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without-fathom

@without-fathom

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: sharneil92
JZee, a question, are you a fan of poetry? or at least do you like to read poems? i sometimes become a bit abnormal and read random poems here and there, and believe me, no prose has ever sounded so emotive! i have always firmly believed that nothing like a poem can depict emotions that one feels! no love letter, long admiration speech, yada yada can ever completely portray one's emotions, with what a couple of lines of a love poem can! like many say, poetry is the food of love! and that was my firm belief until now!

man, i have never seen a prose so well written and precisely emoted! i mean, you have created a beautiful medley of the emotions he's experiencing in this phase of his life that one calls "in love", in a paragraph so wonderfully! JZee, i'm sure i'm not the only one here feeling privileged to have read your so called absolutely delightful "drabbles". you demean your work by saying so! this is... oh my god, i dont know what to call this! the utter perfection and poshness of your work cannot be calibrated with using words to describe it. this is.. well... AWESOME! like REALLY awesome!

i shall use arti's awesome emoticons now!

Shalu 🤗 You're a spoiling reader with so much nice stuff to say, not even kidding! Not that I can complain, lol! To answer you, yes, poetry is kinda inevitable in my major of study - although I have always made conscious efforts to not take core poetry classes for any graded credits, ever! There's too much scope of variable interpretation and further, misinterpretation in poetry and I was always skeptical and prose has just always seemed the safer of options to claim 😆 I do have favorites among poets though, nonetheless.

Also, I call them drabbles because there's no story building here, not even to fit in as a vignette, so it's just a drabble-ramble! 😆

I shall totally do more of them - especially with the given story line.

Thank you so much for commenting!

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Bzee

@Bzee

Beginner

Posted: 14 years ago

#12

JZephyr - Just Beautiful how you have tried to capture the expanse of emotions and the depth of reactions these wonderful GK scenes generate in the viewer (I feel like somewhere deep down, you can experience the details of what you wonderfully wrote..hence we love GK so much!) ...Like it was said in one of the other posts, I still cannot believe how perfectly and beautifully this TV show is portrayed.

I would like to introduce myself here - I have been reading on this forum since mid-June, when I actually started watching this show...You all (JZephyr, JZee, Nach_Baliye, Lennie, Goldie - to name a few) and many more, write, interpret and express about the episodes so eloquently, I was just compelled to join in and write my appreciation to you all. Here in the US, I have to wait until 9.00 pm (or get out of work at least) before I can watch any video, but of course, I eagerly await the discussion on the forum in the afternoon (my lunchtime!) to learn what transpired in the show...and spend many happy thoughts in anticipation...😊 The show has got me so hooked, I remember I started watching this show since I happened to turn the tv on and Kesar-Talli engagement scene episode (can't exactly remember when). I am actually not any kind of tv watcher at all...but GK got me so hooked, I went back and have watched many previous episodes and GK scenes multiple times since then!

I was introspecting on what about this love story generates that kind of a thirst, eagerness, addiction, involevment in me...but my thoughts sync so well with you guys - the cast, and GK (K is to die for, G is fantastic - I still cannot believe any actor can be as good as these two) Just the scenes where K only looks at G are so magical...Its just a notch above anything I have ever felt drawn to.

Again, thank you all, and to echo what soome others have said - reading about it, and then going back and rewatching the beautiful scenes - just enjoy it incredibly more!

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sharneil92

@sharneil92

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Posted: 14 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: JZephyr
Shalu 🤗 You're a spoiling reader with so much nice stuff to say, not even kidding! Not that I can complain, lol! To answer you, yes, poetry is kinda inevitable in my major of study - although I have always made conscious efforts to not take core poetry classes for any graded credits, ever! There's too much scope of variable interpretation and further, misinterpretation in poetry and I was always skeptical and prose has just always seemed the safer of options to claim 😆 I do have favorites among poets though, nonetheless.

Also, I call them drabbles because there's no story building here, not even to fit in as a vignette, so it's just a drabble-ramble! 😆

I shall totally do more of them - especially with the given story line.

Thank you so much for commenting!

JZee 🤗 and you're too modest for your own good, not even kidding! Ah! Academic pressure... I understand. 😳 hehehe...

whatever you call it, i call it utter brilliance.😳

and yes, you should do more of them! or else i'll have ur hide!😆😳

nah... i'm too sweet to do that!😳

and THANK YOU for sharing it with us!😳

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aimin

@aimin

Explorer

Posted: 14 years ago

#14

Yeah I know, I'm here, the shock, eh? :P Just came around & saw this, had to comment even if a teeny one. You know how much I love your writing though I confess, the moment I saw this thread I wondered why the mini eyedrop dose-sized drabbles? (seemed so unlike you >_>) But well, after reading it, let's just say you've given a whole new meaning to short & sweet. :)

You're awesome as always, Lil. ^_^

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Incense

@Incense

Sparkler

Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: Gman

Shrusti, I am 2. What a writing it is?

me three !

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-Srushti-

@-Srushti-

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 14 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: arti07

me three !

You copypasted you lazy bum 😡😆

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Incense

@Incense

Sparkler

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: -Srushti-

You copypasted you lazy bum 😡😆

no i copy pasted only the emoticon...i wrote "me three" see its different ( three tongues to u ) need to go nahi to jzee will come after me with that potato sack😳

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Gman

@Gman

Navigator

Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Lazy Bum 🤣

Aarti knows it, right Aarti?

Edited by Gman - 14 years ago

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Bothering Echoes

Her eyes can't help but show that flickering change of expression, which her impassionate face will not. A reflection of something that shifts - unknown to her willful mind and its resolute reigns - inside of her heart, at his words. 3 months.

A day out with her girlfriends, has come like a bolt from the blue to pierce through the rigorous monotony of her years, and although she's no where closer to finding what hit her, and how, just being here and now in this stolen moment from a happy chapter of her past, she subconsciously shuts out any reminder of her complicated present.

Except, Bulbul and Dhani don't comply with this secret pretend plan. They have to sour her moments. They have to make repeated remarks about her pati, Kesarji. They have to laud his 'love', they have to tease her 'luck', and they have to mock sympathize with their own lack of both, in comparison.

Until… they beckon him to give his wife a push on the swing to her heart's content. Itna to karo apni patni ke liye! He falters and averts gaze, fumbles with words of denial that are half hearted, because wouldn't he do just anything for her, anything, if she thought his place? Sadly, ignorance is no longer his best friend, and he knows better. Should he dare hope she would take his pushing her on the swing in the stride of the moment of harmless fun? He hears her own protests with her friends' suggestion and dares not; adds his own weak resisting, and hopes the interruption will pass without dwelling to become a moment of greater test.

Alas! She jumps off the swing, gives Bulbul and Dhani an earful - which they neither deserve nor comprehend- , stomps her feet walking away. And he snaps out of his brief lull of frugal hope.

Stopping Gulaal in her tracks on this impulsive walk out. He tells her what she knows – what they, her best friends, don't know – he tells her to not be a killjoy in this reunion for something that doesn't matter – and her eyes shoot up to his… teen mahine baad vaise bhi sab khatam hone wala haina? – it jolts a reality inside of her, and in chain reaction come rushing back all the truths she has conveniently brushed away to live this one day in her life.

He reasons further, about not upsetting them, about them being true friends, about letting the matter go… but her head is reeling from the operative words – 3 months.

Which is the flickering ghost of expression in her eyes, as she looks at him. Just like the ghost of his own smile as he nods in urging for her to go back.

Her rant is silenced, even forgotten. For now there is only this mysterious quality of her reaction to his words, that she can't fathom… and is mildly bothered by.

The last time he'd spoken the words – 3 months to an end – there were tears in his eyes, plea in his words – to give them their last chance at camaraderie, and just that. This time, the aura about him is only stoic peace, and that unsettles her, if only just a bit.

She turns around slowly, and walks back to her friends – who, so to subtly say, look on at her in confused anticipation. She makes up some glib about joking, they exchange watery smiles… but then she just rounds them up in a hug.

A hug of assurance she needs. In her mind echo his words … 3 months… and she remembers her practical lesson of a long time ago, to a young boy of 12, explaining the meaning of goonj.

The echoes of past and present overlap inside her head, and she tightens her hug with her girlfriends.

He smiles, an onlooker, he watches her. Then he sighs, and turns his head away.

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*edit*

Happy birthday Geesh!

ps: I realize this one is more dramatic than the others with my wild ideas finding more flight than they should, except that fluke hit in the end about Gulaal's mind set... I'm going to work on toning down with the next, lol!

Edited by JZephyr - 13 years ago

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Bzee
JZephyr - Just Beautiful how you have tried to capture the expanse of emotions and the depth of reactions these wonderful GK scenes generate in the viewer (I feel like somewhere deep down, you can experience the details of what you wonderfully wrote..hence we love GK so much!) ...Like it was said in one of the other posts, I still cannot believe how perfectly and beautifully this TV show is portrayed.

I would like to introduce myself here - I have been reading on this forum since mid-June, when I actually started watching this show...You all (JZephyr, JZee, Nach_Baliye, Lennie, Goldie - to name a few) and many more, write, interpret and express about the episodes so eloquently, I was just compelled to join in and write my appreciation to you all. Here in the US, I have to wait until 9.00 pm (or get out of work at least) before I can watch any video, but of course, I eagerly await the discussion on the forum in the afternoon (my lunchtime!) to learn what transpired in the show...and spend many happy thoughts in anticipation...😊 The show has got me so hooked, I remember I started watching this show since I happened to turn the tv on and Kesar-Talli engagement scene episode (can't exactly remember when). I am actually not any kind of tv watcher at all...but GK got me so hooked, I went back and have watched many previous episodes and GK scenes multiple times since then!

I was introspecting on what about this love story generates that kind of a thirst, eagerness, addiction, involevment in me...but my thoughts sync so well with you guys - the cast, and GK (K is to die for, G is fantastic - I still cannot believe any actor can be as good as these two) Just the scenes where K only looks at G are so magical...Its just a notch above anything I have ever felt drawn to.

Again, thank you all, and to echo what soome others have said - reading about it, and then going back and rewatching the beautiful scenes - just enjoy it incredibly more!

Hey BZee! I realize our names sort of rhyme 😆

Thank you for your very encouraging comment - I feel especially smug about the fact that your very first comment on this forum is on this thread, so I'll pat myself for that - and more thanks for the bit in bold, in your comment.

As for the way you got hooked to the show - we share that history, I started watching only a little before you ... and had to go right back and dig out everything about the show, it's so utterly engaging!

hope to see more of you around, now that you are a registered active member (:

JZee