RAGHVI TS : UNTIL I BLEED OUT II DARK II COMPLETED - Page 10

Originally posted by: ritas1234

Beautiful story

Thank you ❤

Originally posted by: masin

I bawled. I bawled, and bawled, and bawled.

Beautifully written. I still can't wrap my head around the story simply because it would be heartbreaking to watch this on screen. I could visualize the entire story and you did RaghVi complete justice. ❤️

Thank you and please don't cry.

I can understand how it must have felt. I too found it difficult to put the scenario into words.

Originally posted by: Amnnaa

Sama, this was such a wonderful piece.

I appreciate your effort to write something out of your usual genre. And believe me it have turned out amazing.

You have portrayed the terror, pain and revenge very beautifully.

Thank you for giving a beautiful ending to a angst filled story.

I don't wanna jinx it by writing more. Now let me reread every part together.

Amnnaa thank you ❤. Big hugs.

I feel soo over whelmed by the response right now that i have no words to express it.

I was scared that i might mess up while shifting scenes or with dialogues but i am glad everyone could connect with it.

Yes you can re read anytime you want.

(ignore my previous res again)
Samaaaaaaa!!!! Yeh kya kiya tumne 😭😭😭

You took my heart and then crushed it into a billion pieces 😭😭😭

The first part was AMAZING!!! I loved that Pallavi beat up that Jay and then the way you explained that it wasnt even a real beating 🤩 I am so glad you mentioned at Jay was bruised from that little self defence🤩 Our Pallu is so strong😤 ugh even that Krishna Rao was impressed by the lioness that Pallu is 🤩 I mean what is there to not fall for her every time you see her right?

The way you portrayed Raghav’s agony is applause worthy👏 I could feel his pain through my screen! His world was obliterated in a split second 😢

Raghav Pallavi Rao I love it ❣️

The only reason I’m not chasing you with a wiper after this is because you showed AmHad being there for each other AND you brought back Nikhil I miss him so much🥺

The dialogues in this story are wonderful! Quoting my favourite:
"Woh meri bhabhi hai Anna. Agar aaj ruk gaya toh poori zindagi Bhabhi ko aur apne Allah ko muh nahin dikha paunga." he replied back as both the boys better known as FaRag left for their destinations.

The action scenes were 🔥🔥 I have no more words for them. It was 🔥 quite literally 😆 You know it reminded me of Ravan dahan and it’s quite interesting at Raghav is another name for Lord Rama. Was it intentional?

Okay finally, Saishi one minute I was crying and the next I was chuckling because of this 😆 kya yaar why do you do this to your readers. Always throwing new twists at their faces. I love it though, so don’t stop! I know karni tumhe apni man ki hi hai but still thoda toh socha karo apne readers ke baare me

Finally finally, I have a question. Is Saishi adopted?🧐 How did Raghav find her? Also, her and Farhad’s bond is so cute🥺

Also, 🧿 for you and for your wonderful creativity

Edit: Just a suggestion, you should add an index with the hyperlinks to each update at the end of the first part so that it’s easier to navigate between them.

Originally posted by: MissWiseUnicorn

(ignore my previous res again)
Samaaaaaaa!!!! Yeh kya kiya tumne 😭😭😭

You took my heart and then crushed it into a billion pieces 😭😭😭

The first part was AMAZING!!! I loved that Pallavi beat up that Jay and then the way you explained that it wasnt even a real beating 🤩 I am so glad you mentioned at Jay was bruised from that little self defence🤩 Our Pallu is so strong😤 ugh even that Krishna Rao was impressed by the lioness that Pallu is 🤩 I mean what is there to not fall for her every time you see her right?

The way you portrayed Raghav’s agony is applause worthy👏 I could feel his pain through my screen! His world was obliterated in a split second 😢

Raghav Pallavi Rao I love it ❣️

The only reason I’m not chasing you with a wiper after this is because you showed AmHad being there for each other AND you brought back Nikhil I miss him so much🥺

The dialogues in this story are wonderful! Quoting my favourite:
"Woh meri bhabhi hai Anna. Agar aaj ruk gaya toh poori zindagi Bhabhi ko aur apne Allah ko muh nahin dikha paunga." he replied back as both the boys better known as FaRag left for their destinations.

The action scenes were 🔥🔥 I have no more words for them. It was 🔥 quite literally 😆 You know it reminded me of Ravan dahan and it’s quite interesting at Raghav is another name for Lord Rama. Was it intentional?

Okay finally, Saishi one minute I was crying and the next I was chuckling because of this 😆 kya yaar why do you do this to your readers. Always throwing new twists at their faces. I love it though, so don’t stop! I know karni tumhe apni man ki hi hai but still thoda toh socha karo apne readers ke baare me

Finally finally, I have a question. Is Saishi adopted?🧐 How did Raghav find her? Also, her and Farhad’s bond is so cute🥺

Also, 🧿 for you and for your wonderful creativity

Edit: Just a suggestion, you should add an index with the hyperlinks to each update at the end of the first part so that it’s easier to navigate between them.

Hey...... Don't say that. I wasn't supposed to crush your heart 😒.

Aww but you liked it. That means so much to me 😳

@red : Raghav found Saishi when after Pallavi's death he had given up on life and had been wandering on the road with a purpose to die in order to meet her on the other side. But then he saw Saishi ( a new born babygirl) wrapped inside a blanket placed in a basket near a dustbin area (or Mandir if you prefer God's plan theory) by her real parents just because they didn't want a girl. He got her home and ever since she's been his daughter, a reflection of Pallavi. This is my vision though.

@bold : I was going to but then like a memory loss person that i am , i forgot.

Originally posted by: unicornwriter

Hey...... Don't say that. I wasn't supposed to crush your heart 😒.

Aww but you liked it. That means so much to me 😳

@red : Raghav found Saishi when after Pallavi's death he had given up on life and had been wandering on the road with a purpose to die in order to meet her on the other side. But then he saw Saishi ( a new born babygirl) wrapped inside a blanket placed in a basket near a dustbin area (or Mandir if you prefer God's plan theory) by her real parents just because they didn't want a girl. He got her home and ever since she's been his daughter, a reflection of Pallavi. This is my vision though.

@bold : I was going to but then like a memory loss person that i am , i forgot.

Ofc I liked it! 🤗 What was not there to like? Don’t mind me, I have a flair for being a little👌🏻 dramatic when I like things a lot 🙈 but only a little👌🏻

Bold: this is the most wholesome story ever🥺🥺🤗

Underline: Sama beta, goldfish bola karo, memory loss person is too mainstream 😂😂

Originally posted by: MissWiseUnicorn

Ofc I liked it! 🤗 What was not there to like? Don’t mind me, I have a flair for being a little👌🏻 dramatic when I like things a lot 🙈 but only a little👌🏻

Bold: this is the most wholesome story ever🥺🥺🤗

Underline: Sama beta, goldfish bola karo, memory loss person is too mainstream 😂😂

@bold : it was cuteeee 😂😂

@red: damnn 😂😂😂 this was a good one 😂😂

Wow Sama this story is amazing 👏 I went through so many emotions while reading whole story and I could imagine everything RaghVi went through in front of my eyes😭

You are an amazing writer👏❤️

Ohh god !

The first part was soo hooking sama

I had my heart in my mouth at some points 😆

Goshhhh!

Esp the way she defends herself and the detailing is amazing

You're toooo goood 🤗❤️

Omggg sama 🤗

You are such a brilliant writer

I legit cried in the end seriously

The pain , the entire circumstances you wrote was soo good

I am so overwhelmed rn to think much 😭

But it was mind-blowing👏🤗🤗❤️