Duhshala OS: Emptiness

Awesome OS Ramya😃

Originally posted by: Mnp279

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Interesting take here Ramya
Dushala a character though secondary but was important being the only sister and her presence is barely there I feel


The Os is emotional and has portrayed the characters very well
Brother-sister bond is a special one and that bond has been shown very well
Dushala's thoughts are poignant and have certain grace to them
Her words not mere words rather facts of the terror she lived through
She is a strong woman- all female characters of Mahabharat are strong willed ladies with a good brain on their shoulders

You have grown so much as a writer from your first fic to this OS
Your writing is growing by heaps Ramya and am so so proud of it

Good job

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Ramya Great job. Arjun only had an interaction with Dussala when he went with the horse in Aswameth Parv. Dussala's son dies with fear on hearing Arjun's arrival. Dussala brings her grandson to Arjun and seeks his blessings. So I think you selected that brother of Dussala only who had an emotional connect with her. It was heart wrenching. Ramya you succeeded in depicting the emotions well. A small suggestion.If you are writing on Arjun please mention it in the title. Only he can drag me to read and express. Otherwise even if you asked me many times except Krishna Arjun TS you wrote,I am not able to go through the other works of you. Bear with me please. Anyway enjoyed your work. Good luck.

Beautiful OS Ramya!! Dussala is perhaps the most neglected woman in the epic. You are an incredible writer and this OS is a real gem. Dussala's strength, her acceptance of her fate, her serenity, all have been brought out well. 👏

Waiting for more gems. It has been my privilege to read this. ⭐️

Ramya!!! This is a diamond!!! I certainly am awestruck reading this. Dushala is one of my favourite characters in the epic. Or I can say I have something for all the neglected ones.😆 I rarely go with the famous ones as they are all exaggerated at points. Neglected characters have their own beauty and it grows more if we try to see why are they neglected. And the way you wrote about Dushala, is just perfect. And your language is rich, splendid and powerful. The dialogues of Dushala are the best!!! They give the impression of a lone but strong woman who is the light in darkness. Especially loved the descriptions of darkness and light... I somewhere read that you are still a school student or so, you were saying something related to chemistry and all, right? Even if it is not, it is a blessing to write matured words like this at such a young age. I could hardy have put two words together at this age.😆 You really have a long way to go. Don't ever lose your spirit of writing. Your style is unique to you!!! And it is outstanding. I initially thought that this would be an emotional writing. But I felt it is written as more strong and inspiring and made me feel good and smiling by the time I reached the end. Keep going.😊

Originally posted by: Nonie12345

Awesome OS Ramya😃

Thank you! 😳