Crash and Burn ( A PriVeer OS) - Page 7

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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: fallingpieces

So what I love about the PriVeer dynamic and something I think you captured really beautifully in this, especially right at the end with him wiping away her tears, is that Ranveer is by nature and by profession a protector. He's the hero of his own story and in his mind, the Oberois are evil and Priyanka is supposed to be a cunning and deceitful vampy vixen.

Only... she isn't.

She's a gentle, kind and innocent young woman. Fragile both physically and apparently emotionally and that speaks to the inherent protector within him. It draws him to her in a way I don't think he can really make sense of because she's nothing like what he expected her to be.

In the same way, he sees Priyanka. He has made her his target and he's made her the main character in the Oberoi play which is fantastic and forces a girl whose own family allows her to fade into the wallpaper to have to come forth and defend herself and speak out and fight back. Priyanka probably saw him as yet another man who would protect and forget about her- but that's not what he does and I love that you made him make her talk and that he deliberately makes her uncomfortable to push her out of her comfort zone. In part maybe it's because he's trying to get her to expose herself and reveal that she really is the evil vamp he thought she would be simply wearing the mask of an innocent fairy... but maybe, just maybe, it's because he's fascinated by a woman he can't help but want to protect while at the same time being dazzled by the flashes of strength she shows when she pushes back and refuses to be cowed by him.

GDI you're a wonderful writer and so you've made my brain go off on an irrelevant tangent. 😆

This was a pleasure to read! TEAM PRIVEER ALL THE WAY.


Thank you so much for taking time out to leave this insightful comment on a pair that I increasingly find more and more fascinating.
You are very right about Ranveer being torn between his role as protector and that of the justice seeker when it comes to Priyanka. And she too is torn between the shy woman who has always been shielded from the world by the protective presence of the men of the family and the one who can see that for the first time she needs to step up and fight this attack that is destroying not only her own peace of mind but that of her sensitive Om Bhaiya. Your comment gave structure to my thoughts.
Am awfully glad to hear that this set you off on an 'irrelevant tangent'. Hoping to see that reflect in your writing. 😉 as you well know I love you for giving so much space to the ACP in your ongoing story.

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Posted: 8 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: twerping


Well, I had Prinku study Eng Lit and that too in some private missionary run college... sort of the product of finishing schools in modern times! 😉
Glad to hear I could overturn your expectations... and wow! Yes, I suppose that breakdown scene was like guilt-ridden Lady Macbeth, but I kept it ambiguous as to whether Prinku was actually responsible for the accident.
ShivIka? Well, right now am not in that frame of mind, but am really enjoying your story on them! 😳

And thank you for this comment! Your feedback means so much and you know it! 🤗

You'r writing is ALWAYS ahead of my expectations. You amaze me always. @Bold, Yes, I know that, but think a gray heroine, how wonderful that would be to read.
Anyway I'm waiting for Pawar-Harprit story... 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
#63
I miss them on the show. :(
You are an amazing writer! Do you have more PriVeer stories? Can you scrap me their links or tell me the names? :D Would love to read them
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This was amazing and very romantic.
Priyanka was scared of ACP till the end. but guess that might change soon.
lovely.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#65

Originally posted by: ThatNarcissist

I miss them on the show. :(

You are an amazing writer! Do you have more PriVeer stories? Can you scrap me their links or tell me the names? :D Would love to read them


Thanks girl! I guess you've found the lot by now!😆
Me too missing them on the show..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: ArjunfanNAJAAN

This was amazing and very romantic.

Priyanka was scared of ACP till the end. but guess that might change soon.
lovely.


Thanks for reading, hon! Glad you liked it! And yeah, can't wait for the sparks to fly between these two in the show.😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome OS!! I love the way you write twerps... (hope I can call u taht) U rock!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: -Serene.Rose-

Awesome OS!! I love the way you write twerps... (hope I can call u taht) U rock!!


Hey Pri! 😃 Thanks for reading!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#69
I was searching for more PriVeer stories when suddenly I got landed up here. Amazing Twerping! 👏 . I loved the way you portrayed his character here. And I haven't thought of him in her college. This was a very realistic way to present him in her college.

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