Enough! - A DBO-IB SS Chap 5 Pg 11(24/06) - Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey guys... I'm back with an update.
Thanks for loving the first chapter so much...

I'm gonna be a tad busy this weekend, so if I haven't commented on any stories, replied to any comments or liked anyone's awesome work yet, I will definitely catch up during the week... please understand and forgive.

Other than that, let's jump right in to the story! We get to see not only Shivaay and Rudra, but also Anika and Soumya!
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Chapter 02 - A secret revealed

She looked up expectantly as she heard quick footsteps approaching her, hoping to see both of Omkara's brothers. But the sight that met her eyes was that and more. Shivaay and Rudra were definitely walking up to her with quizzical expressions on their faces but following them were Anika bhabhi and Soumya... Oh this was not good.

"Kya hua Chulbul mere bulbul... hum sab ko kyun bulaya hai yahaan? O ne hume bulaaya kya? Vaise O hai kahaan?"

Before she could answer, Shivaay, Anika and Soumya intervened in that order

"And why are you sitting like this on the floor?"

"Are... Chulbul tum theek to ho na?"

"Haan... tumhari aankhen inti red kyun hain? Kuch problem hai kya?"

"Woh..."

"Ek minute... O ne tumhe kuch daanta kya? Oho... Bhaiyya aur bhabha ke beech fight huh?"

Wiggling his eyebrows up and down, Rudra was intent on teasing her as always and Gauri felt her frustration mounting and control on her emotions slipping.

"Aap sab ek minute chup rahenge to main kuch kahoongi" she yelled

The fact that she'd just yelled at her husband's brothers, that too in her Gauri voice and used the female form to address herself hit her simultaneously, making Gauri fold in on herself and collapse back on to the floor.

"Fhat the Wuck?" two male voices ejaculated simultaneously while

"Kahoongi?!" two females yelled

Slowly, the rest of her willpower and energy leaving her, Gauri pulled off her cap, glasses and wig, and let out her long hair from the net it was in. Looking at their flabbergasted expressions, Gauri knew she had to use the precious silence to make them listen to her, to the important thing at the moment.

"Haan... main ladki hoon. Par ab ye important nahin hai. Maine Bade bhaiyya aur Rudy bhaiyya ko yahaan is liye bulaya kyunki Omkara ki jaan khatre mein hai. Unhe bachaane ke liye mujhe aapki zaroorat hai."

"Ek minute... pehle ye batao tum kaun ho? And why should we believe you? Tum ne hum sab se itne dinon se jhoot bola hai, making us believe that you were a guy..."

In frustration, she put her palm on her head and with tears in her eyes said

"Hum apni kasam khaake kehte hain, Omkara ki jaan khatre mein hai. Wo Kaali Thakur aur unke pitaji ka peecha karne Sultana... Svetlana madam ke saath gaye hain. Unhe nahin pata ki Kaali Thakur ne unko maarne ka plan banaya hai."

"Kaali Tha---- Kya ye wahi..."

"Haan... ye wahi Bareilly waala Kaali Thakur hai bade bhaiyya"

"But wo to mar gaya tha... He died in front of my eyes. Ye kaise ho sakta hai? And you... how do you know about Bareilly? Tum ho kaun aur yahaan kyun aai ho? What game are you playing?"

Most people get intimidated when Shivaay Singh Oberoi starts yelling at them. To his knowledge, there were three people who didn't react with fear - His dadi, Om and Anika. And now, he'd found the fourth.

"Humaare baare mein baad mein tehkikaat kar leejiye jitna karna hai. Abhi humein samajhne ki koshish kijiye... please. Aapke bhai ki jaan ko khatra hai. Aap Kaali Thakur ko jaante hain na... to please... Kaali Thakur abhi bhi zinda hai aur wo apne bhai ki maut ka badla Omkara se lena chaahta hai. Usne unhe ye bhi kehke dhamkaaya ki wo apne bhai ki maut ke liye unki ma aur bhaaiyon ko sazaa dega."

As an idea came to her, Gauri pulled out her phone and shoved it at Shivaay, a video ready to play on its screen

"Humein pata hai ki aap humari baat ka yakeen nahin karenge... yeh video humne aaj hi kuch ghante pehle liya tha... dekh lijiye aur phir aap hum par yakeen karte hain to hum aage baat karenge"

All four of them crowded around the tiny screen of the phone, watching as Kaali Thakur and Svetlana cavorted on it. At the sight of Kaali Thakur alive and well, the time stamp on the video confirming that it was indeed taken that very day, Shivaay turned stunned, wide eyes on Gauri, her miserable answering nod just solidifying his suspicions into a ball of lead in his stomach. Shivaay knew just what sort of a monster this man was and what he was capable of doing when he was angered. Om definitely was in a lot of trouble if the monster had not only found him but managed to come inside their house, cut a business deal with his bade papa and threaten Om and Jhanvi so openly. And to think, if not for Chulbul, he might not have known about this until it was too late.

"Are... ye Svetlana to ek number ki cheapdi nikli... Mujhe pehle se hi shak ho raha tha is par..."

"Haan di... she is so cheap... Papa, then bade baal wale bhaiyya aur baad mein is Kaali ko bhi nahin choda"

"Wo sab chodiye... bade bhaiyya, hum jaante hain ki s..sa... Woh Omkara ke pitaji aur Omkara, dono ghar ki gaadiyan lekar gaye hain. To aapke paas aisa kuch idea hai jisse unko track kar sakte hain?"

Shivaay looked at Gauri speculatively for a second, before nodding his head and having a short, strongly worded conversation on his phone with Khanna about tracing the whereabouts of all the cars that had gone out from their garage.

"Maine Khanna ko bol diya hai... results aane mein paanch minute lagenge. Tab tak... I have some questions Chulbul... actually tumhara naam kya hai?"

"Humara naam Gauri Kumari Sharma hai... Bareilly se"

"Gauri... kitna sweet naam hai... naam bhi sweet aur tum bhi. Jab se tum Chulbul ban kar ghar mein aayi na, tum mujhe bahut achi lagti ho..."

A slight smile made its way onto Gauri's lips as she turned thankful eyes to Anika.

"Acha hai... bhagwan ke ghar mein der hai... Andheri nahin. Thank you bhagwan... tumne meri sun li... O mere liye bhabha nahin, ek cute si bhabhi laaye hain"

"Rudy bhaiyya aapko kaise pata?!" and "Shut up Rudra!" rang out together. And there for a whole 30 seconds, there was a heavy silence as everyone stared at Gauri

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Just so you know, this has not been proofread so any mistakes you find are all mine and I take full responsibility. I just really wanted to give you guys something to read while I was out for the weekend!

Hope you like this update... Please don't forget to like and comment your ideas, thoughts and opinions... I love hearing from you.

Cheers!


Edited by writergenie17 - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome update yar...its tooo interesting as well as humorous...gauri shocked everyone...so I think now everyone will go to help om...it will be more interesting...but the way I think now everyone gets that she is om's wife
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Posted: 8 years ago
#23
Superb yaar...
Now we need to see how Om is going escape??
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Posted: 8 years ago
#24
Ha ha ha hilarious Rudy super awsm loving him
Mission om ko bachaooo next gym long update plz👏😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#25
This was totally awesome. Loved it. I liked the idea that Gauri herself revealed her identity. Love your take on DBO. Post soonnn. Much love.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#26
Nice one really liked the way your revealed the that chulbul is gauri in front of the ShivRu and Anika and Soumya...
I really liked when rudra said O humaare liye Bhabha nhi bhabhi laaye hain two saying shut up rudra and gauri saying rudy bhaiya aapko kaise pata was amazing...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#27
Here comes our Gauri
The way she handled Oberoi's👏
Specially shivaay

It was hilarious
The way everyone was reacting
Chulbul sach mei bulbul Nikla
God Rudy was so happy
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Posted: 8 years ago
#28
Secret is out😉 Our Rudy is going to be very happy to get Bulbul Bhabhi. It will be hilarious and funny to see their reactions. I really hope Shivaay and the others believe her. Hope Jhanvi or Bua Ma could back up her or are you going to show them as per the DBO track??
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Posted: 8 years ago
#29
Awesome!! can't wait to read how it will shape out
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Posted: 8 years ago
#30
So I was really disappointed with the whole Chulbul drama because it took away from the strong not-so-modern uneducated female belle we were promised in the initial episodes of DBO.
But I love how you recovered Gauri from the little lapse of judgement and made her the strong, clear-headed girl from the initial episodes and that too with Rudra's comic timing eased into it. I love Shivaay hasn't just defaulted to trusting Gauri because for him his brother's words would always take precedence.

All in all, I love it. and cannot wait for more of it. I hope this the chemistry we see between the leads in the coming episodes of the mahasangam because it's restrained as they're still strangers but they're still kindredspirit to an extent.

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