an AR experiment [DMG] - Page 7

Originally posted by: Pebblez

halfway through, i had NO idea what was going on, and i sorely blame it on this damn cold i am suffering from....but a great read aria, i liked it tons!! :) sorry, for now there's no detailed comments, um totally zonked out!

Kiran

Originally posted by: missypatel

*Looks at the title bar...and stares at the date...* 🤔

😆

Originally posted by: *Huma*

Aru, I am finally here, a bit later than promised.. sorry about that. Urmm..so this part was a closure of some sort for the earlier part, I guess I can understand what made you want to write this on a whim. It answers a lot of peoples questions, and the enigma behind the previous part.ok first i am really mad, not with you, but with IF!!😡 I had got to the end of my reply, and the page went kaput! now i am starting over again, i know i cant remember all that i wrote. that makes me mad...
now coming to your comment, spot on with your observation

So her search has finally come to an end, or should I say that he has found what he had lost. The italics for lost, coz I think we never loose things or people in this case; we either deviate from it, or become aloof to it. In his case, that is the way I decided to see it...he didn't loose her, but he detached himself from her, again it might just be me and my weird mind, it does like to go in to overdrive, and especially when it comes to your writings..😆 what i had in mind as i wrote this was - her search came to an end at the end of the first part, when she realised the loved him. standing at the middle of the crowd, even though she had not yet found him literally she had found him in a way!so even if she was literally searching for him as he was missing but she found herself...so in reality he had never lost. She was the one that lost him literally in the crowd...and yet as he watched her amidst the crowd, standing, he understood what had finally dawned upon her, and at that moment he found her (as in being his's her!) that was the basic idea in my head.

Oh I just realised something, I re-read it and saw that you had mentioned that he decided to ignore the obvious about him being in love..my bad. Well, so my thinking was right then, he did detach himslef from her..lol. Ahhh, I have no idea what boat I am on right now..😆 just going around in circle..ignore me please. yes he detached himself from her as in, he was perceived to be lost..let me quote the last line from part 1-

"And that's when I stopped in my tracks, while the dancing masked chameleons pushed me around..."

he purposely distanced himself from her, but was still following her around, but at that moment when the reality dawned upon her(that she loved him), he found her (as in being his)

I think someone already pointed out these lines: innocuous things we come up with- and how they conspire with the higher forces to bring out hidden truths..absolutely true

Aru, nothing can hold more truth in life, and these lines..they hold as much importance as breathing.

For some odd reason, I preferred to pay more attention to the words written before me, then the depth they held this time. Credit for that goes to the way you weave the words so magically.

My favourite part was the conversation between the old man and him, I don't think what I am going to write next is going to make any sense...but here it goes. So his answer to his own question about dream, and then her answer to the old mans question..This is what I made out from it; his answer came because he had not expressed his love, hence I would have said that he dreams in the language of love and hope. After their meeting; both their language of dreams have changed hers from search and his from hope and love to the language of their hearts. Like I said previously, I make no sense at all, me and my over analysing self. his question was a reply of a young man hopelessly consumed in love- who had just found the love if his life and was en route to propose marriage to her, holding on to the ring in his pocket. It was a reply that said more than what the man could understand as those words meant so much to their new found togetherness...and he does not let the man answer. In the end, the man replies, as he walks past the lovers on the bridge by repeating the same qs. he indicates that at least he understands the depth of those words to the young couple even if he did not understand anything else...i dont know if any of that made sense

Aru, I am going to copy the first four lines from Search in my old shayri copy; I think its something that's easy to relate to in many situations. I hope you don't mind. Btw, you said its part of a poem, so why not post the whole thing?? If its not too much of an ask. i need to find the poem

Aru, a massive jhappi..🤗 I love this shots. Thankies..
thanks for commenting. 🤗
Aru

Love ya...
Humzy

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illusion it is,

i'm undecided whether this is a full-fledged fanfic or just a two part thing. i am posting it here, for now, as part one of what could be followed by a second one. let me know what you think. a little insider info, till the end of the first para, i was undecided whether to make this a poem or a conventional story. why am i talking about this, because i feel its structured this piece in a unique way