Corrupted : Desires of the Devils.Chapter 3 Updated

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Chakor's Pov
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I almost forgot about the events which happened 7 years ago and I foolishly expected him and his friends to forget too. But how can they ? when their lives turned upside down that night, But why me ? Why they're doing this to me when in fact I was infected as much as they were, the only difference would be that I did't have to spend 3 years of my life in "Jail" like they did.
Suraj's Pov
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She is living her life like nothing happened but never mind, I, Suraj Rajvanshi neither "Forget" nor "Forgive" I'm coming back for you Chakor and you will be "Corrupted" this time, Like I was...
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First of all I'm sorry to all those lovelies out there who like to read my FF "Aafato'n Ke parindey",because I'm no longer going to write it and please don't ask me the reason...Trust me I planned it to be of more than 70+ chapters and the story's already cooked in my mind but I decided to discontinue it and try something new like completely new...

So this is a small teaser of my new FF "Corrupted" Its going to be completely different from Udaan except for some characters...If you liked this and you want me to continue please do let me know and I will give a proper intro chapter in an hour or two...And I assure you this one, I won't be leaving half cooked and this one is way shorter than the previous one...I hope you all like and love it too like you did to "AKPI" ...I'm sorry once again and ummm Please tell me about this fast😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This one sounds interesting and teaser is able to garner curiosity... would👍🏼 definitely like to read...

But why will you not complete,the previous one,😲,,,come Jasmine,its one of fav ff on this forum...you can't leave it midway...😒
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: KUTUR

This one sounds interesting and teaser is able to garner curiosity... would👍🏼 definitely like to read...

But why will you not complete,the previous one,😲,,,come Jasmine,its one of fav ff on this forum...you can't leave it midway...😒


Thanks Kutur ( This is your name right ? Sorry if I'm wrong I have a rotten memory ) I hope you like this ff too...

I don't know the reason myself...Udaan recently disappointed me big times and trust when I say that I felt like stop watching udaan it means something...I'm watching it from day 1, when its first episode aired and never missed an episode but for past few weeks its giving me Blah 🤢 vibes. I only liked 23rd and 24th march's episode bass...All this disappointment made my heart sour and now I don't find the kick to continue that ff...But let me see If udaan gets back to what it actually is I'll definitely continue that ff too...plus this one is a short so maybe by the time I finish this I might get motivate to continue ...Don't be upset I'm sure you'l like it more than akpi because of the slight, like tiny viny writing improvement 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting teaser👏
Looking forward to this😊
Don't discontinue AKPI, loved that story
Continue it when you feel writing it
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi jasmine ❤️ I love to read anything and everything on Sukor. ..so eagerly waiting for your new story on sukor. ..
And about AKPI...my most most most favourite FF ..I'm really addicted to that ff...but now you decided to discontinue that I'm feeling bad re...but I respect your decision. ..lekin ummeed hai ki you again start to write AKPI soon...Ummeed pe duniya kaayam hai yaar...😊 waiting for your new update. ..
With lotz of love
LORA 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Teaser is amazing! 👏
Waiting for the story!
Title itself is interesting!
All the best!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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interesting
waiting to read more
plz dont discontinue u any of ur stories may it be this or AKPI
cont sonn
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I'm angry with you jas...or naraz bhi hu...
Why you decided to discontinue my most favourite AKP ff...This is not done...😔

But this teaser is intresting very interesting...I like it a lot...🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Corrupted : Desires of the devils *18+*
Chapter 1 "Angel's Desires and dreams"

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I was late for my own farewell party kept at "Rajvanshi Mansion" my soon to be In-laws house. I did not wanted everyone to know about me being late so I decided to go in from the back door stealthily and I almost succeeded but out of the corner of my eye, I spied "Girja mausi" rounding the corner, but I did't stop

"Chakoriyaa"! She shouted again and this time I had no choice but to stop otherwise the entire haveli will know about me coming late to my own farewell party...

"Yes girja mausi..why are you shouting ? I'm not deaf you know 😃" I said while trying to look calm..

"You are very late chakoriya" said girja mausi disappointed.

"I know, I had to pack an extra bag and it took me an extra half hour so I'm a little late" I tried to explain myself.

"Ranjhana ji has been looking for you" said girja mausi and I shot up my eyebrows .

"Has she really?" I eyed her with mock astonishment.

"Well she sent me to look for you" she said smilingly.

Yeah I highly doubted that "Choti Maalkin" of this haveli and second wife of 'Kamal Narayan Rajvanshi" was spending her precious time looking for me .

"Your dress is on your bed" She called after me as I walked around the corner..

Chakor's pov
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I'm "Chakor Bhuvan Laal", I was born into a poor family trying their hardest to live a normal life in a village name "Azaadgunj" But their "Hardest" was't hard enough, they never thought about stepping out of Azaadgunj's boundaries and learn outer lifestyle and better ways to survive but I should't blame them for their mindset, Instead I should thank God for giving me a mind of "Free Bird" who in order to spread its wings tried her best to achieve her goals and I should thank God for giving me a talent of fast running, because if it was't for my running speed I would've never caught the eye of a tourist coach who came to Azaadgunj for its beauty and he also happened to be Kamal narayan's Son-In-Law "Arjun sir" He mentored me, taught me to F for Focus on my goals and not to mention he's the one who made my parents agree to let me go to Lucknow for higher studies and my sports career. In lucknow I lived with Arjun sir and his wife Bhagya, kamal narayan's only daugher. I was 7 years old when I left Azaadgunj, I remember they day I entered arjun sir's house is the same day I saw Kamal Narayan and his first wife 'Tejaswani's son "Suraj Rajvanshi" who was 11 years old at the time and came to meet Bhagya didi by taking a leave from his hostel. He studied at the same school where I was about to roll in and he was my senior. No, No, you should't be thinking about him chakor, you're about to get married to "Vivaan Rajvanshi" Kamal narayan and Ranjhana's son, and my childhood friend and Suraj's foe . Anyways I'm going to Delhi, to participate in a marathon and attend a sports university and dare I say that I'm excited as hell because after dad's death and mom's sickness I was never allowed to go anywhere without vivaan being at my side because of the protective nature Rajvanshi family had for their sports star to be bahu, their protectiveness was not something I liked instead it worked as chains for me, the chains which always tied me to earth whereas I wanted to reach to the skies and this protectiveness is the reason why I started to spend my most of the time at haveli because there were few servants in my house to look after Maa 24*7, It all resulted in Ranjhana maa arranging a separate room for me. But because vivaan has to go study in London where all the "Rajvanshi's" have, except for one, I got the chance to spread my wings and I manipulatively convinced everyone to let me go to delhi where I'll be staying in a rented apartment in a building which was by the way suggested to me by Ranjhana maa and it happened to fit into my budget. So tonight is my last night in Azaadgunj because tomorrow will begin my official journey to reach the Skies⭐️
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I hope this was an interested introduction. I still don't know how to write intros properly so I tried it this was. I hope you all like this and I promise next Update will be longer and much better but till then do comment and let me know what are you thinking about this FF...

Love-Jasmene😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oohhh come on Jas...This was fantastic...
Start was awesome...I'm excited for next...Please update soon...

Kaise maanu khwaab tha wo..,
Jab need khuli,
Jagah jagah bikhari hui thi khooshbu teri...!!!

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