Corrupted : Desires of the Devils.Chapter 3 Updated - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
#11
Interesting update👏
Loved chakor's intro😊
Ranjhana is same as in show
Waiting for suraj's intro
Waiting for next update
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Jasmine ❤️Interesting start dear..loved it...waiting for the next update and eagerly waiting for Suraj's entry. ...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Khushi_Dillse

Oohhh come on Jas...This was fantastic...

Start was awesome...I'm excited for next...Please update soon...

Kaise maanu khwaab tha wo..,
Jab need khuli,
Jagah jagah bikhari hui thi khooshbu teri...!!!


Really ? You really liked this ?? *Jumping from one place to another like a monkey* Thank you so much...And yes I'll be updating next part soon😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vinlora

Jasmine ❤️Interesting start dear..loved it...waiting for the next update and eagerly waiting for Suraj's entry. ...

Thank you so much viny..😳
I'm glad you're liking it...😊
And one more thing I decided to continue AKPI but after finishing this one...This is short anyway so maybe next month se I'll continue the other ff ..Happy ???😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Jas!
First part is superb!
Chakor self introduction is nice!
Eagerly waiting for the next part dear!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Chapter #2 *It has already begun*

10:45 pm "AzaadGunj"

I was ready, wearing a knee-length dress which Ranjhana maa chose for me, it was black colored, "Black" his favorite color...

"Chakor"
I snapped out of my thoughts, jerking my head to the left, hearing vivaan call my name. And I could't help but feel my stomach tighten as he came in the room and slipped his hand around the right side of my neck-----Never the left side-----and rubbed his thumb across my cheek, I let out a breath, forcing my muscles to relax.

"Lets go, everyone's waiting for you!" He said in a firm tone and without hearing my answer, he held my hand and we came downstairs to the party.

10:45 "Lucknow"
At a Bar

Suraj was sitting on a chair with a glass of whisky in his hand and the man seated on his left side was "karan Mehta" , and on his right side was seated "Garv singhaniya". They were all looking in the same direction where another man named "Rahul singh" was dancing with girls and enjoying it to the fullest.

"Should we pull him back" Asked Garv

"Naahh let him enjoy, after all this is the last time we're here for time pass, because once she comes here, the real game will begin" Said Karan with a smirk.

'Right Suraj" asked karan with a naught look in his eyes.

"I promise, The day, no, the minute she steps in this city, our game and her worst nightmare is going to start. She always wanted to be free, she never valued the protectiveness other has for her, she always like to fly high in sky all by herself, so let it be. Come here Ms.Chakor Bhuvan Laal, and I'll show you how it feels to be left alone in this world because I'm going to take each and every person that ever cared for her, away from her " Said suraj while his eyes became blood red and he gulped the whisky down his throat.

1:30 pm "Lucknow"

I am standing in front of my newly rented apartment's building, with a big smile on my face. Because I finally am free, free to spread my wings, free to face the world alone. Vivaan by now would also be at airport to go to London so I'm not worried for anyone to try to scare me of being alone again like he did yesterday, after the party.

"This way Ms.Chakor" The man smiled and took a set of keys, leading me toward some elevators. "I'm Rghuveer, one of the managers."


"You're all the way up on the twenty-first floor," he explained, stopping us at the elevator and pushing the button, "which has an amazing view. You'll be pleased."

I gripped the strap of my bag over my chest, barely able to wait. Nothing sounded so good as to wake up in the morning and gaze over the vast city, a horizon of buildings that touched the sky and millions of people working and living.

While some felt lost in large cities"the lights, noise, and action too much"I couldn't contain the thrill of being part of something bigger. The energy excited me.

I checked my phone again, making sure I hadn't missed a call from my mother. I was still worried about her. And kind of worried about me, too, even though I didn't let it stop me from leaving AzaadGunj this morning.

The soft bell dinged, and I followed Mr. Raghuveer into the elevator, seeing him press twenty-one. But I narrowed my eyes, noticing that there were no floors higher than that.

"I thought there were twenty-two floors," I inquired, standing next to him.

"There are." He nodded assuredly. "But that floor houses only one residence, and he has his own private elevator across the lobby."

I turned my head forward again, understanding. "I see."

"Your floor only has two apartments," he explained, "since the apartments are quite a bit larger. And the other apartment on your floor is currently vacant, so you'll enjoy lots of privacy."

The apartments were quite a bit larger on my floor? I didn't remember anyone saying anything about that .

"And here we are," he chirped, stepping forward with a smile as the doors opened. He held out an arm, inviting me to go first.

Stepping out of the elevator, I looked left and then right, seeing a narrow, well-lit hallway with black, marble floors and walls the color of a sunset. He veered left, leading me to an apartment door, but I cast a quick look over my shoulder, seeing another massive, black door with the gold numbers 2104 on it.

That must be the empty one.

We reached the other apartment door"mine, apparently"and the manager immediately slid the key in and swung the door open, walking right inside.

I watched him saunter off into the apartment, while I remained standing in the doorway, frozen.

"Um..." Okay.

This didn't make sense. This apartment was huge.

I slowly stepped inside, my arms hanging limply at my sides as I took in the high ceilings, spacious living room, and a full wall of windows, giving away the beautiful patio courtyard, complete with a fountain and actual grass outside. The same black marble floors carried in here from the hallway, but the apartment walls were cream-colored.

I was confused now. Why would my low budget apartment be so luxurious ? I asked him to check the Rental contract details and everything that's related to me renting this apartment but in vain because he was sure that this is mine, and absolutely with the same amount of rent. I was't sure about what to do but I had no choice so I accepted it for the time being. After sometime I unpacked and left to explore the area and find a good cafe and I was lucky to find one soon just opposite my building . I sat on a chair near glass window from where the road and my building's entrance was visible. My coffee arrived soon and I held the cup close to my lips t take a sip while looking at my building's entrance where A Black Lamborghini stopped and the figure coming out of it took my breathe away when the man turned his face toward my side to close the door, I felt my heart stopping for a second and the sheer need to breath was increasing by the every second I stared at the man. He luckily did't see me and went inside my building...

"What he's doing here ? What he's doing at my building? Why is he here ? " My mind was flooded by these questions...I failed to decide weather I should be happy and excited to see him or be fearful ? But why should I be afraid ? what did I do wrong ? Everything that happened that night 7 years ago was the man's fault who just went inside my building Mr.Suraj Rajvanshi...

The End

Pr-cap : 7 years ago-----In high school-----4 figures in masks-----Chakor breaking a Jewelry shop's glass-----*Present* Karan trying to kiss chakor while suraj watches---

That's it I hope you guys are liking this...Maybe this chapter was't interesting but I bet my Aloo's and promise you that next chapter will be much more interesting ...Till then do comment and tell me how you feel about this chapter...


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Edited by Chashmish786 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#17
Interesting update👏
Suraj & his friends characterisation is so dark😲
What happened 7 years back, why suraj wants to punish chakor😲
Chakor recognised suraj, have they meet each other
Scary precap
Waiting for next
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Posted: 8 years ago
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So its clear chakor don't like vivaan...then why she is engaged to him...Suraj hates chakor but why...?? Why he want revange to her...??? Chakor's apartment in suraj's building I think this is Suraj's first move ye uski chal hai keep eye on chakor or get closer to her...mysterious and dark suraj i like him and like cute chakor also...superb update yaar...love it
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Posted: 8 years ago
#19
WOW👏
Was waiting for the past since the trailer.
Interesting and intriguing.

Happy that Vivaan went to London leaving Sukor free.

My guess:
1) Chakor will slap Karan
OR
2) Suraj will stop at last moment

I can imagine really well with all the details u r writing.
Well written dear!

Waiting for the next part.😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#20
The interest is building up!
Chakor does not like Vivaan but is still marrying him! Why!

And SuKor are gonna meet again, past is gonna unravel! Update soon and PM me plz?

-Sanu

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