eyes widened in shock.

Piya: Abhay, get Siddharth back to mom! I am taking Maithili.

Abhay: no ways, you take this newborn away... I'll take care of them both.

*~*~*~*

Geet: who are you?

Piya: I am Piya, Piya Raichand! You?

Geet: Geet Khurana! You look exactly-

Piya: like Maithili...she's my sister-in-law, my husband Abhay's brother's wife!

Geet: why did you save me?

Piya: kyunki hum mom-dad ke tareeko se tang aa chuke hai! Tum kahin jaa rahi thi?

Geet: oh ya! Thanks! And hope to see you again.

Piya: of course! Take care!

Geet: hmm

*~*~*~*

MILIND!!! MAAN KAHAAN HAI???

Milind: Geet chillax!

Geet: WHERE'S MAAAN??

Milind: we let him go!

Geet: why did you- I told you Milind...how could...

And she banged the door behind her. Geet blindly searched for Maan's scent along the highway and some 21 km. away she found his car. She ran towards it and found that his things were out. She searched for him taking long breaths to intake his scent when her nose caught the scent of blood. She looked around and then saw some blood some yards away from the car.

Geet: omg! No!

She ran and scented the blood. It was Maan's blood.

Geet: MAAN!! MAAANN!! Kahaan hai aap? Mujhse baat kijiye Maan!

I am trying Abhiya telepathy here...let's see...

*~*~*~*

Maan was tied from the roof. He was hanging from the roof with only his hands and legs tied to the hooks. One of his eyes was swollen because of blood accumulation and drops of blood dropped from his head. His chest was torn with knife marks. He was sweating profusely.

Maan, mujhse baat kijiye please!!

Maan opened his intact eye: Geet! Kahaan ho tum!

Geet was happy to hear his voice

Geet: kahaan hai aap?

Maan: main nahi jaanta Geet! Pyaas! Mujhe pyaas lagi hai! Paani!

Geet: Maan! Idhar udhar dekhiye...kuch hoga! Dekhiye...koi matka...glass!

Maan: mere haath...chhat se latke hain! Aur pair bhi...main hil nahi sakta

Geet roared: I'll kill them... Maan aap dekhiye...aap kahaan hai! Main aa rahi hoon!

Maan: Geet! Geet...Geet

And his voice vanished in the loom. Geet's eyes were burning with pain when Abhijeet jerked her.

Geet: haan!

Abhijeet: Geet!! Maan kidnapped!

Geet: hmm pata hai!

Abhijeet: aapko kaise?

Geet: yeh car!

Abhijeet: aur yeh letter aaya hai!

Geet: kaisa letter

Abhijeet: firauti!

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Edited by CIDMaaneetNaksh - 13 years ago

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Stuti

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Posted: 13 years ago

#656

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wowww... mind blowing amazing awesome part shivu... just loved the update!!!
i can never write such a thoughtful story... i m waiting for the next update.. Geet's struggle to find maan...

the storyline is really awesome... keep it up shivu... loved it!

Edited by stuti_naksh4eva - 13 years ago

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Divya Nair (aka Piya)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#657

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Hey my laadli I m so sorry jaan was thoda busy yaar

ok the update Geet ne maan k liye breakfast banaya and maan recognized it

Poor geet is in a big dilemma cannot understand k usse kya karna chahiye maan se pyar ya nafrat...

abhijeet ko tho mauke ki talash rehthi hai geet k paas aane ka

hmm...good geet met Abhiya would like to see their friendship

ye kya shivu maan ko kidnap karwa diya mera maan itna kamzoor kabse hone lag gaya

ok so my laadli is angry with me

Humare dil ka ek hissa humse rutha hua hai

Ab kya kahe unhe humse ruthne ka pura haq hai

Galthi toh humari thi shikayat bhi toh nahi kar sakthe

Ab sochthe hai unhe hum manaye bhi toh kaise manana toh hume aata hi nahi

Kuch galat keh diya toh darte hai kahi wo kuch aur khafa na ho jaaye

Aisa wo kar bhi le tab bhi koi shikwa nahi unhe hume tadpane ka pura haq hai

Bus dua kar sakthe hai k kaash wo humpar ek ehsaan kar de hume apni maafi dekar

Vaada karte hai rahenge aapke karazdaar uhi umrbhar

Ek baar maaf kar dho Shivu Pls😳😳😳

lOVE- Piya

Edited by piya- - 13 years ago

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Rashmi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#658

Shivi awsum update👏 how do u manage two ff yaar😛 maithili sid ki wife bana diya amazing😆 geet kitni pareshan hai maan ke liye hope maan is alright😳 aur abhijeet itni care geet ke liye😉 precap daravne😲 hai waiting for next part🤗

Edited by strawberryrashu - 13 years ago

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Pratiksha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#659

ye abhijit kuch jyada hi nahi chip raha geet se, cid mai to doctor tarika se bhi itna nahi chipka tha, sudhar ja bacchu nahi to jhoote padege😆, by the way pia ka roll yaha par maan kar raha hai😉, jab bhi dekho problem mai fasta raehta hai, aur haila mere abhiya ne geet ko bacha liya, firse abhay ne prove kiya ki wo puri duniya ka masiha hai, haila maithli sid ke wife ban gayi not bad not bad, abhiya ke piche trangle ki jhajat nahi, aur telepathi ka kya kehna, abhiya ke yaad dila de, jab wo hotel room dhudne wala mar raha tha tab pia ne abhay se telepathi ke thi aur use bachane ka ghor pap kiya tha, chalo yaha par geet maan ko bacha rahi hai accha hai 😆, waise nice update, philosophy kya likhu, vampires ke telepathy se unko kitna fayda hota hai, to kya wo dinner time ke liya bhi sabko aise hi bulate honge 😆, dinner serve ho chuka hai sab aavo aur apne pet puja karo😆, muje pata hai ye thoda childish hai lekin meri marji , once again awesome update

Edited by pratiksha2009 - 13 years ago