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Posted: 9 years ago
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PART 5



Swara stood wordlessly staring Sanskar's back, her eyes moistening seeing him in so much pain. She could clearly see his turmoil, could feel his pain and that left her pure heart in tranquillity of telling him the truth.



Truth that will shatter the already broken man, truth that will tear him apart and leave him with guilt, guilt of living in illusion for so long, guilt of hurting people who were not at fault.


From his and Ragini's earlier conversion she came to know how much guilty he already was for making her suffer. How will he react when he will know in his conception he was going to ruin his family? He was going to punish those people who were genuinely regretting for their earlier behaviour towards him, her heart going out for him thinking about his condition when she will tell him the bitter truth.


Swara knew no words from her can make Sanskar believe her. No theory or proof of hers will make him understand her point. After all 5 years is very long time.



"Sanskar" Swara called out him softly trying once.



"LEAVE" Sanskar's thundering voice rang in her ears. This girl was hell bent on making him lose his mind. He closed his eyes in frustration trying to calm his bubbling anger without turning back..


He wants her out of his life at that very moment.

He opened his eyes when he felt someone keeping hand on his shoulder. Last thing he wanted is pity by anyone. Jerking that hand he turned around to give her piece of her mind when his words choked in his throat.


There stood Kavita's Mother in front of him.


His eyes widen in shock. He has not seen her after Kavita's death. He was too ashamed to face her thinking he failed to protect Kavita. Indirectly he was reason behind that incident.


How can he face the woman who showered him with motherly love, trusted him with future of her beloved daughter?


His head hung down, shoulder slumped at the very moment his eyes collided with hers. His caramel eyes looked down tearing up at the helpless situation he was in.


He fisted his palm. His chest tightened with the guilt and heart sinking with the very familiar sadness.


He stood there not knowing what else to do!


Swara left the place giving space to them knowing very well that they need time for sorting everything and she has no right of interfering in their personal matter.
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Sujayricky thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome 👏
Very well written
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sujoyricky

Awesome 👏
Very well written


Thank u sujoy...
glad u liked it..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Read all 4 parts even before the title was updated.. I loved the way you are portraying sanskars feeling.. And how he believes that he is doing wrong wid swara..

Waiting eagerly to read further..
Thanks for pm.. :)


Love
Jessica
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very well written 👏you have potrayed Sanskar's feeling very nicely 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: jess_27

Read all 4 parts even before the title was updated.. I loved the way you are portraying sanskars feeling.. And how he believes that he is doing wrong wid swara..

Waiting eagerly to read further..
Thanks for pm.. :)


Love
Jessica



Hey that's so sweet...
Thank you so much Jessica...
Glad you like sanskar's slow yet steady realisations..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Apudeep

Very well written👏you have potrayed Sanskar's feeling very nicely😳



Thank you so much dear...
Glad you liked the way story progressing...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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muktai
very nice dear.
ya the plot is similar to the original one,but with a little twist.
sanskar's feelings and swara's reaction are well described.
continue soon
love,
simi 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: simsen23

muktai
very nice dear.
ya the plot is similar to the original one,but with a little twist.
sanskar's feelings and swara's reaction are well described.
continue soon
love,
simi 😊





Hey simi...
Thank you so much dear...

Yup there is twist in original track..

Wilk try to complete story soon:-)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank u for the pm...
Wow enjoyed reading all four parts it was nice to see sans last realise his mistake and slowly see how what he was doing was effecting swara...

My favourite part was the cliff hanger at the end about swara knowing of kavita death...feel sorry for him.already as when he learns of this the guilt will eat him away...

Wonder how there journey will move forward from this...

Cannot wait to read more...

Razia

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