TS: Mirage of Love - Magic Inc. #1.5 (Completed)

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

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Posted: 7 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Part 3

The first time I read I was a little confused (the first para), but enjoyed it second time on wards.

It took me a while to pin down to what point I want the future to start. I should hve mde that clearer.

The opening para is when Laksh tests Swara - Ragini is still under medication, which is why she could not "see" the real him.

Yup

And guess, Sunny was aware of his feelings and failings😉

The slightest hint of return of their friendship fables. I am a fan of bromance scenes. So didnt want to lose the opportunity there.

What I liked best, their maturity did not disappear with age, sometimes in a story you find mature nineteen year olds, break up and meet after ten years, only to behave like petulant nine year old kids. Not our RagLak here - even their "blame game" was honest and refreshing.

That is very true. I feel when we go through some intense life moments, we grow frpm there. I know some might fall back to childish ways to cope with the change, but the possibilities are lesser in that. So I went for majority. Also, this is the RagLak we saw in WC.

"You would look ugly if you cry"

"You look beautiful when you smile"

these two are so adorable. ❤️🥳

Can I steal these lines?😃

Oh wait, I think I will steal most of the Edit - the most beautiful moving and honest confession.

So thank you for this sequel and the edit. I simply loved it, I am going to miss it when you edit it to a non SwaSan ff, but still it will always hold a spot in my heart.

I am rushing out.. will be back for the remaining comment.

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Part 3
"You would look ugly if you cry"
"You look beautiful when you smile"

these two are so adorable. ❤️🥳

Can I steal these lines?😃

Oh wait, I think I will steal most of the Edit - the most beautiful moving and honest confession.

So thank you for this sequel and the edit. I simply loved it, I am going to miss it when you edit it to a non SwaSan ff, but still it will always hold a spot in my heart.

Nyna, you are free to use those lines. There was no thought behind them. It was taken from a real context of a consolation I haappen to witness. I am pleasantly surprised that you loved them

Ah, the edit.. its all yours, dear! You know I didn't want to write that. But when you asked, i thought what can I do that doesn't seem all too sudden but a gradual proposal all logical and sorted. I think I read the Orla Luc convo again and again innumerous times, until i caught on the word indemnification. And suddenly, everything fell in place. A simple conversation that they realise is actually a proposal ending with their acquaintance through the bouquet. Also I didn't want the cliched roses, hence the daffodils here and hydrangeas there.

Luc's knowledge of flower meanings was a key answer in Chimerical. I am planning to keep it that way for now. Mostly I might transport some of the scenes here to the revamped version.

See you in the new tale!

Cheers

Sharon