Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF

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Aqqo1

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Posted: 8 years ago

#41

Wooow wwwooowone more amazing ff

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Lubana

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: ChitraGS

Oh ASR ki Chandini wali Lubs ,

How are you, thank god you liked the start, yes wait for the first meet, it is hell HAH!!!

This is a beautiful story trust em when i say that, leave the dark side out, but othewise its a heart wrenching story OMG , 😳, hope u like it till the end.

Hey love I'm good 😃 How are u, I'm so happy that you are updating one after the other..It is an amazing story I'm sure and am hooked already. I have a special love for Dark stories and you being a wonderful writer is going to do full justice. Also I feel that two of these stories are your take on the two parts of the show..this one being the premise and the Predator one being the post marriage wala part of the show and you have nailed both the parts brilliantly👏

Now update already 😆 can't wait

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2filmy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#43

so we will get an update for this story tomorrow

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2filmy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#44

I can understand it must be a bit draining for you to manage two FF s simultaneously

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Aqqo1

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Posted: 8 years ago

#45

I want to read advay dark character and u fulfill my wish thank u so much for writing this ff plZ update soon

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ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: Aqqo1
I want to read advay dark character and u fulfill my wish thank u so much for writing this ff plZ update soon

You are more ethan welcome my love, it is my wish that i am fulfilling TBH , but am glad u loved it so far

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ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: 2filmy
I can understand it must be a bit draining for you to manage two FF s simultaneously

OMG it is priya, especially this one is extremely exhausting , i feel so drained sometimes, I have written about 50 to 60 percent so far, but its scatter, not in sequence,

30 percent of starting is done, and 20 percent of ending is done, so far, and bit and pieces of a few middle parts i have written

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ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

#48

Please find he story on wattpad the link is on first page 😃

Edited by ChitraGS - 7 years ago

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Mangothyme

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Hi Chitra,

What a wonderful start to the story. IPPKND S1 had a lot of great writers who made up the lack of redemption track especially for me.

Your story is like that. I am connecting more to this version of Advay and Chandini in one small chapter than I ever did to the entire series because it reflects the premise of the show as I understood.

As for the dominant part, we are talking about 50 shades type, right ? If so I am even more intrigued. I am very curious though as to how you will handle the reason of why Advay is a dominant. In 50 shades the reason made sense.

I have read 50 shades as a fanfic version and I must say you are a better writer. You don't meander. Put a disclaimer that though the characters are based on IPKKND the story belongs to you. You could even move it to a blog for copyright purposes, I don't know if IF will claim copyright. If the chapter 1 is any indication this is worthy of publishing Chitra and that is the highest compliment I can pay.

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ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: Mangothyme
Hi Chitra,
What a wonderful start to the story. IPPKND S1 had a lot of great writers who made up the lack of redemption track especially for me.

Your story is like that. I am connecting more to this version of Advay and Chandini in one small chapter than I ever did to the entire series because it reflects the premise of the show as I understood.

As for the dominant part, we are talking about 50 shades type, right ? If so I am even more intrigued. I am very curious though as to how you will handle the reason of why Advay is a dominant. In 50 shades the reason made sense.

I have read 50 shades as a fanfic version and I must say you are a better writer. You don't meander. Put a disclaimer that though the characters are based on IPKKND the story belongs to you. You could even move it to a blog for copyright purposes, I don't know if IF will claim copyright. If the chapter 1 is any indication this is worthy of publishing Chitra and that is the highest compliment I can pay.

Hello my lovely, thank you so much for such wonderful words of appreciation, and for indicating that i put a disclaimer, I will do that now. As of IF claiming copyright, TBH this story is a gift lets say to all of the readers including myself, who didnt get the story we were promised. I might consider moving to a blog for sure, but i will also leave a copy here on IF for anyone of those Advni fans who were aching for a darkish story like me and felt robbed eventually.

The problem with the show was they used unnecessary gizmos and scientific madness, and ruined the reality factor for a lot of us. SIGH !!!

Speaking of the dominant part, Okay i am going to have to put this in the disclaimer too. TBH the reason FSOG faced a lot to backlash from the BDSM inclined community was because she pinned Greys behaviour on his traumatic past. BDSM has nothing to do with trauma, it is a sexual preference. Some people want it, like it, its thier choice. Why? There is no answer to that. Its the same reason why you might like Chocolate ice cream over butter scotch😃, its jsut a preference.

so i think it will be unfair for me to pin Advay's behaviour on his trauma or his past etc. lets just say he was exposed to this preference and he made it his way of life. Tho my Advay plays hardcore, Christian is a watered down version in front of Advay. Hence why i have explicitly mentioned it in my disclaimer.

But why does Advay like torturing Chandini, that bit will come out beautifully, so that bit i will be writing in detail. But why is he a dominant, because thats who he is, thats his personality. But he is totally diff to Grey, Grey was an ass hole most of the times and for no reason. Adavy does things but has a reason i think thats what makes him different. Please do give it a read and let me know what you make of it, trust me i have written it tastefully, it wont offend anyone, it may do little bit, but if it does that you can always skip that part😳,

@bold, I am truly honoured by your words, I have no words to describe how flattered i feel at the moment. I am very bad at taking compliment,s but trust me i am over the moon, and typing this with a perpetual grin plastered across my face at your kind words.

TBH this story is only jsut my second attempt at writing a story. I am taking this as a learning curve, and since I have been receiving so many wonderful compliments from all of you, I might want to write professionally for sure. All of you lovely people have given me the encouragement to take up my passion professionally

So thanks a lot again for all your suggestions and your kind words. Keep reading, this story will entrall you i promise, but more so it will make you weep buckets, for both of them. 😳

❤️ Chitra

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