Sail Through Styx A SwaSan SS complete pg 1 (12/20)

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#171

On Side Note ..Saajan has got some of my fav numbers ..which I keep crooning😳😳

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#172

Originally posted by: lucky.m
On Side Note ..Saajan has got some of my fav numbers ..which I keep crooning😳😳

I have nothing against Saajan music, they are masterful and timeless...especially jiye toh jiye kaise makes my heart ache every time I hear it It's the story I don't find agreeable. ..It was one of the few cases where I felt like siding with Salman Khan.

Thank you for the lovely comment dearest will reply in detail later. Meanwhile I love it when you call me wicked 😉

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#173

Originally posted by: kritz4ever
Loved it

Thanks a lot!😃

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#174

Originally posted by: NitaReid

I love having you write on swasan. I finally managed to read first two then I saw your final update 😲.. I was plenty shocked I suppose.. I didn't want it to end.. Just go on and on.. So decided to comment once I read the final chapter.. Here you go long blabbering in next post if my network allows it until then I loved it..

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Nita

I love writing on SwaSan too. But the exams are around the corner so I had to keep it short. You know what else I love, reading your comments!

Thanks in advance dearest!

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: NitaReid
Hi Saku

I am here.. As always for blabbering.. Girl your works can make me confused and amazed both at the same time... I read the first two chapter right after I posted in vajra I am not confused about vajra.. Then I read the first two chapters and honestly no one can keep suspence like you do.. I literally felt like wow I need to know who is who and I really wanted to play detective and solve it using my brain.. So thought let reread it tomorrow and once and if i get an idea then comment on it.. Because believe me I was as always completely clueless but shocked and surprised by the chapters..

Then the next day I woke up to the fact you updated I did mini happy dance in my mind at that but the word final chapter did not go well with me.. Here I was trying to catch and understand this tale like vajra and you ended it.. Well for all my plans to reread twice before reading the final chapter went for an toss in my curiosity to read the final chapter.. So I did read chapter 3 as well and now I am no longer confused.. For all the suspence you build you do clear it in an way everyone would understand including clueless one like me.. So enough of me being clueless.. Coming to the SS.. It was such an amazing and interesting idea.. I heard about the disease as well but not really know much then what I heard.. But the way you penned it down was splendid just like the way all your works are Saku dearest..

I loved it.. Though I was clueless in the beginning as always I loved it.. Just like how I love vajra and love getting lost in the mystery in vajra.. I am sad it ended soon but I know you are busy so I understand.. Thanks for the December project of your.. Once you exams ends.. Can I get an new year project.. Pretty please.. I would be waiting.. Until then I could just go back to vajra thread and wait patiently for an update..

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Nita

Hi Nita,

Well honesty here the whole game depended on not knowing who is who so I was extra careful with my words. Otherwise I'll let something slip and all you great detectives would have caught me. It was one reason for keeping it short, the suspense was too much to be dragged on.

I do have a few ideas on new stories, but to scared to start working on them now. These exams are pretty important for finals. I can't promise but let's keep hope for a January project too.

It meant a lot to know you liked it dearest . To know that you took time to read it and enjoyed it is a big thing.

Loads of love,

Saku

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#176

Originally posted by: lucky.m
Saku🤗
I called you Wicked .I take back my words ..Let me find something else ..Super Wicked😈😈 who would be laughing like buwha ha ha at plight of your readers going wild with guesses only to realize it was never what is seemed to be.

😆🤣 In last comment I was like ..Finally I figured out ..How couldn't I notice and in next update which you shocked saying completed ,before I could even think of some theories with such a twist in tale😲😲 .. What was that .. can I say Jahapana tussi gr8 ho⭐️ 👏 and then I was rofling on my state, of my theory going terribly wrong of Narrator being Ragini ..Aww God ...Lucky and Ragini are Swargvaasi's and we have Swara and Sanskaar all along ..hmm ..😲😲

Kavita ...I never thought I would say this to cavity, but yeah she was nice .That's best I can say for her and Sekhar ..He is disgusting.😡.😡That should do and now about pleasant things .. all those Swasan moments ..ahh.. that light teasing banter with breezy love in air ..my dil goes hmm.❤️❤️ Did you have more of their scenes which you chopped off to end ...If Yes ..please post them when you get free .

I loved your December project 👏⭐️.👍🏼..all happies ..A simple yet a moving tale with a superb twist .. that's what makes this stand out .It will stay for long with me.

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Lucky

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Girl you made me sound like Alladin's genie, although I like the idea of being that powerful...his figure makes me wary, you know with that pot belly and blue complexion?😆 certainly not my new year look!

Well jokes aside, your comments always make me go ROFL and then blush...love you for that!

Thanks a super ton for the sweet words dear, I reread this a handful if times for past few days and my day instantly brightened up.

Lots of love,

Saku

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#177

Originally posted by: krishuuu
Sakura..
Unred @ 16..

Talia

Thanks Talia😳

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Saku dearest 🤗🤗🤗

There are times when one is simply lost for words, wondering how one's review can do justice to something so splendid, so painstakingly crafted and portrayed.

This story was a work of art. A short story that deserves to be published, to be shared with a wider audience. Loved every single thing about it, the deft way you wove the present and the past, Swara's memories, 'Ragini's' thoughts, Lakshya's promise to always wait for her, Sanskaar's irrevocable, immeasurable love for Swara.

The clues you tucked in were masterly. 👏👏 The twists and turns in the tale were simply out of this world, the revelation that Sunny was pretending to be Lakshya was wonderful, but to cap it all, the revelation that it was Swara who thought she was Ragini. 👏👏

Kavita...she had a nice role to play as well. It is difficult dealing with unrequited love, especially if one feels that for a very close friend. I loved your portrayal of how Sunny dealt with the whole prickly situation in a kind but yet form manner, not wanting to give Kavita any false hope.

I absolutely abhor Shekar...what a lousy father he was, never able to truly be a Dad to Swara. He took out his own frustration and sense of guilt on her. When I imagine the pain Swara went through when he told her that he wished it was her who was dying, not Ragini; my blood runs cold.

All in all, a tale which was so beautifully conceptualised and executed. A true gem.

I am deeply touched by your special mention at the start. You know how much I love your works and how much I love discussing and analysing them with you. 🤗

I know no sorry allowed...but I must tell you that I feel bad about the time taken to unres here. Things got so cramped, I kept waiting for sufficient time to be able to comment from laptop...

Loads and Loads of Love and Advance wishes for the New Year 👏

Viji

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#179

Dear Sukura,

Guess I have to take comfort behind the saying - Better late than never - though a part of me feels that being this tardy is simply not late.

The prologue was hard hitting, a twist in the gut and a wrench in the heart, a shared loss and a common pain of losing someone between two people who now appear to have none but each other.

Durga Prasad has still not recovered from the pain of losing his wife while Sanskaar is still dealing with his loss. The agony is still raw still fresh for Durga Prasad.

But then I do not think your story is linear, firstly you mentioned that Durga Prasad was alone, as usual for the past ten years. Then his words in the ending, which Sunny remembers , "I promise I will not let you down" somehow, I feel there is an "Again" missing and Sanskaar's bitter rejoinder, "Home?"

Sanskaar as a surgeon, sharp and precise, yet too empathetic perhaps for a profession that deals directly with death, a brilliant characterisation. Did the present surgery, which unfortunately did not end in success cause the recollection of his earlier loss and thus makes him reach out for his father? I do not want to guess who that tall girl was, that one who caught his attention on that spring day and is the possible cause for his present heart break.

That is what I wrote when I had read only the prologue, but now in the light of the whole story, the only girl Sanskaar saw was Swara, Swara who was so desperate for a father's love that she went to lengths to mimic Ragini, including wearing high heels so that she looked tall. And when he comes out of the theatre saying "he has lost her" it was the "operation" from which Swara woke up convinced she was Ragini? But I stick to my opening sentence, even though I re read it the prologue is hard hitting, a twist in the gut and a wrench in the heart.

Surprising, I "felt" more for Ragini, she must be very brave, to face imminent death and yet love in the face of an impossible hope (dreams being impossible is acceptable but hope, that is such a sad premise). And then you fall in love, falling in love in itself is an act of great courage, a free fall in the hope that the person you have grown to love is there, to hold you. She cannot even dare hope of that, as she says if her heart is too weak to live maybe it should be too weak to feel. But then the heart is never that, whether it beats or not, it always feels, always dreams, always wants and always hurts.

And then it shifts to Swara - who is now convinced that she is Ragini - that must be the worst any daughter has to go through. Shekar is such a manipulative coward, ruined two women and destroyed both his daughters.

Kavita was another star here - a faint one, that twinkles as long as she hoped Sanskaar would love her but one that faded once she learnt that he would never do only to shine a little more brighter with the passage of time. When she asks if she could hug Sunny, it got me teary - it was a wistful request, of wanting to be hugged by the man she loved, who would never love her and one she would soon get over, as she said, he would soon be her past, the man she once loved. Also when she, or rather, when Swara (convinced she is Ragini) meets her for answers, Kavita's words convey the truth and a revelation of the greatness that is Sanskaar.

Then the whole story from Sanskaar POV - how he loved Swara enough to let her go, to let her believe that she was Ragini and was determined to never let himself love Ragini, that determination was what broke the mists in Swara's mind and finally they did manage to successfully sail the Styx.

I started reading it to write something, but got so lost that I am not sure if what I have written is coherent, but then I loved the tale. BTW, in the end you mention it was Swara and Sanskaar all along, but I guess the "Losar" festival was Ragini and Laksh?

And yes, even though I did cry, it was a lovely tale. As I always say, keep writing and keep sharing.

love,

Nyna