CID Story: The Innocent Robbers

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Reshma

@Reshh16

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Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Good story Sri! Liked how you sort of centered it around Abhijeet... 😃

The thing is, as GD said, your usual style was missing to some extent. The fight parts were well written. The execution was good too. The duo moments were soothing 👏

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Nice story Shreya.😊

I just felt it finished too fast...😆 maybe it was too gripping 😛

The story was interesting but the last hostage crisis got over too fast. You could have added some more tension.

The story also seems inspired by Amitabh-Akshay movie Aankhein. 😈

Just a question...why did the gang want to hire an unknown accomplice? also why did they choose a guy who is not blind? Was Abhijeet present in the first 2 robberies as well?

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

okkk... I didn't read GD's post...even she found y his story inspired by Aankhein...😆

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beena1508

@-beena-

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Good story Shreya.Well written 👏
Nice concept without any deaths or murders 👏

Thank you so much Shreya.

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Gamayun

@Minionite

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Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: visrom
Nice story Shreya.😊

I just felt it finished too fast...😆 maybe it was too gripping 😛

The story was interesting but the last hostage crisis got over too fast. You could have added some more tension. I should have. 😆

The story also seems inspired by Amitabh-Akshay movie Aankhein. 😈 Actually after I finished writing it I felt the same. But I still let it go. 😆

Just a question...why did the gang want to hire an unknown accomplice? also why did they choose a guy who is not blind? Was Abhijeet present in the first 2 robberies as well? They needed 4 people. The guy who was arrested wasn't blind as well. In this case they kidnapped only 3 blind men and one of their men would stay to guard over the 3 blind guys. So when he was arrested they needed someone to fill his spot. Yes he was. But they needed evidence so he kept going.

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..sweetchilly..

@..sweetchilly..

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

That was a great story.
Abhijeet potrayed the role of a robber quite well without letting anyone even doubt on him.But, that's how he is, doing his job perfectly.
Their informers should be praised as well, they can bring any sort of informations wanted. They have such great potential.
Plus, what a plan they had, making the blind people robbers, even the cops hadn't thought about it.
It somewhat reminded me of the movie Aankhein.
Anyways, that was brilliantly written.
And, Loved it.