Dil Beparwah...Oblivious heart...RishMi TanShi SS - Page 5

Part 5

Brilliant update.... awesomely written

thanks for the pm

Yesss finally he will learn about Lakshmi being raped

I hope Rishi also accepts Tanu

Actually Lakshmi's past won't be exactly like the movie satyaprem ki kahani.

Thanks a lot.

Originally posted by: MochaQueen

Yesss finally he will learn about Lakshmi being raped

I hope Rishi also accepts Tanu

Originally posted by: jasminerahul

Actually Lakshmi's past won't be exactly like the movie satyaprem ki kahani.

Thanks a lot.

I'm glad you changed it instead of making it predictable

It's not completely different from the movie,but its not exactly the same also.There will be some similarities.

Originally posted by: MochaQueen

I'm glad you changed it instead of making it predictable

Thank you very much

Salley

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Dil Beparwah...Oblivious heart...Part 6

Rishikesh and Lakshmi started romancing passionately.

Suddenly she got remembered something and cried in an abnormal way.

Rishikesh was shocked.

Rishikesh:What happened Lakshmi?

Lakshmi:I am not ready.Please don't force me.

Rishikesh was shocked.

Lakshmi cried:Please Ballu...don't force me.

Rishikesh was stunned.

Rishikesh:Ballu?Lakshmi...I am Rishi,not Ballu.

Lakshmi came back to her senses and wiped her tears.

Lakshmi:I am sorry Rishi.

Rishikesh thought:She looks so scared.Who is Ballu?How is her fear related to Ballu?

He caressed her head:It's alright Lakshmi.You take rest.

Rishikesh covered her with the blanket.

After some time....

Lakshmi went near Rishikesh.

Lakshmi:You are feeling bad.Right?

Rishikesh:Nothing like that.

Lakshmi:I can understand your feelings.But what to do?I am not able to control myself.

Her tears rolled down her cheeks.

Rishikesh:Lakshmi...don't be upset.I will wait till you get ready.

Lakshmi was silent.

Lakshmi:I told you that I wanted to tell you about my past.But you were not willing to listen.But atleast now you listen to it.I want to release the burden I am carrying in my mind.

Rishikesh:If you feel relief by sharing your past with me,you can share.Who is Ballu?Is he related to your past?

Lakshmi nodded.

Lakshmi:Ballu is Balwinder who is my ex-boy friend.

Flash back....

Balwinder and Lakshmi were happily dating each other.

Once Lakshmi visited his home.He was alone there.

Balwinder embraced Lakshmi from behind.

Lakshmi smiled at him.He carried her in his arms and walked to the bed.

Lakshmi:Ballu...what is this?Why are you taking me to the bed?

Balwinder placed her on the bed.

Balwinder:To do what lovers usually do.

He tried to kiss her sensually.Lakshmi was shocked.

Lakshmi:No Ballu..please...

Balwinder:Why Lakshmi?

Lakshmi:I am not ready Ballu.Please try to understand.

Balwinder:How can you say that?We love each other.

Lakshmi:But I can't do this now.I want to go.

Lakshmi tried to get up and go.But Balwinder pushed her to the bed.

Lakshmi got scared.

Lakshmi:Ballu!Let me go.

Balwinder did not listen to her and moved closer to her.He held her hands tight.

Lakshmi cried:Please Ballu...I am not ready.

But without listening to her,he started molesting her.Lakshmi managed to take the flower vase from the nearby table and hit his head.Lakshmi pushed him and ran out.

Present...

Rishikesh was relieved.

Rishikesh:Thank God!He could not rape you.

Lakshmi:I escaped from a brutal rape.But it's not easy for a girl like you think.Even though I was not raped I went through sexual harassment. It affected me very badly and it still haunts me.

Rishikesh became upset.

Lakshmi:My parents got Balwinder arrested.But that incident killed me mentally.I was under psychiatric treatment.Now also I have medicine secretly.

Rishikesh was shocked.

Lakshmi:I wanted to tell you this before marriage itself.But my parents did not want you to know it.Because they knew that no boy will agree to marry a psychiatric patient.

Neelam overheard it with a shock and walked away.

Lakshmi was in tears.Rishi felt sad and wiped her tears.

Rishi:It's not your fault Lakshmi.So you don't need to get upset.I am there with you.Don't be scared.Forget that devil's face.

Suddenly lights went off.Rishikesh lit the candle and went near her.

Rishikesh:This candle light replaced the darkness in this room.Like that I will replace the pain in your life with happiness.

Lakshmi looked at him emotionally.

They shared an emotional eye lock.

Rishi and Tanuja were sitting in a restaurant.

Rishi was talking very friendly with Tanuja.

Main Maanun Tera Kehna Tu Jaane Re
Tu Maane Mera Kehna Main Jaanu Re
Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere Mere
Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere

Tanuja felt very happy.

Tanuja thought:Rishi was so rude to me before.But now he is very friendly with me.He is changing.I am so happy.

Rishikesh and Lakshmi went to the drawing room.

Neelam and Virendra stared at them.

Rishikesh:Maa,why did you call us here?

Neelam:I overheard your conversation with Lakshmi and came to know that she is a psychiatric patient.

Why did you and your parents betray us Lakshmi?Why did you hide this from us and marry Rishi?

Lakshmi became upset.

Lakshmi:Sorry for everything Maa.

Neelam:Can a 'sorry' erase everything?My son is living with a mad girl now.

Lakshmi burst into tears.

Rishikesh:Stop it Maa.Don't call her mad.Lakshmi is my wife.I won't let anyone insult her.

Neelam was shocked.

Rishikesh:Maa..papa..you both called her the 'Lakshmi' of the house.Is this how you treat Lakshmi?If she is mentally not fit you should care for her instead of giving her more pain.Right?

Neelam and Virendra became guilty and emotional.

Virendra:Rishi is right Neelam.If Rishi was mentally sick we would have hidden it from the girl's family to get him married.Because parents become selfish for their children.

Neelam became upset.

Neelam:I am sorry Lakshmi.For a moment I became blind and a typical mother in law.Please forgive me.

Lakshmi held her hand and said:It's ok Maa.Any mother would react the way you did.I can understand.

Neelam hugged her and cried.They all became very emotional.

Rishi and Tanuja went to Ann Frank House.

The guide explained everything.Rishi could not understand the accent.But Tanuja explained everything to him.Rishi took the video and sent it to the students.

Rishi gave a dress to Tanuja.

Tanuja was surprised.

Tanuja:Is it for me?

Rishi:Yes.

Tanuja:You really bought it for me?I can't believe it.

Rishi held her hand and said:Yes.You really helped me a lot.So you really deserve this gift from me.

Tanuja smiled.

Ho Ankhiyan Na Roye Te
Jaage Na Soye Te
Taan Umra Jeete Rahe

Ho Ishq De Haale Se
Ishq De Pyale Se

Rishi:Wear this Tanuja.

Tanuja:Yes.

Tanuja wore that dress and came.

Tanuja:How do I look in this dress Rishi?

Rishi was mesmerized by her beauty.

Rishi:You are looking very beautiful.

Tanuja blushed.

Taan Umra Peete Rahe

Haan Main Taan Haari Re
Haari Re Haari Re
Duniya Vaari Re
Vaari Re Vaari Re

He held her hand and danced.Tanuja was very surprised and happy.

Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere Mere
Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere
Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere Mere
Tere Dil Se Dil Tak Mere

(Bawaal).

Raj and Rano rang up Rishi.

Raj:We are so happy that you and Tanuja are a happy couple now.

(Thanks for the edit Salley)

Rano stood near Raj and said:You both look so beautiful together in the photographs.

Rishi was shocked.

Rishi cut the call angrily.

Rishi shouted at Tanuja:Did you sent our pictures to my parents?

Tanuja:Yes.

Rishi:Why the hell did you sent our pictures to them?

Tanuja:Those were the beautiful moments of my life.They were worried about us.So I shared those photographs to them.

Rishi:What beautiful moments?Just because I was friendly with you,you thought I started loving you?Never!Don't think like that.

Tanuja got shattered.

Tanuja blasted at him:Ok fine.Even I am not desperate to get loved by you.You got it?

Tanuja walked away.Rishi was irritated.

The next day....

Rishi went out alone.He started missing Tanuja.

Rishi:Why am I missing Tanuja?Did I start liking her?No way.I miss her only because she was with me in the last few days when I went out.

Tanuja was standing and thinking of Rishi shouting at her.She was sad.Hair strands were falling on her face because of the wind blow.Rishi went near her and moved her hair strands away from her face with a smile.Tanuja was stunned.

Tanuja thought:How come he is so sweet now?

Rishi:Only for a few more days we will be here.Can't we end this fight and be friends?

Tanuja:You forgot that you only fought with me.

Rishi:Yes.I only started the fight and I regret it now.I don't feel peaceful when I am not on talking terms with you.Please forgive me.

Slowly Tanuja smiled.He was relieved.

Rishi and Tanuja went to Arbeit Macht Frei which is

the largest Nazi Concentration camp.

They know that there also many people had died and they imagined the past events which had taken place there.

From there they came to know that one person who survived the war is still alive and they went to see him.Many people were sitting around him to hear him talk.

Rishi was not able to understand his accent.

Tanuja:He says that he and his wife were put in the jail.He saus that he has never hurt his wife physically.But I could never communicate with her or spend enough time with her.Now he regrets behaving like that.He misses his wife now.By the time he realized his mistake,he had lost his wife.

All were becoming emotional hearing him talk.Rishi felt guilty and upset.

Rishi thought:I am also doing the same thing to Tanuja.

Rishi became so emotional that while listening to that person,he held Tanuja closer.

Tanuja looked at him in disbelief.Rishi came back to senses and removed his hands off her.

Rishi:Sorry.

Tanuja was confused.

She thought:What happened to Rishi?

Rishi and Tanuja went to a building.It was the place where many people were kept in captive and killed by poisoning.Rishi and Tanuja imagined them getting tortured there along with others during the time of war.Tanuja got mentally affected and started having fits.She fell down.Rishi was shocked and upset.

Somebody entered the Oberoi Mansion.

Virendra:Who are you?

Lakshmi was shocked to see him.

Her lips shivered:Ballu!

Rishikesh was shocked.

Balwinder:You thought that by putting me in the jail,you can live happily forever?

I won't let you live in peace after destroying my peace.

Lakshmi got scared.Rishikesh got worried.

Very bad happened with Lakshmi in the past. RishMi moments wereemotional. Nice to see Rishi talk sweetly to Tanu. Good that Rishi’s parents understood.Rishi gifting Tanu a dress and dance was romantic. Why is this Rishi still so angry?Tanu reacting was good. Rishi apologizing was stunning. Rishi holding Tanu closerwas sweet. Poor Tanu suffered fits. Shocked on Ballu’s return. Waiting for nextperfect pics. Please update enchanted hearts too.

Part 6

Dynamic update.... well written

In the movie, Katha was raped and became pregnant. I am glad Lakshmi got saved so we won't get any pregnancy angle.

Tanuja shouldnt forgive Rishi though....she deserves better than him

Part 6

Fantastic Update