RaGa SS: My Cinderella (Updated Page 2)

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello friends,
I am one of RAGA lover from you...
When I thought about king and queen Cinderella story came on my mind...
I am just trying to write it down on RAGA...
Hope you will like it..
I am very lazy so don't write fast and take lots of time..
But I love theme yar so trying..
Plz forgive me for my mistakes, grammatical mistakes and all...

Thank you all...
mishti_forever



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Posted: 10 years ago
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Take 1...

Rajmata priyamvada , the queen of ameerkot was finding a bride for her only son and the king of ameerkot Rana Indravadhan sigh.
She spread the news in nearby states. All the kings were feeling proud and everyone wanted his princess to be ameerkot's next queen.

Princess were eagerly waiting to meet Ranaji. All has heard stories about Ranaji kindness, bravery, loyalty, prestige. Princess were dreaming about the palace, authority, power they will get being a queen of ameerkot.

The day was fixed , its fool moon day of savan. Invitations were given to all the kings and the reputed people.

The day arrived, Rana Indravardhan was dressed in his 3 piece suit with a black bow. He was one of the Royal king of his era. He walked through hallways with a straight face. Rana ji was not against this meet but being a king he has been a strict by look.

Guests has started arriving in a palace. Ranaji entered in a huge hall. He was center of attraction. Princess were staring him, drooling over him. Rajmata were introducing Ranaji to guests. Party was going silently.

Ranaji was chatting to one of guest when he heard some sound like payal. His mind got registered that sound. He continued his conversation. Again he heard same sound. This time he turned in a direction of sound. But in a crowd he couldn't point out. He again left it there. But when Third time Ranaji heard that sound he excused himself and followed that sound.

Ranaji followed the sound and ended up in a outside garden where a lady was walking towards exit door of palace...
As it was fool moon , moon was smiling brightly in a sky...

"Suniye.." Ranaji called.

A lady stopped instantly. She was wearing a dark pink colored saree with light embroidery, no heavy makeup, no heavy jewelry. She again started walking without looking back.

"Suniye..." Ranaji called again . this time little loudly.

The lady again stopped for a second but again started walking fast towards exit. She literally ran at the end and went out of palace.

Ranaji felt strange so he ran behind her but she was no where outside. He felt something different in her. What was that which has attracted King of amerkot to a lady?

Ranaji stood there for a moment.

"Ranaji , Rajmata aapko dhoond rahi hain" sevak came to tell Ranaji.

"Hmm. " Ranaji said.

Before going inside he again looked outside but no one was there.

Ranaji started coming back when his eyes fell on grass . something was shining on grass. He went near it and took it in hand.

"Payal?" Ranaji had question mark on his face.

Ranaji recognised the sound , it was same sound which he was following..

"Kaun hain woh?" Ranaji thought.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Congo 4 the story wow raga cinderella version lovely start plz cont soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice start waiting for next part
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow.
Awesome and lovely..
Rana ji ko woh payal mil gayi hai..
That gal must be Gayatri.
Continue sooonish.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Drashtilove

Congo 4 the story wow raga cinderella version lovely start plz cont soon


Thank you.. Glad you liked it...
Will continue soon...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: RockingPixies

nice start waiting for next part


Thank you... Feeling nice you liked it..
Yep continuing soon...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: mariya354

Nice start
continue soon


Hi Mariya glad u liked start...
Thanks dear..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ...anika...

Wow.
Awesome and lovely..
Rana ji ko woh payal mil gayi hai..
That gal must be Gayatri.
Continue sooonish.


Hi anika... Happy u liked concept...
Yes Ranaji got payal...
Continuing soon..
Thanks dear
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Really nice start
Loved the first take

Waiting for next

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