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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: ...Harmony...

i should be studying for my upcoming tests, exams etc etc .. but here i am unable to stop reading the latest chapter...😆

Lol...Nits..U need to study😆😆

first of all... loved the song... one of the most beautiful songs i have heard...

The words are beautiful❤️

and the update... that was totally splendid... loved each and every word...
loved ...how beautifully you described everyone's feelings and emotions...

Thank u 😳😳😳

and thank you for such a romantic ZaYa scene... that was really breathtakingly beautiful ..
was LOLing when Suriyaa caught both of them... 😆

😆 Mazaa aya na😆😆😆

and the scream... i m assuming it must be when Barkat pushed Aaliya down.. she must have started her new drama...

Keep reading😉

will be waiting for next update...
thanks for the pm...
keep rocking...



I dont know wheteher i shud be happy or sad that i r reading this in place of ur books😳

Never mind😆🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: vinu127

res..

unressing in 10-15 min...i need that to stabilise myself n comment!

Do u need a spash of icey water too??😈
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unres:
aash di...one tiiggghhhttt wala jadoo ki jhappi 4 u🤗


back to ya 🤗 *Ciracksss*

now i will keep this (read -only the kiss) as buffer! whenever u give me a Bakbaklicious update, i'll read this immediately after that before i even comment!

🤣 Ermmm Okk🤔


ur intro for this update was something i loved as much as i loved the kiss! very beautifully written-each word filled with an essence very heavy 👏

u mean my bakbak or the philosophy part😕

surri wants a baby... eee even we want...kab ayenge woh pal in the show???atleast uska prologue😉☺️
and the kiss-main kuch nahi kahungi...errr.. i mean type nahi karungi...my fingers might burn! kafi hot tha na!but the best...kiss se pehle bhi aur uske baad bhi innocent kitkit tha...that defines ZaYa for me *butterflies still flying furiously in my tummy😳

Zaya realtionship is unique. Their cuteness qouteint is quite high. I have still to see the hawwtt part. lets wait n watch😳 Wo pal pata nahi kab ayenge🤢 I hope separation se pehle aa jaye😡😡😡

n this shade of suri is also too enjoyable😛
Zain's feeling in the room part was very convincing...his behaviour towards MKB n him feeling guilty for hurting her was really nice..

He was retrospecting about bakbak🤢

and bakbak was shouting *head desk*! rona kum tha ki abb chillane bhi lagi!😡🤢
and one last thing...
@bold italicised---kaunsi waali????😆

which do u think😉

super update di...👏
waiting for next..😃
Tq for the PM😊




Thank u hun❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
very good...believe me i was laughing like an idiot when i was reading zaya part
quite natural i guess, but i loved it
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Posted: 11 years ago
and yes, sorry for reading it late
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Posted: 11 years ago
gr8 part,,
cont.soon

thanks for pm dear,,
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Posted: 11 years ago
Amazing update n hott too..drr kuss hayeee kitna imagine kia hai serial mein aisa kuch ho..bt it was amazingg!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Beautiful and Amazing Updates Aashu...👏
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: janu_2006

gr8 part,,

cont.soon

thanks for pm dear,,


Originally posted by: -chrys-

Beautiful and Amazing Updates Aashu...👏


Thank you😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: divikash

very good...believe me i was laughing like an idiot when i was reading zaya part

quite natural i guess, but i loved it


Originally posted by: divikash

and yes, sorry for reading it late


Why sorry 😕😕😕

Glad u enjoyed ur late reading spree😃



Originally posted by: sonakshimehta29

Amazing update n hott too..drr kuss hayeee kitna imagine kia hai serial mein aisa kuch ho..bt it was amazingg!!
😆


Thank u😳 Serial me aisa hoga to hum sab😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Hellos. I am back with an update. Thank u for all ur lovely comments and encouragment. I have added most of u guys, but if u do not receive a PM by any chance, plz see that u add me as ur Buddy.

So the show is right now running like how i predicted.🤢

Oh. And please lower the volume and hear the music in BG, the song is too loud otherwise😃

Keep in mind that my time frame and the time frame running in the show are different and also Aayat does not live with the Abdullahs but is in Bhopal.

Please excuse any typos since i havent proofread. Let me know if u do find any typos and i shall correct them.

Criticism is always welcome.😃


Chapter 3: Betrayed





Music: Jag Soona Soona Lage

Her heart in her mouth, Aaliya caught hold of Barkat's hands and tried to save herself from falling. She tried twisting around in an attempt to gain some footing and the two of them wrestled on the landing, one trying to throw the other down, while the other trying to save herself.

Suddenly, out of the corner of her eye, Barkat spied Zain coming towards them. Panicking at being caught, her quick mind instantly took the chance and she twisted around and started shouting, "Bhabhi aisa please mat kijiye..."

Zain, who was still deep in contemplation, was jolted out of his reverie to see what appeared to be Aaliya trying to push Barkat down over the railing. Shock and horror vied for supremacy as he broke into a run; his mind freezing and he couldn't make heads or tails of what he was seeing.

Barkat held on to Aaliya not letting her escape while making out as if she was the one who was being victimized.

Zain had reached them by then, and holding onto Barkat's hand he separated the two. Aaliya who had no idea what was happening gasped as she tried to get back her breath while Barkat grabbing the opportunity hurled herself into Zain's side, sobbing her heart out.

"Bhaiyuu...Please mujhe bacha lijiye...Bhabhi mujhe maarne ki koshish kar rahi hai... Bhaiyuuu please..."

Aaliya's breath stopped in her lungs as she heard Barkat's words. She was trying to kill her???!!

She raised anger filled eyes to meet Zain's eyes which were showing disbelief and confusion. Her lips moved to form an instant denial when suddenly it seemed that the entire family gathered around them.

Suraiyya burst in between them and grabbing Barkat she looked her over from head to toe, making sure she was alright, "Kya hua meri bacchi ko? Tum theek to ho...," before hugging her hard.

"Mami..." Aaliya croaked, as Suraiyya released Barkat and turned to her. Her eyes emanating fury, Suraiyya slapped her hard, "Tumhari himmat kaise hui meri beti ko haath lagane ki..."

Barkat immediately went to hug Usman who wrapped her in his arms while she sobbed her heart out; looking deeply disturbed at the turn of events.

"Mami..." She whispered, trying to reign in her tears at the obvious distrust reflected in everyone's eyes and tried to explain, "Ye ladki jhooth bol rahi hai. Ye mujhe maarne ki koshish kar rahi thi..."

It was as if a bomb had exploded, so thick was the silence at her pronouncement. Everyone stared at her as if she had gone mad.

"Tum theek to ho, Aaliya? Kya bol rahi ho tum... Barkat aisa kyu karegi?" Zain interjected, concerned. His mind was spinning, and he couldn't make heads or tails of what had just happened. Why the hell would his wife want to kill his sister!!! Had Aaliya been under too much stress lately? Was she hallucinating? What was wrong with her?

Taking a deep breath, knowing what she was about to disclose was going to tear her family apart, Aaliya declared slowly, "Kyuke ye ladki humari Barkat nahi hai..."

*Silence*

Stunned was an understatement to describe what everyone was going through. They couldn't believe their eyes and ears. In fact they didn't want to believe it. How can anyone who had been given a second chance at life deny it? How can any parent whose lost child had been returned to them after an eon believe that the child they had started loving as their own was fake or the daughter in law they had come to adore was trying to kill their child?



Zain who up to now was concerned for Aaliya, was unable to constrain his wrath at this, "Ye kya bakwaas kar rahi ho? Tumhara dimaag to kharab to nahi hogaya?"

What was Aaliya saying about his Bakbak?? Of course she was his sister, the one who he had lost in his childhood. The apple of his parents eyes, the soul of this family.

Usman tried to garner some sense out of the happenings, "Ye kya keh rahi ho tum Aaliya...?"

"Mamu mai sach keh rahi hu... Mai yaha se guzar rahi thi tab maine ise phone pe kisi se baat karte hue suna...Plan bana rahi thi ye...Abdullahs ki barbadi ka..." She finished in a whisper.

"Nahiii!!! Ye sach nahi ho sakta ..." He whispered a heartfelt entreaty.

Seeing Aaliya gaining their attention, Barkat panicked. She had to do something before Aaliya revealed anything which could be detrimental to her plans. She immediately broke out into sobs, "Bhabhi! Aap itna gir sakti hai, mujhe yakeen hi nahi ho raha! Pehle mujhe marne ki koshish karti ho, aur jab chal ulti padh jaati hai to mujhe hi gunehgaar thera rahi ho?"

She turned to her parents, holding onto their hands tightly, while tears kept falling from her eyes, "Ammi, Abbu, jab se mai is ghar me aayi hu, Aaliya Bhabhi mere peeche padi hui hai. Aapke saamne badi tehzeeb me rehti hai, par jab koi nahi hota to mujhse humesha ajeeb se sawaal poochti rehti hai, mujhe har baat pe tane marti rehti hai, tokti rehti hai. Pehle to mujhe lagta tha wo mujhse jealous hai ke itne saalon tak Abbu ne unhe apni beti mana aur maine unki jagah le li..."

Nafeesa interjected immediately, giving Aaliya a sidelong glance, "Tum guilty kyu feel kar rahi ho Barkat? Tumne kisi ki jagah nahi li... Koi aur tumhari jagah lene ki koshish me tha..."

Usman gave Nafeesa a look to silence her and turned to his daughter, "Agar ye baat sach hai to tumne kabhi kisi ko bataya kyu nahi?"

"Maine kabhi aapse inke bare me kuch nahi kaha, kyuke mai is ghar me koi khalal nahi padhne dena chahti thi Abbu..."

"Par us din..." She whispered, and stared hiccoughing as if overcome by tears and Suraiyya moved immediately to hug her and pat her back. Aaliya looked at the actress in front of her; no one seeing her could fail to be moved by her tears.

"Apna natak bandh karo tum...Jhooth bolne ki limit hoti hai..."

"Natak mai kar rahi hu ya aap? Jis din se aap is ghar me aayi hai...Aap achai ka natak hi to kar rahi hai!"

She turned to Zain, seeing him as the weakest target, "Aapko pata hai Bhaiyyu, us din mai Mir Khan se milne gayee thi, unhe warn karne ke mujhse aur mere parivaar se door rahiye, tab maine waha kisko dekha?"

Waiting for a second, letting the tension build before she dropped her bomb, she added, "Phupha ko! Wo aur Mir Khan gale mil rahe the, kuch baatein kar rahe the. Khafa the kafi Phupha unse, kyuke unka koi plan kharab ho gaya. Mujhe zyada kuch samajh nahi aaya..."

"Kya anaap shanaap bak rahi ho tum! Mere Abbu aisa kabhi nahi kar sakte!" Aaliya turned on her furiously, anger visible in very line of her body.

"Ek minute..." Barkat took her phone and searching something; she pulled up a photograph and showed it to everyone.

It was of Ghulam and Mir.

Both had their arms around each other and appeared to be hugging each other.

"Abbu, maine bahot koshish ki sachai ko jaan ne ki aur aaj mujhe finally sachai pata chal gayee..." Barkat stopped again.

"Kya sachai?"

"Aaliya Bhabhi ki sachai! Mai to kabhi kisi ko inka sach nahi batati, kyuke mujhe pata hai mere Bhaiyyu inse kitna pyaar karte hai aur inki sacchai jaanke unhe kitna dukh hoga."

She went to Zain and held his hand as if offering her support, then turned to Usman, "Bhaiyyu hi kyu, mere Abbu ko bhi to in pe itna garv hai, bharosa hai. Aur mai apne Abbu ke bharose ko todna nahi chahti thi. Isliye maine ye tay kar liya tha ke mai chup rahungi..."

"Socha tha inhe samajh dungi ke wo sudhar jaye aur is parivaar ko apna le. Apne games khlena bandh kar de. Par jab inhe pata chala ke mujhe sab pata hai to inhone mujhe hi maarne ki koshish ki..." she shuddered as if remembering those moments when she was supposedly fighting between life and death.

Suraiyya shook with despair, her legs unable to hold her, she faltered, and Fahad immediately ran to her to offer support.

Aaliya tried once again to put across her point, "Aap please meri baat suniye, ye sab jhooth hai, ye ladki ek kahani suna rahi hai..." But Usman raised one finger, silencing her. Turning to Barkat, he asked, "Kaisa sach?"

Finally seeing that everyone was ready to believe her, she started laying the final nails in Aaliya's coffin.

"Phupha aur Phuphi ko pata tha ke mai zinda hu aur kaha hu."

"Wo humesha se Mir Khan ke saath mile hue the. Wo aapki tarakki se jalte the. Pehle unhone apni nafrat me mujhe kidnap kiya, par jab usse unhe koi fayda nahi hua, to unhone ek masterplan banaya."

"Is ghar, is property ko hasil karne ka plan."

She turned to Zain and stated, "Zain aur Aaliya ke Nikah ka plan..."

Zain seemed to have turned to stone, disbelief visible on his countenance. A glance at Usman showed him to be battling his own demons.

"Bhaiyyu, Aaliya Bhabhi ka Nikah tootna, wo ek chal thi. Wo to bas koi raasta dhoond rahe the aapko fasane ka. Bhaiyyu ke saath wo natak karna ke wo Zeeshan hai, sab kuch ek sochi samjhi saazish thi. Aur aap is me fas gaye..."

"Unhe pata tha ke Abbu Aaliya Bhabhi ko kabhi dukhi nahi dekh sakte aur agar Aaliya Bhabhi aur Bhaiyyu ke bare me kuch afwae udi to aap inka Nikah zaroor karwaenge..."

Unable to stand it any longer, Aaliya moved to Barkat, "Bas! Aur ek shabd nahi!" and turning her around raised her hand to slap her. But before her hand could touch Barkat, Fahad Bhai stepped in between, nodding his head in warning and gave her a stern glance.

"Lekin mere is ghar me wapis aane se ye sab chaupat ho gaya. Aapne adhi property mere naam kar di! Ye inse dekha nahi gaya, isliye shayad inhone mujhe maarne ka mansooba banaya. Aur aaj agar Bhaiyyu time pe nahi aate, to shayad ye apne gande maksad me kamyaab bhi ho jaati!"

Smirking inwardly at their reactions, she knew she had nearly convinced them all. Only one last nail was left in to put in the coffin. "Aapko pata hai Mir khan ki bail kisne karwai? Ghulam Haider ne..." She faced Aaliya and stated, "Aur ye baat Bhabhi ko bhi pata thi...haina Bhabhi...???"

"Haan magar..." Aaliya tried to clarify but was silenced by Suraiyya, "Haan ya na, Aaliya..?"

"Haan!" She whispered, realizing the trap which had been laid by this woman. She had been such a fool. She should have told Zain the day she received that phone call from the police station, but now it was too late to retrospect.

"Mamu, please mera bharosa kijiye. Ye sab jhooth hai. Kya aapko lagta hai ke aapki Aaliya aisa ghatiya kaam kar sakti hai? Ye mujhpe tohmat laga rahi hai." She pleaded, but the look of contempt in Usman's eyes sent her reeling in shock. She looked around at everyone, Suraiyya, Fahad Bhai, Shazia; Nafeesa...all had similar looks.



She turned to Zain, looking at him with hope n full faith, knowing Zain would side by her, would trust her. She took his hand, entreating, "Zain..."



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U guys have no idea how much i regret giving the prologue🤢😆


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Love Aash


My other work on Zaya

Blessings in Disguise

Laal Ishq

Bleeding Blue


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Edited by Loquacious_Aash - 11 years ago

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