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Chapter Fourteen

***THIS CHAPTER IS RATED MATURE FOR VERY GRAPHIC SEXUAL MATERIAL SO READ AT YOUR OWN RISK.***

"You left me Sanyukta," Randhir yelled angrily while he squeezed her arms. She winced in pain but she accepted it because it still paled in comparison to the pain she caused him. "You left me. I begged, I pleaded, I was ready to do anything for you. But you left me."

He moved his face closer to hers, pressing her body further against the wall with his. She didn't say a word. She wouldn't. Sanyukta knew that Randhir was finally going to let his feelings out and she didn't want to stand in the way of that. He could do whatever he wanted with her, because she deserved it - she deserved every bit of pain he wanted to cause her, she deserved all the hateful words he wanted to say.

"I was ready to do anything Sanyukta," he said, his voice cracking. "I spent these last four years trying to forget you... trying to hate you. I do hate you Sanyukta."

He pinned her arms back roughly against the wall, pressing the palms of his hands against hers. She started to breathe heavily, unable to even think straight with Randhir this close to her - but she understood him. She knew he was very justified in trying to hate her. He had wanted to move on. She wouldn't blame him.

"I hate you," he muttered again, this time with confusion. "I - I hate you."

She looked down at his lips which were so close to hers, wanting more than anything to lean forward and kiss them again.

"I hate you so much," he whispered weakly, his lips lightly brushing over hers.

She felt her stomach perform somersaults.

"Show me how much you hate me Randhir. Take it all out on me. I'm yours," she managed to say against his lips.

Randhir pulled back again and grabbed her shoulders tightly. "What do you mean you're mine huh? You're not mine. You were never mine... if you were mine you wouldn't have left me!"

Sanyukta felt her heart break at his words. She felt her eyes sting with tears as she looked at the pain in his own wet ones.

"Randhir," she whispered, holding his hand comfortingly. She felt him relax with her touch before tensing up again. "I promise I won't ever leave you again. I promise Randhir. I was wrong. I admit I was wrong. But please don't hurt yourself more."

"Sanyukta you have no idea!" Randhir yelled, pulling her hand away from his and staring at the wall across the room. "I hated you... and now that you're back here, I can't even avoid you. It kills me that all these years I tried to hate you went to waste with one glance at you. You don't even understand how much I loved you - how much I love you Sanyukta."

She felt a tear escape from her eye - she had desperately wanted to hear those three words from his mouth one more time.

"I love you too Randhir," she whispered, wrapping her hand around his arm and resting her head on his shoulder. "Let's forget the past and be happy Randhir."

"No Sanyukta," Randhir denied, trying to shake her off him. "I can't forget the past. I did a lot to try and move on from you."

Sanyukta let go of his arm, feeling her heart ache at his confession.

"Did a lot meaning? You... slept with others? You got close to other girls?" she whispered, feeling more tears well up in her eyes.

She couldn't judge him for what he did because she was the one responsible for his heartache in the first place. Now she knew how Randhir must have felt to know that she had left him for another guy... to know that she had replaced him with someone else.

"It - it's okay Randhir," she said without letting him respond, wiping away her tears and cupping his cheek with her hand. "I don't mind. It was the past. We can forget about it and make a new future together."

She wrapped her arms around his neck and kissed his cheek, before pulling back and looking into his eyes. Then she leaned forward to place a kiss on his lips, but he covered her mouth with his hand.

"You haven't lost your bad habit of assuming have you Sanyukta?" he asked, this time lightly.

She looked into his eyes with hope - did that mean that she was wrong?

"You... you weren't with anyone?" she asked, feeling her heart ache again - this time with grief over Randhir's loneliness and also with the hope that she was always the only one in his life, just like he was the only one in hers.

Randhir smiled softly at her. "If I was, you would accept it?" he asked, with a raised eyebrow.

Sanyukta frowned. "What are you trying to say Randhir?"

Randhir chuckled, tucking a strand of hair behind her ear causing goosebumps to rise all over her body. "I wasn't with anyone else. I was too busy focusing on hating you to think about being with anyone else... you're so cute when you're jealous."

Sanyukta smiled at him, her heart soaring - she was always the only girl in Randhir's life.

"I wasn't with anyone else either Randhir," she whispered, "You were the only one in my life - and Sameer was never a part of it."

Randhir looked into her eyes, and Sanyukta just knew that he genuinely meant what he said next.

"I love you Sanyukta," he whispered, his lips brushing over her ear, causing her to tremble.

She didn't know what it was about him, but everything he did made her want him. She knew that she was this attracted to him back in FITE, but re-discovering this passion for him made her want to do things with him that she didn't ever imagine herself doing.

"I love you too Randhir," she gasped, her heart beating hard against her chest.

She slowly moved her hand up the back of his neck and into his hair.

"I'm sorry for hurting you," he whispered.

"You didn't hurt me enough," she told him lightly.

"Shut up Sanyukta," he whispered, his lips a millimetre away from hers.

"Make me," she teased, closing her eyes.

He pressed his lips against hers with such force that she nearly fell over, but his arm, which was around her waist, made sure to hold her upright. She grabbed his shirt at his biceps and held on tightly as her mouth opened, allowing him to slip his tongue in and taste as much of her mouth as he could.

She dipped her own tongue into his warm mouth, taking in as much of him as she was able. She wanted to get as close as she possibly could. It was like his body belonged to her, she wanted to accept every inch of it, to savour as much of him as she could, to explore everything about him.

She could feel his desire against her navel and it turned her on more than anything. Pulling back to take a breath, she looked into his eyes, silently begging him to refrain from stopping himself this time.

"I want to be yours," she whispered, her face flushed. "Please make me yours."

Without saying a word, he picked her up from the ground, one arm under her legs, the other under her back and walked with her to the bed where he gently laid her down.

Her arms were still around his neck as he leaned down to kiss her cheek.

"Randhir," she sighed happily, moving her hands under his body to try and remove his shirt.

He pushed himself off her slightly so she was able to effectively remove his shirt before he closed the gap between their bodies once again, this time with his lips nibbling on the bottom of her earlobe gently causing her breath to hitch with her fingernails digging into his back.

He trailed kisses across her jawline and down her neck, her throat, across her collarbone, before he kissed the soft skin of her cleavage. Sanyukta moaned. She didn't know how much of this she could tolerate. She wrapped her legs around his waist, feeling his hardness against her throbbing desire... or was it him throbbing? She wasn't even sure. All she knew was that she needed him now.

"Randhir, please," she whispered, closing her eyes, trying to keep a control on her desire, but there was just something about the thought of being with Randhir that was enough to send her into a frenzy.

Randhir pulled her dress up over her stomach, revealing her black lace panties. His fingers immediately made its way over them, where she was certain he could feel the wetness. She gripped the bedsheets tightly as he kissed her thighs, inching his way up to her panties, teasing her with his mouth. Just as she thought he was about to kiss her panties, he moved his lips straight to her navel, kissing around her panties, frustrating her.

"Randhir, please," she begged, unable to control herself. "Please don't do this."

Randhir moved his body off hers immediately, causing Sanyukta to frown. "What are you doing?" she nearly yelled.

"You said don't do it," Randhir replied, raising an eyebrow at her.

"Randhir you know what I meant!" she shrieked, just wanting him on top of her again.

"No I don't," he teased, winking at her. "What do you want Sanyukta?"

Her mouth dropped open. Where did he learn to get this much self control, seriously? She was going to have to do something about this. She rolled over on top of him and attacked his mouth with hers, forcing her tongue into his mouth, catching him off guard. She knew that he liked it though because his hands instinctively wrapped around her bare waist and tried to pull the rest of her dress over her head. She sat on top of him and pulled it off over her head, revealing her naked torso. She saw Randhir nearly gasp when he noticed that she wasn't wearing a bra.

He pushed her onto the bed and rolled over her, kissing every inch of her breasts, his fingers brushing over her hardened nipples. He sucked the skin around them before kissing his way down to her panties again. He kissed her over her panties and slowly removed them, as she slid his pants down his waist. He licked, kissed and sucked her throbbing desire until she was on the verge of letting go, but he made sure to tease her more by stopping what he was doing.

"Randhir please continue," she moaned, breathing heavily, unable to take this kind of torture.

He removed his pants and boxers and kissed her lips softly before pulling back and looking into her eyes.

"You won't regret this?" he asked her with difficulty. "We don't have to do this."

She smiled at him, touched by his concern, feeling like the luckiest woman in the world.

"I promise I won't regret this," she whispered, running her hands up his bare back, trying to pull him closer to her.

He let his mouth nip the soft skin of her breasts once again and allowed his tongue to circle her nipple as she moaned in pleasure.

"Please Randhir," she whispered, "Please enter me."

"Tell me if it hurts," he told her, his mouth sucking on her neck hard enough to form a lovebite.

"Randhir just enter!" she nearly yelled. She was glad to have found such a loving partner, but at the same time his delay was frustrating her.

As soon as she felt him enter slowly, she squirmed with pain, her nails digging deep into his skin, her back arching.

Randhir looked at her with concern after he let his length enter her completely. She watched him force himself to stay still over her as she took time to adjust to his size.

"Are you okay?" he asked her, his fingers caressing her face.

"Just come close to me and continue," she gasped, trying to hold on to him tightly.

It was uncomfortable and painful, but at the same time it made her feel good - it made her feel as close to Randhir like she always wanted to be.

He kissed her lips softly before murmuring against them, "Let me know when you want me to stop or slow down."

He started to thrust very slowly, looking into her eyes the whole time, using his fingers to rub her gently over her desire at the same time to ensure that she got the same pleasure he was getting. Soon enough she started to moan with pleasure again. His thrusts got faster and harder, and she tried to match his thrusts with her hips.

She grabbed his free hand and kissed the top of his finger before sucking on it, needing something to do with her mouth. It wasn't too long before she reached her climax and Randhir pulled out right before he reached his to protect them.

He fell beside her on the bed and pulled her into his arms before covering both of them with the blanket and kissing her on the forehead.

Both of them were glowing with their hair matted to their faces. Sanyukta felt completely in bliss in his arms, still trying to take in what just happened between them, and more than that, the feeling that was associated with it.

"I love you Randhir," she whispered, wrapping her arm around him and resting her head comfortably against his chest.

He stroked her hair gently, but didn't respond.

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Chapter Fourteen

***THIS CHAPTER IS RATED MATURE FOR VERY GRAPHIC SEXUAL MATERIAL SO READ AT YOUR OWN RISK.***
Reads this and starts to blush... god. like. oh my gosh.
"You left me Sanyukta," Randhir yelled angrily while he squeezed her arms. She winced in pain but she accepted it because it still paled in comparison to the pain she caused him. "You left me. I begged, I pleaded, I was ready to do anything for you. But you left me."
this is the confrontation that I was talking about... like yaar, he just needs to let it all out. All of it.
He moved his face closer to hers, pressing her body further against the wall with his. She didn't say a word. She wouldn't. Sanyukta knew that Randhir was finally going to let his feelings out and she didn't want to stand in the way of that. He could do whatever he wanted with her, because she deserved it - she deserved every bit of pain he wanted to cause her, she deserved all the hateful words he wanted to say.
Okay.. this is what I call tuning Saffi... hehe! I thought of it and you incorporated that in the writing! yeah... we're sisters!👏🤗
"I was ready to do anything Sanyukta," he said, his voice cracking. "I spent these last four years trying to forget you... trying to hate you. I do hate you Sanyukta."
I know... anything. man. this makes me go back to feeling like a hopeless romantic. like seriously. awwwh awhh awh!😳
He pinned her arms back roughly against the wall, pressing the palms of his hands against hers. She started to breathe heavily, unable to even think straight with Randhir this close to her - but she understood him. She knew he was very justified in trying to hate her. He had wanted to move on. Shewouldn't blame him.
😉 okay... when Randhir is close to anyone... nobody can think straight... 😆😉😳😃 *smirks*
"I hate you," he muttered again, this time with confusion. "I - I hate you."

She looked down at his lips which were so close to hers, wanting more than anything to lean forward and kiss them again.

"I hate you so much," he whispered weakly, his lips lightly brushing over hers.
okay... this is ... making me blush even more. *has this awkward smile plastered on her face*
She felt her stomach perform somersaults.

"Show me how much you hate me Randhir. Take it all out on me. I'm yours," she managed to say against his lips.

Randhir pulled back again and grabbed her shoulders tightly. "What do you mean you're mine huh? You're not mine. You were never mine... if you were mine you wouldn't have left me!"
*remembers the Randhir scene where he breaks down and Sanyu says that she's there for him. And then he pulls back saying that she will leave too* he's so true though. but yaar, Randhir... she made a grave mistake.
Sanyukta felt her heart break at his words. She felt her eyes sting with tears as she looked at the pain in his own wet ones.

"Randhir," she whispered, holding his hand comfortingly. She felt him relax with her touch before tensing up again. "I promise I won't ever leave you again. I promise Randhir. I was wrong. I admit I was wrong. But please don't hurt yourself more."

"Sanyukta you have no idea!" Randhir yelled, pulling her hand away from his and staring at the wall across the room. "I hated you... and now that you're back here, I can't even avoid you. It kills me that all these years I tried to hate you went to waste with one glance at you. You don't even understand how much I loved you - how much I love you Sanyukta."
oh. my. gosh. *face is like a tomato.*
She felt a tear escape from her eye - she had desperately wanted to hear those three words from his mouth one more time.
Oh. My. Gosh. This is just brilliant. Randhir loves her so much that just one glance was enough to bring all his love back for her. I just. I just can't even. like I love this part... wayyy too much.
"I love you too Randhir," she whispered, wrapping her hand around his arm and resting her head on his shoulder. "Let's forget the past and be happy Randhir."

"No Sanyukta," Randhir denied, trying to shake her off him. "I can't forget the past. I did a lot to try and move on from you."
Areee. Randhir. Please. You're putting yourself through a lot of pain.
Sanyukta let go of his arm, feeling her heart ache at his confession.

"Did a lot meaning? You... slept with others? You got close to other girls?" she whispered, feeling more tears well up in her eyes.
Gosh. Sanyu... really he can never do that. Like never. I can't believe you thought that. no good.
She couldn't judge him for what he did because she was the one responsible for his heartache in the first place. Now she knew how Randhir must have felt to know that she had left him for another guy... to know that she had replaced him with someone else.

"It - it's okay Randhir," she said without letting him respond, wiping away her tears and cupping his cheek with her hand. "I don't mind. It was the past. We can forget about it and make a new future together."
Woah. Saffi. I swear... Randhir can't do that. And if you made him do that... I will come to Ontario and haunt you! just kidding. I can't haunt you... but I will be katti. Randhir can't be anyone else's even if he tried. (wait. he can be with me... but that's prolly not gonna happen. So let's just stick with Sandhir)
She wrapped her arms around his neck and kissed his cheek, before pulling back and looking into his eyes. Then she leaned forward to place a kiss on his lips, but he covered her mouth with his hand.
what! RANDHIR KISS HER BACK! LIKE NOW.
"You haven't lost your bad habit of assuming have you Sanyukta?" he asked, this time lightly.

She looked into his eyes with hope - did that mean that she was wrong?

"You... you weren't with anyone?" she asked, feeling her heart ache again - this time with grief over Randhir's loneliness and also with the hope that she was always the only one in his life, just like he was the only one in hers.
AWH! haahah! I knew it. Saffi, You can never make Randhir like that. And yes, she finally understands that his loneliness is what made him want to hate her... like yaar, why would you ever leave him. He's just amazing. I love him already... hehe. 😳😃😆
Randhir smiled softly at her. "If I was, you would accept it?" he asked, with a raised eyebrow.
HE SMILED! awh! I think he's gonna give in.
Sanyukta frowned. "What are you trying to say Randhir?"

Randhir chuckled, tucking a strand of hair behind her ear causing goosebumps to rise all over her body. "I wasn't with anyone else. I was too busy focusing on hating you to think about being with anyone else... you're so cute when you're jealous."
HE GAVE IN! Awh, like I said... his loneliness made him hate her... but she was always in his heart. AWHHH! *feels like that smile that always gets fixed on face coming...*
Sanyukta smiled at him, her heart soaring - she was always the only girl in Randhir's life.

"I wasn't with anyone else either Randhir," she whispered, "You were the only one in my life - and Sameer was never a part of it."
YESSS!😆😃
Randhir looked into her eyes, and Sanyukta just knew that he genuinely meant what he said next.

"I love you Sanyukta," he whispered, his lips brushing over her ear, causing her to tremble.
AWWW😳😳😳👏👏👏👏!
She didn't know what it was about him, but everything he did made her want him. She knew that she was this attracted to him back in FITE, but re-discovering this passion for him made her want to do things with him that she didn't ever imagine herself doing.
*reads that last line and her face is trying to hide so much mixed feelings...* I can't stop blushing now.
"I love you too Randhir," she gasped, her heart beating hard against her chest.

She slowly moved her hand up the back of his neck and into his hair.
Awww, the re-confession!
"I'm sorry for hurting you," he whispered.

"You didn't hurt me enough," she told him lightly.
This. is. kinda. true.
"Shut up Sanyukta," he whispered, his lips a millimetre away from hers.

"Make me," she teased, closing her eyes.
*blush.*
He pressed his lips against hers with such force that she nearly fell over, but his arm, which was around her waist, made sure to hold her upright. She grabbed his shirt at his biceps and held on tightly as her mouth opened, allowing him to slip his tongue in and taste as much of her mouth as he could.
oh. god.
She dipped her own tongue into his warm mouth, taking in as much of him as she was able. She wanted to get as close as she possibly could. It was like his body belonged to her, she wanted to accept every inch of it, to savour as much of him as she could, to explore everything about him.
oh. my. god.
She could feel his desire against her navel and it turned her on more than anything. Pulling back to take a breath, she looked into his eyes, silently begging him to refrain from stopping himself this time.
okay... i think i am gonna die. with. all. this. hotness.
"I want to be yours," she whispered, her face flushed. "Please make me yours."
HOLY CRAP... I used this line on my other mature chapter... yes. I have already wrote part of it... and I have used this. hahaha! I think great minds think alike. shhh, can't tell nobody...😆
Without saying a word, he picked her up from the ground, one arm under her legs, the other under her back and walked with her to the bed where he gently laid her down.

Her arms were still around his neck as he leaned down to kiss her cheek.

"Randhir," she sighed happily, moving her hands under his body to try and remove his shirt.

He pushed himself off her slightly so she was able to effectively remove his shirt before he closed the gap between their bodies once again, this time with his lips nibbling on the bottom of her earlobe gently causing her breath to hitch with her fingernails digging into his back.
...☺️☺️☺️... I can't. even. comment. on. this. woah. the earlobe thing. pretty hot.
He trailed kisses across her jawline and down her neck, her throat, across her collarbone, before he kissed the soft skin of her cleavage. Sanyukta moaned. She didn't know how much of this she could tolerate. She wrapped her legs around his waist, feeling his hardness against her throbbing desire... or was it him throbbing? She wasn't even sure. All she knew was that she needed him now.
I am redder than a tomato. Oh. gosh.☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️
"Randhir, please," she whispered, closing her eyes, trying to keep a control on her desire, but there was just something about the thought of being with Randhir that was enough to send her into a frenzy.

Randhir pulled her dress up over her stomach, revealing her black lace panties. His fingers immediately made its way over them, where she was certain he could feel the wetness. She gripped the bedsheets tightly as he kissed her thighs, inching his way up to her panties, teasing her with his mouth. Just as she thought he was about to kiss her panties, he moved his lips straight to her navel, kissing around her panties, frustrating her.

"Randhir, please," she begged, unable to control herself. "Please don't do this."
HAHAHAHAAHAH! 😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳
Randhir moved his body off hers immediately, causing Sanyukta to frown. "What are you doing?" she nearly yelled.

"You said don't do it," Randhir replied, raising an eyebrow at her.
HAHAHAHAAHAHAH! Seriously... anyone would have gotten super frustrated at this point. 🤣
"Randhir you know what I meant!" she shrieked, just wanting him on top of her again.

"No I don't," he teased, winking at her. "What do you want Sanyukta?"
haahahah! THIS IS TOTALLY RANDHIR. I CAN'T EVEN. HAHAHAHA!😆😆😆😆🤣🤣
Her mouth dropped open. Where did he learn to get this much self control,seriously? She was going to have to do something about this. She rolled over on top of him and attacked his mouth with hers, forcing her tongue into his mouth, catching him off guard. She knew that he liked it though because his hands instinctively wrapped around her bare waist and tried to pull the rest of her dress over her head. She sat on top of him and pulled it off over her head, revealing her naked torso. She saw Randhir nearly gasp when he noticed that she wasn't wearing a bra.
Woah now... Hahaha! She has always been amazed by his self control! haahah! okay. now I am super duper red.
He pushed her onto the bed and rolled over her, kissing every inch of her breasts, his fingers brushing over her hardened nipples. He sucked the skin around them before kissing his way down to her panties again. He kissed her over her panties and slowly removed them, as she slid his pants down his waist. He licked, kissed and sucked her throbbing desire until she was on the verge of letting go, but he made sure to tease her more by stopping what he was doing.

"Randhir please continue," she moaned, breathing heavily, unable to take this kind of torture.

He removed his pants and boxers and kissed her lips softly before pulling back and looking into her eyes.

"You won't regret this?" he asked her with difficulty. "We don't have to do this."
OKAY! I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING THIS ABOUT HIM!👏👏👏👏 ... OH MY GOSH. WHY WOULD SHE LEAVE HIM. HE CARES SO FREAKING MUCH ABOUT HER! I WANT A GUY LIKE HIM... NOW. HE'S SO PERFECT. okay... I am so happy right now. He's just amazing. I don't understand what he's made of. That line about him making sure that she wouldn't regret and that they didn't have to do that. Saffi. You. Are. Just. Brilliant.👏👏👏👏
I just can't explain how much that means to any girl.

She smiled at him, touched by his concern, feeling like the luckiest woman in the world.
SHE IS THE LUCKIEST WOMAN. She has Randhir.
"I promise I won't regret this," she whispered, running her hands up his bare back, trying to pull her closer to him.

He let his mouth nip the soft skin of her breasts once again and allowed his tongue to circle her nipple as she moaned in pleasure.

"Please Randhir," she whispered, "Please enter me."

"Tell me if it hurts," he told her, his mouth sucking on her neck hard enough to form a lovebite.

"Randhir just enter!" she nearly yelled. She was glad to have found such a loving partner, but at the same time his delay was frustrating her.

As soon as she felt him enter slowly, she squirmed with pain, her nails digging deep into his skin, her back arching.

Randhir looked at her with concern after he let his length enter her completely. She watched him force himself to stay still over her as she took time to adjust to his size.

"Are you okay?" he asked her, his fingers caressing her face.

"Just come close to me and continue," she gasped, trying to hold on to him tightly.

It was uncomfortable and painful, but at the same time it made her feel good - it made her feel as close to Randhir like she always wanted to be.
okay... I can't reply now. It's making me blush. A LOT. You wrote this... really well. I can't. 😳
He kissed her lips softly before murmuring against them, "Let me know when you want me to stop or slow down."

He started to thrust very slowly, looking into her eyes the whole time, using his fingers to rub her gently over her desire at the same time to ensure that she got the same pleasure he was getting. Soon enough she started to moan with pleasure again and his thrusts got faster and harder causing her to try and thrust her hips to match his thrusts.

She grabbed his free hand and kissed the top of his finger before sucking on it, needing something to do with her mouth. It wasn't too long before she reached her climax and Randhir pulled out right before he reached his to protect them.

He fell beside her on the bed and pulled her into his arms before covering both of them with the blanket and kissing her on the forehead.

Both of them were glowing with their hair matted to their faces with sweat. Sanyukta felt completely in bliss in his arms, still trying to take in what just happened between them, and more than that, the feeling that was associated with it.

"I love you Randhir," she whispered, wrapping her arm around him and resting her head comfortably against his chest.

He stroked her hair gently, but didn't respond.
Okay. That was super hot. Okay... I got to say it... The amount of sexiness in this chapter was just too much. like god. I can't even match up to that writing... but when you read mine, I think you're gonna laugh your butt off because it's sort of funny before it gets intense...

Alright. One thing that alarmed me... he didn't respond. This is where what you said comes in. God. Saffi... you're going to kill me. Randhir should have said that he loves her... at the end. But he stroked her hair, which means that 'yes i care for you but..' ... and you'll have to reveal the other side the next chapter. Prolly like "I still can't trust you... or something" ... gosh.
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Hahahh! I think this was just brilliant. Esp the part where Randhir is like you wouldn't regret this will you. HOLY CRAP. I THINK I HAD AN EPIC EPIPHANY. HE IS SO FORESHADOWING WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT... grrr. I hate you. naw. I love ya. I already have a feeling that I know where this is gonna go. But I will leave it to you to make it amazing! hahahaha! Anyways... You'll kill me. THIS WAS AMAZING... yeeahh...I love ya. UPDATE SOON! PLEASE! You're going to make me go crazy with suspense.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: kri1

res... OKAY I AM FIRST! WHOOP! WHOOP! now let's get to reading!



I am waiting for your reaction... 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
Res! And yes, I'm stalking you...😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: whinyteen96

Res! And yes, I'm stalking you...😃



Waiting. 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
OMG OMG this was tooo hot.
this update has set my laptop on fire.this update was tooo hot to handle.
I must say you are a best erotic writer.
What I really loved about this update is that sandhir has forgetten their past and going to start a new future.
brilliant update
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Thanks =)
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: anjipankaj

OMG OMG this was tooo hot.
this update has set my laptop on fire.this update was tooo hot to handle.
I must say you are a best erotic writer.
What I really loved about this update is that sandhir has forgetten their past and going to start a new future.
brilliant update



Haha erotic writer? I think I have a long way to go for that title but thanks! 😳 I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter! 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
"Res"... Let me just turn off the heater while I go read this update🤣

UNRES'ed!

The way you express those convoluted and unsaid emotions at the start was just brilliant! It's was amazing! Her want and his sadness and then he giving in! It was just beautiful!!!

I. can't. even. deal. with. my. feels.

And then came the *ahem-ahem*... I must say Saffi, you are one heck of a writer! I mean WOOOW! You have literally ticked off every genre of writing in my mind.. Angst checked. Romance checked. Erotic checked. Feel good checked.

Have you written comedy before? If so please PM me the link! I would love to reaaad! You are such a talented writer!

While reading the *ahem-ahem*, I turned off the heater and took off my sweater and it's like 8 degrees here... Even my laptop was heating up!

Randhir was such a caring little partner! And that "What do you want Sanyukta?" line was just an awesome stroke☺️! BUT (there is always a but isn't there?😆), he didn't respond! That means, "I adore/care for you... but there is something still worrying me at the back of my mind"??

Update real soon Saffi!
Love,
Pari

PS: Me has liked the first post😃
Edited by gujjupari - 11 years ago

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