New FF.Karan & Lakshmi’s Love....IMP NOTE

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sham ke panch baje hai Rajpipla me.........Lakshmi Garodia Nivas me bethi apne ateeth ke bare me soch rahi hai......

Lakshmi (apne aap se): kyun hua yeh mere saath.........jisse pyaar kiya usine sabse bada dhoka diya..........heu Bhagwan kya kasoor tha mera pehle mujse Satyakam chin liya aur ab Karan bhi.....aakhir main maine kaun sa gunaah kiya hai ki meri zindagi me pyaar hi nahi.......aaj jab sab logo ko apne pati ke saath dekhti hoon to dil me ek choti si khawaish lagti hai Karan ke saath ......lekin Karan ka naam sunte hi muje uske diye huye dard aur aanshu yaad aate hai........meri kuch samaj me nahi aata ki main kya abhi bhi usse pyaar karti hoon ya nahi.......kaise faisla hoga.......

Tringgggggg............Tringgggggggggg...................... .....

Lakshmi: hello.......

Person: tum Lakshmi Mathur bol rahi ho.........

Lakshmi: jee haa........kahiye kya kaam hai........

Person: jake apne Pati Karan ki lash Rajpipla Highway se le aana.......woh wahi hoga........humne unhe mar diya hai....

Lakshmi: aisa nahi ho sakta........tum jooth bol rahe ho........aur tum ho kaun aisa kehne wale.......

Person: agar tumhe hamari baatein joothi lag rahi ho to Highway pe jake dekho.........ha....ha.......ha.........

Person phone kat deta hai.......

Lakshmi: hello.........hello.........tum kuch bolte kyun nahi.........

Lakshmi phone rakh deti hai......

Lakshmi: aisa nahi ho sakta............Karan muje chodke nahi ja sakta........

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Lakshmi bhagti huyi ghar se bahar rikshaw dhundhne lagti hai.....lekin ek bhi rikshaw dikhai nahi deti.......Lakshmi haighway ki aur daudne lagti hai.......Lakshmi jab dur se dekhti hai ki Karan khoon se latbath neeche road pe hai........woh daud ke karan ke pass beth jati hai aur Karan ka sir apne god me leti hai.........

Lakshmi (crying): Karan........utho........aankhein kholo..........tum muje chod ke nahi ja sakte......karan apni aankhein kholo........tumhe meri kasam.......muje mere gunaah ki itni badi saza mat do Karan.......karan tumhe mere pyaar ka wasta.........utho.......karan........kyunki main tumhare bigar nahi reh sakti........kyunki main aaj bhi tumse pyaar karti hoon........I love You karan.....

Karan (opens one eye): I love you too Lakshmi..........

Lakshmi (shocked and walked away): Karan ..........tum ne aisa..........to tumne mere saath itna gatiya majak kiya.........jante ho mere pe kya bit rahi thi us waqt.......tumhe mera zara sa bhi khayal nahi aaya.......

Karan (stands): I am sorry Lakshmi........lekin tumhe mere pyaar ka ehsaas karane ke alawa mere pass aur koi chara hi nahi tha........sab kuch to maine aasma liya........tabhi hum sab ne milke yeh plan kiya ki tumhe kaise ehsaas dilaye ki tum bhi mujse pyaar karti ho......

Lakshmi: hum sab ne milke matlab..........aur yeh khoon aur yeh sab......

Jab ped ke piche se Sarswati, Gauri, Durga aur Dev aate hai........

Gauri: jaisa Kajri ko phana ke liye humne Dev ki madad li thi waise aaj......

Dev: aap bhool rahi hai ki main ek kalakar hoon........aur ghar ke logo ko to main mana nahi kar sakta aur yeh to bade hi nek kam tha ki aap dono ko milana..........thodi si to acting ki hai humne.........

Sarswati: Lakshmi........ab yeh kaisi zid hai......chod do gussa aur Karan ke pass chali jao........dekho apne aap ko kaisi ban gayi ho tum......tum bhool rahi ho ki Karan hi wahi insaan hai jisne tumhe jina shikaya, muskurana shikhaya aur sabse zaroori pyaar karna..........

Lakshmi: aur dukh aur dard me bhi jina aur muskurate shikaya..

Lakshmi yeh kehke jane lagti hai............

Karan: Ruko Lakshmi..............

Lakshmi: nahi karan muje kuch nahi sunna....main ja rahi hoon..........

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meri soni, meri tamanna

(Karan Lakshmi ka haath pakadta hai)

Jhoot nahin hai mera pyaar

(Karan lakshmi ke samne apne dhutno pe beth jata hai)

Deewane se ho gayi galti Jaane do yaar

(Karan Lakshmi ka haath apne haath me leta hai)

I love youI love you

(Karan Lakshmi ke haath ko kiss karta hai)

Lakshmi Gusse me aakar apna haath khichke chali jati hai. lekin Karan uska haath khichke use apni bhoin me leta hai

Aake meri aankhon mein tum dekho

(Lakshmi Karan se apni nazre churake kahi aur dekh rahi hai jab Karan use apni aankh me dekhne ko majbur karta hai)

Inn mein har ek ada tumhari hai

(karan Lakshmi ke baal ko sehlane lagta hai)

Kehne ko yeh dil hai mera lekin

(Karan lakshmi ka haath leke use apne dil pe rakhta hai)

Dhadkan mein sadaa tumhari hai

(Karan Lakshmi ke gale lagta hai)

Tumse hai chain mera Tumse hai mera karaar

(lakshmi Karan ko daka marke waha se chali jati hai)

I love you I love you

(Karan usle piche piche chalne lagta hai)

Tadap ke yun bahut na tadapao

(Karan Lakshmi ki sari ka pallu pakad leta hai aur Lakshmi guuse me piche mudti hai)

Accha baba chalo hum hi haare

(Karan ek haath se apna kan pakadta hai)

Tumne agar dil se mujhe chaaha

(Lakshmi apni sari khichke wapas chali jane lagti hai)

Tum bhi to ho sanam mujhe pyaare

(karan wahi pe zameen pe beth jata hai)

Mere kareeb aao zara soon bhi lo Dil ki pukaar

(Lakshmi thodi durr jake ruk jati hai)

I love you I love you

(karan ki aankh se aanshu behne lagte hai)

Mere sona, meri tamanna

(Lakshmi aake Karan ke khandhe pe apna haath rakhti hai)

Jhoot nahin hai mera pyaar

(Karan sirf lakhmi ko dekhta hi rehta hai jisne apne dono kan ko pakad ke rakha tha)

Deewani se ho gayi galti Jaane do yaar

(karan zameen se uthta hai aur Lakshmi Karan ke aanshu ko pochti hai)

I love you I love you

(Lakshmi Karan ke sine lag jati hai)

I love you I love you

(Karan Lakshmi ko kas ke pakad leta hai)

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Yeh sab dekh ke sab log tali bajate hai...........tali ki aawaz se yeh log haqeeqat me aate hai.........

Durga: Lakshmi........ab to tum khush hona..........ab to tum apna sasural nahi chodke aaogi na......

Karan: iski jimedari me leta hoon..........ab main ise kabhi apne aap se alag nahi hone dunga..........

Sarswati: Karan tum bhi aaj ek baat samaj lo.........kabhi ek galatfemi rishtey ko kamzor bana deti hai........vishwas, saath, maan aur pyaar .......yeh chaar shaadi ke atoot rishtey ko mazbut karti hai..........agar isme ek bhi kamzor ho to yeh rista kache dhage ki tarah ban jata hai.......ek pawan ki halki si leher bhi tod deta hai........aaj se ek dusre pe vishwas karna sikho..........

Lakshmi: iski jimedari me leti hoon.......karan dubara aisi galti kabhi nahi karega........aur bhool ke bhi isne aisa kiya na to main ise jaan se mar dungi.....kitna rulaya hai isne muje.......

Karan: apni galti pe main jyada roya hoon.......

Lakshmi: nahi main..........maine sabse jyada tumhe miss kiya......

Karan: nahi maine kiya..........her roz to tumhe milne ke liye tumhare ghar aata tha........

Lakshmi: nahi maine........kyunki maine bhi to tumhara intzar kiya tha........

Karan: maine.....

Lakshmi: maine........

Dev: chup.........abhi ek zagde to khatam kiya nahi ki dusra shuru ho gaya.............

Sarswati: is zagde me bhi tum dono ka pyaar dikahi deta hai........bhagwan kare tum log aise hi khush raho ek dusre ki saath raho.........aaj se tum log ek nayi zindagi shuru kar rahe ho.........aur kisi bhi nayi rah pe chalne se pehle Bhagwan ka aashirwad hona bahot hi zaroori hai........tum log mandir hoke aao.......hum log ghar ja rahe hai.........

Lakshmi: thik hai......

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Karan aur Lakshmi mandir pahunchte hai.........

Karan: Lakshmi...........main tumhe kuch dena chahta hoon.....

Karan apni jeb se Mangalsutra nikalta hai........

Karan: us wat tumne mujse yeh rista tod diya tha.........aur galti bhi meri thi..........shayad main hi is ristey ko kabhi samaj nahi paya..........lekin aaj dil se puchta hoon........kya tum mera saath dogi.........kya tum muje isi tarah pyaar karogi..........kya tum meri patni banna chahogi.......

Lakshmi: haa Karan........main apni aakhri saans tak tumhara saath dungi...........main tumhe apne se bhi jyada pyaar karungi........jab apni patni banana chahte ho to khud hi pehnado........

Karan Lakshmi ko Mangalsutra pehnata hai aur Lakshmi Mandir se sindoor lati hai.......

Lakshmi: maine us waqt tumhare naam ka sindoor mita diya tha kyunki woh sindoor ek dhoka tha....maine tumse mere pati hone ke sare hakk chin liye the........lekin aaj main is sidoor ko ek patni ke nate apni mang me bhar dena chahti ho......yeh sindoor se muje ek nayi pehchaan mili hai .........ha karan.........aaj apne haatoin se meri maang is sindoor se sawar do.......

Karan Lakshmi ki mang bhar deta hai.........dono bhagwan ke samne prarthna kar rahe the......

Karan: Hey bhagwan..........aaj mere pass sab kuch hai.........mera pyaar meri lakshmi mere saath hai..........aap se kuch mangna chahta hoon to yahi ki zindagi ki aakhri waqt tak isi tarah hum dono ke beech pyaar bana rahe.........muje Lakshmi ki khushi ke alawa aur kuch nahi chahiye......

Lakshmi:Hey bhagwan..........aaj main phir se suhagan ho gayi........mere sindoor ki raksha karna........muje zindagi se aur kuch nahi chaiye........aap Karan jo bhi mange use de dena kyunki meri khushi Karan ki khushi se hai........

Karan aur Lakshmi dono mandir ke bahar bete huye hote hai...........

Karan: tumne kya manga.......

Lakshmi: agale saat janmo tak main tumhari dulhan banu........aur tumne......

Karan: yahi ki agale saat janmi tak hum dono aise hi ekdusre se pyaar karte rahe.........

Lakshmi: itna pyaar karte ho.....

Karan: yeh to kuch bhi nahi..........apni jaan se bhi jayda pyaar karta hoon..........tumhare liye main haste haste apni jaan.......

Jab Lakshmi apna haath uske hoth pe rakh deti hai........

Lakshmi: zindagi abhi shuru huyi hai aur tum abhi se..........Karan......abhi to hume is zindagi ko jina hai saath milke haste khelte.......agar tum hi muje chod ke chale jaoge to main kaise zinda rahungi..........kyunki main tumse bahot pyaar karti hoon.......

Karan: main bhi tumse bahot pyaar karta hoon...........I love you.........

Lakshmi: I love you too........

Lakshmi aur Karan ek dusre ke gale lagte hai aur aise hi suraj dhal jata hai in dono ke pyaar ka suraj sirf abhi nikla tha.................

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Posted: 17 years ago
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hahahaha,.......... 😆 goodkashish , superb. u know wat , u go and become scriptwriter for Betiyaan....i hope they read all this and stop laxmi's nakhras . 😆 😆 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wooooooooooooooow that is soooooooooooooooooooooooooo sweet
scene goodkashish i love it u r really creative 😉
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Posted: 17 years ago
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thanks for those wonderful comments.......should i coontinue with it.....thanks

love

kashish

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Awesome job 👏 Had a gr8 read 😃
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yea it was , it was humorous too . 😆
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Great job...plz continue soon! I was waiting for a Karan and Laxmi FF! 😊

*Riya
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part-2

Karan aur Lakshmi Garodia nivas me aate hai...........jaha pe sarswati ne sabhi ko bata diya tha........

Baa: Savitri........jaldi aa.......woh log aa gaye .....

Savitri: aa rahi hoon.......Baa........

Lakshmi: kya baat hai Baa aur aapne hume yaha pe kyun rokke rakha hai........

Savitri: kitne din bad meri beti ke chehre pe khushi dikhai di hai.........ek bar tum dono ki nazar uthar doon phir andar aana...........

Savitri Karan aur Lakshmi ki nazar utharti hai........

Baa: ab andar aao beta.......

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Karan aur Lakshmi andar aate hai jaha pe pura Garodia Parivaar unka swagat karta hai..........

Surykant: aaj main bahot khush hoon.........aakhir kar tumhe samaj me aahi gaya........

Lakshmi: haa......bapuji.....muje samaj aa gaya ki ladki ka asli ghar uska sasural hi hota hai.........aur maine Karan ko maff kar diya hai.......kyunki muje saat janam me bhi Karan jaisa pyaar karnewala pati nahi milega...

Karan: nahi bapuji.....Lakshmi ne muje insaan banaya hai.......Lakshmi aur aap sabse milke jana ki parivaar kya hota hai......parivaar ka pyaar kya hota hai........aaj main apne aap ko duniya ka sabse khushnaseeb insaan manta hoon ki main is parivaar ka hissa hoon...........aur main agar agle saat janam bhi loona tab bhi muje Lakshmi se behtar patni nahi mil sakti.........

Jab Kajri waha pe aati hai.....

Kajri: aisa hi hai to kab le ja rahe ho is musibat ki jad ko.......

Lakshmi: Kajri apni had me rehke baat karo....

Karan: Lakshmi aise log ke muh lagne se apni hi bejati hoti hai.......aur Kajri tumhare sawaal ka jawaab me deta hoon......main Lakshmi ko kal subaah hi deke jaunga........ab tumhe tumhare sawaal ka jawaab mil gaya ho to tum ja sakti ho........

Kajri apna muh phulake waha se chali jati hai......

Yuvraj: muje to bahot bhukh lagi hai....kya khana ban gaya hai........

Menka: haa.......khana taiyaar hai.......aaiye aap sab........

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Sab log khana khake apne apne kamre me chale jate hai........Karan ko Lakshmi ke kamre me thehraya jata hai aur Durga ko gauri ke room me bheja jata hai..........Karan Lakshmi ka intzaar kar raha hota hai lekin aadha ghanta ho gaya lekin Lakshmi abhi tak kamre me nahi aayi.....jab Karan gunghroo ki aawaz sunta hai.......karan us aawaz ki aur jane lagta hai........jab woh Durga aur gauri se milta hai....

Durga: Karan tum is waqt yaha....

Karan: yeh ghughroo ki aawaz........

Gauri: lakshmi hogi.....

Karan: lakshmi.......

Durga: lagta hai aaj bahot khush hai..........kitne saalo baad aaj usne ghughroo pehne hai..........chat pe hogi.......jao jake mil lo....

Gauri: jaldi jao.....

Karan: ja raha hoon baba.............

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Karan chat pe jake dekhta hai to Lakshmi ghughroo pehan ke naach rahi thi.........Lakshmi ko pata nahi tha ki Karan use dekh raha hai............Lakshmi nachti nachti karan se takrati hai aur karan ke gale lag jati hai........karan lakshmi ke baal ko side pe karke uske chehre ko apni aur karta hai........

Karan: muje to pata hi nahi tha ki meri biwi itna achcha nachti bhi hai..........

lakshmi; yeh to bas aise hi.........

Karan: achi lag rahi thi.......lekin iski koi waje......

Lakshmi; aaj me bahot khush hoon Karan..........jante ho kyun..........ab jaisa maine socha hai waisa hi hoga........mera ek ghar hoga........jisme me apne pati aur gharwalo ke saath pyaar se khushi se rahungi.....main apni puri koshish karungi ki koi bhi dard aur dukh hamare ristey tak na pahunche...........

Karan; aur yeh ghar hum saath milke banayenge.........main her pal her lamha tumhare saath rahunga......

Lakshmi: janti hoon.........karan mujse ek vaada karoge......agar kabhi bhi hume alag hona pade to tum muje mar dena ........kyunki yeh judaai ka gum mujse sehen nahi hota........

Karan: chup ek dum chup........yeh kya bole ja rahi ho........hum kabhi alag nahi hoge......tumhe markar main bhi zinda nahi reh paunga.......main tumse vaada karta hoon ki hum saath saath jiyenge aur saath saath marenge.....

lakshmi: i love you karan......

Karan; i love you too..........

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karan aur lakshmi wapas apne kamre me aate hai............lakshmi apna saman pack kar rahi hoti hai jab karan uska haath pakadta hai.......

Lakshmi; kya kar rahe ho.......chodo mera haath........

Karan; kyun......

Lakshmi; koi dekh lega......

karan; dekh lene do.....

lakshmi; koi kya kahega.....

karan; yahi ki ek pati apni patni se kitna pyaar karta hai.....

lakshmi; ple karan chodo mera haath.....

karan; chodne ke liye thama nahi aur thama hai to choduga nahi...........

Lakshmi; aur is ke liye kya chahiye aapko.......

karan: bas kuch nahi ..........simply one kiss...

lakshmi; nahi...

karan; ek....

lakshmi nahi.......

karan; main naraz ho jaunga......

lakshmi; koi baat nahi....

lakshmi apne kapde leke bathroom me chali jati hai.......jab woh bahar aati hai tab karan so chuka hota hai......lakshmi karan ke pass jate bethti hai......lakshmi karan ke gal pe kiss karti hai.....lakshmi waha se uthne hi wali hoti hai ki karan lakshmi ka haath pakadta hai..........

karan; good night......

lakshmi; good night........

lakshmi turned of the light and sleep right next to karan.........

Edited by goodkashish - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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i guess noone like my ff..........so i am going to close this ff as i am not receiving enough comments on it.........but thanks for those comments........

love

kashish
Edited by goodkashish - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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NOOOOO plz don't end it! I am a silent reader!lol plz we need Karan and Laxmi FF

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