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Sharon

@Sparkler8

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Posted: 7 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: ria2794
haha read it in one go. they have been sweethearts for one another I would say. met at a tender age left and then met again to continue what they left behind. I guess their time apart gave them the maturity to see things in better perspective. Young love has the tendency to disappear with time.

Glad you found it interesting enough to read in one go. Liked the way you put it across. Some things become better with time

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ExpectoPatronum

@ExpectoPatronum

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Posted: 7 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: Sparkler8

Vibha shekhar?

I can suggest you a few more writers who write beautiful stories😊

Oh my God! Yes, yes and a thousand times yes!!!🥳🤣

Ever hungry for those wonderful stories😆

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Razia Ajmal

@raaz19

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Posted: 7 years ago

#33

Dear Sharon,

Thank you so much for the lovely pm and the is outstanding story...

What a way to come back from holiday...I truly love your work and the sparkle that you have kept going in this add on to wc...

Throughout you can feel the connection between raglak and the journey they have had...just like this story suggest the path to true love is not easy and we make decision in the neat interest of others we care about...

I love the way this journey developed and showed that there unity was supposed to be...at the end there love connected them from the sky and stars beyond..

No matter the wagging tungs of the office staff love sees beyond that magic or no magic...

You have written this beautifully straight from the heart...its like we see the mirror of there's souls..

Cannot wait to read more...even though I love your swasan work a little bit more...

Take care

Razia

Sorry for late revert :)

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 7 years ago

#34

Finished re reading all over again. Just loved it, not that this sentence does any justice to the tale, but wanted to let you know.

Weekends are the tightest, hoping to be able to read it one last time tomorrow and leave a comment worthy, somewhat, of this lovely tale.

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 7 years ago

#35

Part 2

For a change, I loved the maturity Laksh displays despite his impulsiveness. And Ragini's willingness to give him a chance despite her initial assessment of him being quite negative. They would have been young, but did display a maturity you do not associate with that age, at least in books and fiction. The credit goes to you as a writer.

Then the apology scene - Laksh wins👏👏👏 - he did not try to justify his act, he could believe that what he did was nothing untoward, but he accepted her viewpoint that she found it to be crossing one's limits. He stepped back and she stepped up - great moves😊 A step that literally was an exchange of colours.

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

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Posted: 7 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: raaz19
Dear Sharon,
Thank you so much for the lovely pm and the is outstanding story...

What a way to come back from holiday...I truly love your work and the sparkle that you have kept going in this add on to wc...

Throughout you can feel the connection between raglak and the journey they have had...just like this story suggest the path to true love is not easy and we make decision in the neat interest of others we care about...

I love the way this journey developed and showed that there unity was supposed to be...at the end there love connected them from the sky and stars beyond..

No matter the wagging tungs of the office staff love sees beyond that magic or no magic...

You have written this beautifully straight from the heart...its like we see the mirror of there's souls..

Cannot wait to read more...even though I love your swasan work a little bit more...

Take care

Razia

Sorry for late revert :)

Hi Razia

Hope you had a fantastic holiday.

It was difficult to write purely RagLak but when I treated the characters as from Whimsical Corporation rather than from the show, it became easier.

Love is magical in itself without the explicit spell casting. 😳

Cheers

Sharon

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Finished re reading all over again. Just loved it, not that this sentence does any justice to the tale, but wanted to let you know.

Weekends are the tightest, hoping to be able to read it one last time tomorrow and leave a comment worthy, somewhat, of this lovely tale.

I can understand, Nyna. I took a long time to write this so your comments are what make my day, they give me the confirmation that the story was to the acceptable standards. More importantly, like i told you before, i trust you to tell me if I have seriously messed up something. (Why I am thinking of Pedantic Pardon, while typing this, i dont know😕)

Will patienyly wait for your comments, is what I'm trying to say.😊

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 7 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: Sparkler8

I can understand, Nyna. I took a long time to write this so your comments are what make my day, they give me the confirmation that the story was to the acceptable standards. More importantly, like i told you before, i trust you to tell me if I have seriously messed up something. (Why I am thinking of Pedantic Pardon, while typing this, i dont know😕)

Will patienyly wait for your comments, is what I'm trying to say.😊

That is because Pedantic Pardon was written to satisfy the fans outrage at Perilous Pursuit - that is one OS I love- despite it having Sanskaar never forgiving Swara and his "marrying" Ragini. It was a very brave story and one that really spoke of the characters, if the logical extension of the character's arc is considered. Unfortunately in a fandom - it is always emotion over logic and reason.

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#39

Part 3

The first time I read I was a little confused (the first para), but enjoyed it second time on wards.

The opening para is when Laksh tests Swara - Ragini is still under medication, which is why she could not "see" the real him.

And guess, Sunny was aware of his feelings and failings😉

What I liked best, their maturity did not disappear with age, sometimes in a story you find mature nineteen year olds, break up and meet after ten years, only to behave like petulant nine year old kids. Not our RagLak here - even their "blame game" was honest and refreshing.

"You would look ugly if you cry"

"You look beautiful when you smile"

these two are so adorable. ❤️🥳

Can I steal these lines?😃

Oh wait, I think I will steal most of the Edit - the most beautiful moving and honest confession.

So thank you for this sequel and the edit. I simply loved it, I am going to miss it when you edit it to a non SwaSan ff, but still it will always hold a spot in my heart.

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Part 2

For a change, I loved the maturity Laksh displays despite his impulsiveness. And Ragini's willingness to give him a chance despite her initial assessment of him being quite negative. They would have been young, but did display a maturity you do not associate with that age, at least in books and fiction. The credit goes to you as a writer.

Then the apology scene - Laksh wins👏👏👏 - he did not try to justify his act, he could believe that what he did was nothing untoward, but he accepted her viewpoint that she found it to be crossing one's limits. He stepped back and she stepped up - great moves😊 A step that literally was an exchange of colours.

Thank you Nyna.

The setting and the scenes are not entirely fictional. They are inspired from some events in my college dys. As for the maturity at such young age, I guess the credit also goes to the sensible friends I found during that time. (They are now my trio 😳)

As for the apology, I wanted to give a shade to Laksh that goes beyond his flamboyance. The backstory of Ragini and Laksh leads to the opinions they hold.

Loved the way you put it.. steps and exchange of colours.👏

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