An Ishra SS: Sirf Tumhare Liye - Final Part page 13 - Page 12

Originally posted by: twerping

You made me weep. I read the whole story at a go and this was one of the most beautiful and profound pieces I have read on this forum!

Thank you so much. I am floored to know that you liked my work so much 😳.

Originally posted by: EkPaheli

res 😳

Bhanu so sorry for the delay in editing

reply to the reply 😆 - yep I agree with the way he handled things Subu lost respect or perhaps even a chance at redemption you know, esp since he couldnt face her and I agree their marriage had it happened would have ended disastrously cos once a coward, always a coward.

And I agree the floor mopping scene with the FBs as well as the scene where she sees Subu walk in with his wife or when Amma asks her to tell about Raman in the same epi and she sees him looking at her with the mixture of curiosity and pity showed there are a lot of unresolved/pent up feelings there not dead just buried deep.

Am short on time these days LOL so cant rant more but thanks for not being bored with my previous rant and 😆 that's cute that your hubby teases you so and word on Frost! the man is a wiz!

coming to the OS: OMG this was so beautiful I love the way you ended this the way this whole chapter went with Ishita narrating/pouring her heart out to Raman and in the end the fact he offered her no platitude, gave her no condolences or sympathy just held her tight was simply beautiful.

Words are meaningless sometimes you know, you can say stuff and yet... yet it cant mean anything at times which a simple gesture like a smile or a hug can do and Raman opted just for that.

Also the end was so lovely with the way you wrote how Raman is becoming that friend Ishita missed, longed for.

I wish this hadn't ended here, but understand sometimes you see a story only up to a point and then you have to let it go, I do hope though you get inspiration again sans a bad/long track 😆and are back soon with a new OS/SS. 😊

Aani, always a pleasure to hear from you. I was sure about the end from the beginning. As you said, sometimes, action speak louder than words, and Ishita would have gotten the sympathetic words in abundance over the years, what she really needed was someone who understood what it meant, and helped her heal the pain.

Please take a bow! I know I am late in reading this - but such excellent characterisation of ishita and I was dying to read some good meaningful Hindi dialogues - fantastic writing!

killer story Bhanu👏
am bowled by your simple but each sentence being meaningful.

3rd part: I want to see this shade of raman, his relation with mihir in show. they had just given glimpse of that in accident track in mihir ishu convo that bhai is back like before he was vulnerable after separation. I have always adored this relation . I could see new but very effective and real side of raman and understanding of mihir for raman's pain.

And yes, this is how I too want raman to treat ishu like this, her final break down and raman just sitting beside her. no words but conveys a lot through silence.

Want to see ishu 's exploration by subbu't presence but I want to see even how raman was vulnerable. not just by narrating story. no doubt they have shown enough of angry and arrogant raman after 6 years and before crying and romantic as well. but yet middle face of these 2 periods is missing some where, I feel. same goes for ishita. how both tried to come over their past, is still missing in this story. wish they show it.

I liked his determination to be with her how long it takes time to make her free from burden of past and get relief .

When they showed in show about her talk about license s importance, when he was consoling her, that was because he could not see her crying he wanted to see her happy . here you showed in very beautiful way he put himself to her shoes and he had tears for her pain that is **best part for me** along with raman s vulnerable side glimpse

simply loved it. how I wish we want this talk from both sides and whole 2 episodes at least dedicated to just this TALK .

Originally posted by: prachi_vrushan

such a beautiful story

Thank you Prachi 😊

Originally posted by: Newleaves

nice...

Thanks Dear 😊

Originally posted by: columbia

Please take a bow! I know I am late in reading this - but such excellent characterisation of ishita and I was dying to read some good meaningful Hindi dialogues - fantastic writing!

Brilliantly done!! 👏

Thank you Dear 😊. I purposefully wrote it in Hindi as I somehow felt that the series is in Hindi and if this kind of conversation ever happened, I will like it happen it this way.

Glad to know you liked it.

Originally posted by: Colt.Pixy

killer story Bhanu👏
am bowled by your simple but each sentence being meaningful.

3rd part: I want to see this shade of raman, his relation with mihir in show. they had just given glimpse of that in accident track in mihir ishu convo that bhai is back like before he was vulnerable after separation. I have always adored this relation . I could see new but very effective and real side of raman and understanding of mihir for raman's pain.

And yes, this is how I too want raman to treat ishu like this, her final break down and raman just sitting beside her. no words but conveys a lot through silence.

Want to see ishu 's exploration by subbu't presence but I want to see even how raman was vulnerable. not just by narrating story. no doubt they have shown enough of angry and arrogant raman after 6 years and before crying and romantic as well. but yet middle face of these 2 periods is missing some where, I feel. same goes for ishita. how both tried to come over their past, is still missing in this story. wish they show it.

I liked his determination to be with her how long it takes time to make her free from burden of past and get relief .

When they showed in show about her talk about license s importance, when he was consoling her, that was because he could not see her crying he wanted to see her happy . here you showed in very beautiful way he put himself to her shoes and he had tears for her pain that is **best part for me** along with raman s vulnerable side glimpse

simply loved it. how I wish we want this talk from both sides and whole 2 episodes at least dedicated to just this TALK .

Helloz Zeno ... 🤗

Itne dino ke baad where did u find this? Of course when I wrote this I did not know about Mihir being the brother of Shagun so the reference. Yet, I think definitely Mihir and Raman can have this kind of relationship inspite of him being related to Shagun.

Ishita's emotions have hardly been touched in this story. Not only Subbu, her reaction of an almost rape, her constant rejection and insult from the society ... so much has never been touched.

I am all for cliche silent conversations ... if you notice, in all my stories, one of the two or both remain silent ... I simply love the aankho se aankho ki zubaan 😳

I do not think this will ever happen in the show because the writer has said it that Subbu aint coming back to the show ... but then what are we for .. we can always make our imaginations through our FF/SS/OS.

Thank you for the brilliant review girl. Felt nice to see a post on my first ever work after so long 😳

Superbly written 👏