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Chitra RaviKiran

@chitloner

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Aur likho aur likho. U have a beautiful flair for that

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Purnima

@-purnima-

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Aww dat was so b'ful & sweet ...you shud come up with such OS more often ...it gonna b treat for us to read 😃

Liked the so in control Kabir...its quite a rarity to find boys with so much patience & understanding 😳 ...jealous miss kashyap was cute 😃 😊

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praneeta

@pd786

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

oh my god i am speechless

i was like HAWT os but then i was like no perfectly good kabir os

kabir is such a sweetheart here

malvika *I feel bad for the lady trying all her charm on kabir and receiving nothing*

awesome os

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yoginisahakari

@yoginisahakari

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

👏
Love and prayer
Yogini

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Jayasree

@jayasree.rao

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

It is beautifully written. Loved Ananya's jealousy and Kabir's maturity. You are a great writer and should regularly write.

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supriya.ipkknd

@supriya.ipkknd

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

OMG! I didn't have the slightest inclination that you were a writer!! :O

Writer hain bhi toh masha allah kaisi! 👏

Loved it. I can't really see Kabir and Ananya as a couple right now so I tend to skip the OSs which have them as a couple. But I couldn't skip this and thank god I didn't! This was amazing. You stayed true to their characters. Even when they are a couple they are behaving the exact same way they would behave in their normal lives. No cheesiness. Simple meaningful dialogues.

You are a great writer. Please write more and PM me the next time. :)

I would like to give a small suggestion. I think it will be better if you don't give references to the episode in brackets that you did here. They act as distractions, at least for me. I like to be in some other world when I read an OS so I kind of get distracted. Instead of that you can just give a lucid description of her attire and let your imagination flow. It's just a suggestion. Please don't take it your heart. 😭

Coming back to your OS, I needed few moments to catch my breath. It was hottt☺️ And what you stated about Kabir is highly possible. I think he would want to go slow with her. OMG M gonna die if they do scenes like that in the show.

Lastly, keep writing. :*

*Edited typoes*

Edited by supriya.ipkknd - 10 years ago