an AR experiment [DMG] - Page 9

Heyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

hey aria..nice part..

heyyy aria !! :D

WOW!!!
that was fab!!!!!
pls make it a fanfic!!!!!!!!!
cont soon
luv shai

Aru!!
This was sort of structured as a prose poem; the meterical flow, the pace and the sort of reflection of an ordinary speech rather than the rhythmic flow and the normal verse structure of a poem. It was a beautiful read.. I was lost in the fact, that such a small gesture of helping someone up the floor could be written out so brilliantly.

Each and every description of his action and the effects they had on her were wonderfully described and penned. Each words flowed like honey..(hmm..I want some honey on roti now..lol)

You know, this sort of reminded me of a one shot that my sister wrote, not the writing or anything else more so the general idea behind this. In terms of writing, they are completely different, hers was from his point of view and it was quite different. Ah well leaving all that aside, I was just thinking that one thing I like about your writing is the easy flow of words. There is no pronounced rhythm, yet the flow of words come naturally to you...for instance with Shakespeare, he wrote most his plays and poems in iambic pentameter form and was he brilliant at that or what. So basically my point here is that, your strength lies in the way you string the words so flawlessly and beautifully. It takes you to an unknown land of desires.

So my favourite death has to be the 3rd and the 4th, both for varied yet the same reasons. 3rd, just coz it was intense and passionate. Whereas the 4th just coz it was innocent to a point and yet intense at the same time.

To answer your question, no don't turn this in to a fanfic. Let it be the way it is, and if you want to write another part then I am with Sookie in this about may be writing a meeting after a few years? But I don't know why, I prefer the way it is..the unexpected end..let the mystery reamin unfolded..lol

I read your reply to my previous comment, makes more sense now.. will try and reply later..don't know when that will be..😆
This took me a while to write, eid..hence relatives popping in and out.. *sigh*

Before I forget..I just realised you had Monty Python reference in lost and found.. only you could do that Aru..😆

Humzy..

U updated!!!!!

Hmm...honestly the state i am in right now (with a slight hang over and major sleepy head)....i can't recall the preceding part of this one..so i am sticking to it as a one time piece..(really 'one shot' is a bad nick i think :D)..

It was very nicey...and for a second i thought of you (yes u, who i have never met and seen :P)....in somebody's arms..and it was a scene from a portrait in a rich pastel painting exhibition...a beauty you see,let it sink in and then most often just walk away with a smile that refuses to leave your mind in a lesser havoc...agreeing to your will of letting it stay for longer than it does..

:) write more such..you do well to this!

cheers,

nij

ps: sad you couldn't make it here...next time..whenever it shall be..:)

Originally posted by: Prinnia

Heyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

that was awesome

starting was mindblowing

loved it

keep continue

thanks for the pm

lots of love

Prinnia

thank you for commenting Prinnia. glad you enjoyed reading it. and you are welcome for the PM