Enough! - A DBO-IB SS Chap 5 Pg 11(24/06)

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This story, came to me back when we first met Jango, the friendly neighborhood alligator and has been languishing half-written in my WIP folder for a while now.

I feel I have to start posting this before it becomes completely pointless... and the storyline becomes superfluous.
I know, I know... I should be writing and updating Lost Chances, the sequel of Pryyhic Victory and a whole bunch of prompts from the LCU(Lost Chances Universe) 😆But this plot bunny just wouldn't let go.

This is how I wished the Kaali Thakur thing got resolved. Again, as per my current state of mind and disappointment with Omki-Shomki, this might not really end up all that happy for him.

But we will get to see quite a bit of the ensemble cast so... yay! for that?

Chapter Index:

01 - Pg 01

02 - Pg 03

03 - Pg 06

04 - Pg 08

05 - Pg 11


Without further ado, here's chapter 1 of Enough!
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Chapter 01 - A throbbing elbow and a hurting heart

As Gauri in her Chulbul avatar lay on the floor where her clueless husband had pushed her in his hurry to go off playing detective with one of his so-called arch enemies, Svetlana (who'd suddenly become a team player and everything was fine and dandy with that), She realized it was all her fault. All of this... this mess that her life was in at the moment, rather, the mess her life had become for quite a long while now, was definitely her fault. No... this was not an emotionally compromised Gauri, the sanskari wife who was happy revering her husband from a distance, speaking.

For once, this was Gauri Kumari Sharma the original version, the strong, independent and carefree woman she'd been before one Omkara Singh Oberoi crashed into her life... the part of her that had been sitting quietly in a corner, waiting for the infatuated version of her to wake up and smell the coffee. The part of her that was done with all of this shit, that needed to make her understand that no matter how devoted and dedicated she was, it didn't matter if the person on the receiving end didn't even know or care about it. That if the sensible part of her didn't wake up and speak up today, she would be lost and there was no way Gauri Kumari Sharma would let herself lose that easily.

Carefully sitting up and inspecting herself for any bruises or other injuries from the fall other than the throbbing elbow she'd landed on, she slowly moved her aching body to lean against the pillar nearby, most of her mind still on the problem at hand. Her husband, the man who'd likened Gauri to Svetlana in a disgusted tone, called both of them cheap, grasping gold-diggers, the man who knew the she-devil had drugged him, tried to murder his family members so that she could gain the upper hand and blackmail him and his father at the same time, actually probably murdered some people to keep her secret hidden... despite knowing all of that, the man had just swanned off to god only knew where with the same witch in question, no back up plan in sight.

Just because Svetlana had come up to him and told him she wanted to help, he believed her? Was there no concept of a double cross in the Oberoi universe? Would he have believed her the same way had she revealed herself as Gauri... no questions asked, no proof required? Of course not... Mr. One-track-mind Oberoi was like a bull seeing red... only one of a short list of things existed in his mind at any given point of time - Anger at his father, Sadness and frustration about his mother, a combination of anger and frustration at having to bear the company of Svetlana and sheer hatred for her, Gauri Kumari Sharma.

As Chulbul, she'd heard from the other members of the family that Omkara had been a very different person some time back... very quiet, philosophical and caring... but since their first meeting, this was the man she'd seen, she'd come to know and by some godforsaken miracle, fall for. She was surely a masochist for liking a man who made no bones about hating her.

She'd begged him repeatedly, told him about the bloody alligator and still, he'd just pushed her aside like yesterday's garbage and walked off to join Ms. I-kill-people-for-fun for a sunny afternoon of chor-police. Granted, the alligator thing was a bit too filmi to believe, and she'd not made a very convincing argument, making up most everything on the fly, but she'd tried her best given her situation. The only other thing she could've done is revealed herself and that might've resulted in her being thrown off the first floor rather than just pushed aside and he would still have gone after the two older men.

No... this was not the time for those questions or the negative sounding answers that flooded her mind. Every second was necessary now, to find help, to do something, to assist Omkara in any way she could, to save his life from the evil she'd brought into their lives. Hurriedly, she made a call, convinced the person on the other side to listen to her and respond quickly, and sat back to wait. They would be there in less than a minute and Gauri needed the time to think things over. Not only was a plan to be made to save Omkara and his family, a plan also had to be made for their future... her future.

Gauri may have very well been a not so educated village belle from Bareilly who didn't speak fancy English or dress up in slinky clothes, put a ton of makeup on and sleep in iceboxes to preserve one's vanity. But she was proud of herself and what she had accomplished given the set of circumstances life had dealt her.

Gauri had never had a problem introducing herself as who she was, Gauri Kumari Sharma, paanchvi pass from Bareilly. It wasn't because she thought that passing 5th grade was an achievement. She was intelligent enough to know that her qualifications made her fit for exactly zero jobs that paid anything. She introduced herself that way because it left no cause for resentment from the opposite party in most conversations and it let them underestimate her readily.

Gauri might not have had an academic pedigree to show, but she was very street smart and possessed a never say die attitude that had made her accomplish so much more than even her own understanding of her capability. And if there was one person who had never underestimated or discouraged her in the entire 23 long years she had spent on the planet, it was Gauri herself. Through all the twists and turns her life had taken, she managed to keep herself upright, cheerful and a generally positive person.

Gauri simply knew that her Shankarji would never let her, his favorite chiraiyya, down. Whether any divine intervention had ever happened in her life or not, this indestructible belief had led her to pick herself up when down and carry on. Even without her own knowledge, she had become her own manifestation of her favorite God. She prayed to the idol every day, spoke to it about all her troubles and then went on to fix everything herself.

Now too, Gauri knew that she would have to fix her broken life herself and not wait for divine intervention or a prince on a white horse. However, there were two men in the house she knew she could depend on when it came to saving one of their own.

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This is my try at writing a What If? of the Jango Unchained 😆 portion of DBO we were treated to some time back.

What if Shivaay and Rudra had been along for the ride? What if they were able to actually surprise Kaali Thakur instead of giving their own game away? What if Om had come to know of Chulbul's truth back in Kaali's vacation house in Mumbai in front of the rest of his family?

So many what if's and so little time...

Anyways, please don't forget to like and comment your thoughts, ideas and opinions. You know how much I love hearing from you guys.

Cheers!

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Yep you are just firing with RIKARA,probably in the hangover of too many RIKARA segments (just joking)
So many ifs, yes I am also waiting.
please do update lost chances, I just loved it...
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You know wat you are an awesome writer...
The way you describe things na it's awesome
so many different versions of rikara story...
I am loving this
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Yayy! Another Rikara story from you is a treat. I'm gonna love this one too, for sure. It's quite interesting. Post soon. :)
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Interesting start.
I am loving the concept of this story.
Gauri character is awesome and the moment of realization was very well written.
Looking forward to read this story.

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I love how you bring out Gauri's inner world...make everything she does and thinks make sense and at the end of it, help us, as readers to relate to her.
This was stunningly written. Can't wait for you to continue with this!
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Ginie, please do continue. Well will love to see Shivay and Rudra in action with Gauri as well.
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Yaar am loving Gauri more by each passing day and your chapter just potrays my exact thoughts.. She never shies away that she is just 5 th grade pass but uses her brains to get out of trouble. When all t he women in the household sit and cry or scheme and plot, she is the one to use her brain to get omkie out of trouble. I want to see obros with Gauri bonding.. Rudy is the best for that.. She doesnot need any prince in shining armour.. she can save herself. Girl is a rockstar⭐️
Superb writing.. Love Jango.. Love Dr. Dang ki snakes.. Love Freezerlana.. Spread Love😆😆
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Loved it... How RI realised that the concept of happy endings and prince.charming are vague...you have to be.your own savoir...continue asap
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Originally posted by: Shraddhadikshit

Yep you are just firing with RIKARA,probably in the hangover of too many RIKARA segments (just joking)

So many ifs, yes I am also waiting.
please do update lost chances, I just loved it...


Hi Shraddha!

Thanks for the love... I actually haven't watched any of the SBS segments or even the show for the past two weeks or so... just keeping up with everything through WUs. I watched on and off from the 15th I guess but even then only the show. I needed to focus to finish writing PV asap.

There are so many ways the KT thing could've been done better... this is my attempt at one of those ways.

Stay tuned for updates

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