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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#71

Originally posted by: meshmesh
Thanks for the bonus update! Loved it!

I didn't expect her brother to be called Vivaan.

Sukor aren't wasting any time, they've already had a slow dance 😊.

Loved their conversation and dance.

The suspense! I want to know what Chakor was going to do or was it Suraj's imagination?

Eagerly waiting for the next update.

It's my pleasure dear!

Glad you loved it!

I have said that Vivaan will be here when we talked about Orenda in MIB!

Hope he is useful at least here.

And you will see how speed they will be in future!

No waste of time! Directly actions! ;-)

I will try to update it before 24h!

What do you think?

Imagination or a real kiss?

See you!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#72

Originally posted by: amrutha131
Thanks for this early update
It's awesome👍🏼
Lol,Vivaan is Chakor's brother.Maithu,try to make Imli as Suraj's sister😆 in any of ur FF's
I guess kiss won't happen
Waiting for next !

Please mention not dear!

Thanks a lot!

For sure will make Imli his sister at least in one of my story! EvilMind!

Your guess may be right dear! I don't want to say anything!

See you tomorrow!

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nemo316

@nemo316

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Posted: 8 years ago

#73

Originally posted by: maithu_
It's my pleasure dear!
Glad you loved it!
I have said that Vivaan will be here when we talked about Orenda in MIB!
Hope he is useful at least here.

And you will see how speed they will be in future!
No waste of time! Directly actions! ;-)

I will try to update it before 24h!
What do you think?
Imagination or a real kiss?

See you!

Isn't it too soon for a real kiss? unless it's on the cheeks.

It's clear that Suraj is attracted to Chakor, but I think Chakor is yet to develop feelings for him, may be after the dance, she'll feel different.

It would be great if you can update this soon. Thanks!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#74

Originally posted by: meshmesh

Isn't it too soon for a real kiss? unless it's on the cheeks.
It's clear that Suraj is attracted to Chakor, but I think Chakor is yet to develop feelings for him, may be after the dance, she'll feel different.
It would be great if you can update this soon. Thanks!

The thing is I'm half way to the next part.

So I will finish it only by this night and check it tomorrow!

That's why tomorrow.

Coming to analysis, I agree with you as a reader.

But we don't really know the real Chakor as much as we came to know Suraj, so everything is possible.

But Part 6 and 7 might be shockers in my POV.

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nemo316

@nemo316

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: maithu_

The thing is I'm half way to the next part.
So I will finish it only by this night and check it tomorrow!
That's why tomorrow.

Coming to analysis, I agree with you as a reader.
But we don't really know the real Chakor as much as we came to know Suraj, so everything is possible.
But Part 6 and 7 might be shockers in my POV.

I guess we'll get to know more about Chakor's feelings in part 5. I'm sure part 6 and 7 will be shockers in a good way.

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#76

Originally posted by: meshmesh

I guess we'll get to know more about Chakor's feelings in part 5. I'm sure part 6 and 7 will be shockers in a good way.

I'm hoping so dear!

And I'm trying to give a new Chakor here!

Hope the transformation will be smooth! Fingers crossed!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#77

Hey!

Glad you are all back to read this part!
Hope you like this part too!

Link to previous part: Part 4

Happy reading!

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Part 5

She closes in to kiss him with their eyes only for each other.
He shook his head 'NO' and leaves her.
Leaving her from his hold, she was shocked of getting to recall what she was up to, what she was going to do, what she would have done if he didn't react.
She palmed her mouth as tears started to form in her eyes.
She turned away from him and ran into her house.

He was standing there like a statue not knowing what to do.

"So buddy! Come let's have dinner!" Vivaan broke his statute pose.
"I...I don't feel like having something."
"Oh! Come on dude!"
"Please!"
"HHmm" Vivaan nodded understandingly "By the way where is Choti?"
After few seconds of reflection, he pointed towards the house entrance.

"Since the time we have moved she is always closing herself inside her room." taking his phone out of his pocket and composing her number "House to school and School to house, that's what she does."
"Choti!" he spoke to his sister.
"Come out and have dinner with us!"
"What answer is that?"
"You come here or we come there with whatever food I like?"
He smiled "Ok! Come!"

All this while Suraj was a silent spectator.

"She is vegi while I'm not! I knew she will fall for my threat."
Suraj smiled at his friend but it disappeared when he saw a sad Chakor nearing them with bent head.

She was in her land.
Her land of reflection.
Where she is the queen and all goes by her wishes.
Is she trying to come up with a conclusion?
Did she got what is happening to her?

"Hey Choti! What happened?" putting his hand around his sister's shoulder.
"Nothing!"
"Why your mood is off?"
She shook her head.
"Oh Oh Please Smile!" he asked his sister making faces.
"Please!" Suraj added.
She smiled a fake smile and stuck to her brother the rest of the evening.

They had dinner calmly.
When her parents asked her to cut the cake, she was watching Suraj.
And the same applied during the whole time when she fed her parents and her brother.
Then one by one everyone came and presented their gifts.
When Suraj came on the stage, there were a small commotion due to 2 children fighting for a chocolate bar, so Chakor mother went there and her father left the stage as he got an emergency call.

"Happy Birthday!" he said her handing her a small wrapped box.
"Thank you!" she shook her hand with his.
"Buddy! I told you not to" Vivaan was interrupted by Suraj.
"I wanted it." still his hand in hers and she is caressing the back of his hand with her thumb, sending shivers to his spine as his hand hair are standing still.
He tried to free his hand but didn't want to pull away forcefully.
"Ok!" Vivaan.
"I think I need to go!"
"Ok buddy! See you tomorrow! Thanks for coming!" her brother started to bring his hand from his pocket.
Seeing this, she left his hand with a smile playing on her lips and moved a little so they can shake hands.

Once they did their last bit of shaking hands, Suraj said:
"Tell your parents that I'm glad I met them." turning towards Chakor "Happy Birthday once again. See you tomorrow."
"Thank you and see you Suraj." she said with a confidence that she didn't knew she had.
He didn't expect her to call him like this.
He nodded one last time before leaving from there.

The party finished with a good note and she got back to her room just taking his gift.
She opened it slowly with pumping hearts to find a red velvet long box.
She started to think of what it could instead of opening it.
Finally coming to the conclusion, she opened it to find a beautiful set of anklets.

"How come he knew I love anklets?
May be bro said to him.
I should thank him.
What to do?" murmuring these lines, she got up and went to her brother's room to find it empty, she moved to his bed side table to find his phone but not him.
She heard the shower running sound and decided to not make any sound and just steal Suraj's number.
She went through his contact list but couldn't find anything.
So she went to message box and there she saw a message at 7:28 "In front of your house!" from NoRulesBuddy.
She remembered that he was the only guest from her brother's side and he said something similar when they were talking.
She smiled and shook her head and took his number before getting into her room.

Once settled on her bed, she typed a short message.
"Lovely anklets.
Thanks a lot Suraj! Hug"
Sending it, she waited for a reply for more than few minutes and finally slept in an non regular pose.

In his one room apartment, sleep was far away from the man who was dancing with his student few hours ago and who got a thank you message with a hug.
How can he sleep peacefully when what is happening to him and around is not what he expected.
He never expected to have a family for himself.
All he always thought is studies and studies.
And whenever possible help the orphanage from where he came and do a lot more social services but not a life for him, not a family for him.
Not the feelings he is feeling now.
It's not right.
With all the thoughts running, he passed the night gazing at his ceiling.

Next day arrived with the new sunshine for the girl who turned a day older with confidence and determination.
She checked her phone, there was no messages.
She was disappointed but it was what she expected, so she didn't find it bad.
She sent "Good Morning Sun!" and put back her phone down.

She is now called adult.
Will it change something in her behaviour?
Yes, the confidence she has over something.
Nope as she is still doing her routine.

T clan was shocked to see Chakor in full form at the earlier hours of the day.
They even went towards Chakor to threaten her but she glanced an angry look saying:
"Don't dare to mess with me again. I can complain to your gang leader's father as he is fond of me as a daughter." in a thinking position "If I remember that's what he said yesterday in my BD party!" she left from there leaving all of their mouth hung open for hours.

All classes went well until the last lesson which is maths.
From the moment he entered, the tension between them was visible only to them as he never turned to her side but she was having all her attention only for him.
He gave them an exercise to do and started to go around all tables to check one by one and answer them if they had any doubts.
And when it was her round, he bent a little lower and cleared his throat. Was it to gain courage or get her attention?

She faced him but didn't say anything.
"Meet me after the class." he said.
She nodded.
"Do you have any doubt?"
"Not now!" she said calmly.

He got the meaning of her reply, so he went back to continue his helping session.
Was this helping session a disguise to speak to her?

They finished correcting the exercise and continued the lesson until the bell rang.
One by one everyone left from the room.
Chakor was taking all her time to put her things back in her bag.
Once she confirmed no movement in the corridor as their class room was the one facing it.
She got up and went near him.
All this while, he was checking his last minutes exercise result when he heard someone clear their throat.

"Thanks for staying Miss" he stopped seeing her shook her head.
"Chakor! Only Chakor!"

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Thanks for reading!
How was it?
Was it as you thought?
Are you still interested in the story? I mean, do you find it interesting or not?

Sorry if you feel it's short, I'm a bit busy in work.
Let me know about all this in the COMMENT section!
If you see the real Lady now and you like her, hit the LIKE button!

Next Part: Part 6

-Maithili

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago

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sonali mishra

@Shivi_forever

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 8 years ago

#78

Interesting update👏

So chakor has fallen for suraj😊

Suraj is hesitating a bit, maybe due to his background

Loved the new &bold chakor😉

There is a 360 degree change in her attitude😊

Loved suraj's gift

It is not boring, waiting for next

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Sania_suraj

@Sania_suraj

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#79

Hi di..

It was awesome..

I know suraj will stop her from kissing..bt i thought after tat chakor feel awkward to look at him..bt she s bold enough to meet him eye to eye..

What s behind tat confident chakor..

Poor suraj..

His gift s unique..moreover guys don't present anklet to some other girls rather than his lover or girl friend..bt our hero is always different and unique..

Loved tis quiet and calm suraj a lot..

I know y he asked her to meet at the end of class..to give her a nice advice..bt i know chakor won't take tat..

Next chapter is going to be a treat to our eyes..

Want to see the student teacher nok jhoks..

Eagerly waiting for the next update sis..

Luv u..tc

Edited by Sania_suraj - 8 years ago

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Hope09

@Hope09

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#80

Reading this makes me realise i missed a lot while i was ago.

This story of yours always manages to be my favorite.

As the story is progressing, i am loving it even more.

Chakor's bold avatar was superb. I could just imagine your writing in front of me. I see Chakor is taking a step towards Suraj this time. It was great to read.

It is too much intriguing...

Thanks a lot for your everytime pms they never make me miss anything...😃

Sorry for not commenting on last part ..i read it now with this part...😳

And you never need to be sorry for small updates ...as long as u keep giving this constant updates of each new story of yours i am more than happy with it..🤗

LOVE YOU!

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