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Posted: 11 years ago
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I don't know what I've written, I just felt like it. Inspired by the sig below, made by Amidst The Hues/FB.


Drabble: Bottomless

He felt like he was drowning in the depths of the sea, in the sea of his tears. He wanted to stop it but he couldn't. They had developed a mind of their own. It seemed like they wanted to wash away every trace of her in his body. But that was what his mind wanted.

His heart was a completely different story. It kept reminding him of her again and again. It ached for her smile the most. Her guilty expression tugged at his heart again and again.

Neither his mind, nor his heart was willing to listen. Neither was willing to leave him alone. His mind wanted him to forget and his heart wanted him to remember her, leaving him confused.

He couldn't forget her that easily; she was after all, his true love and his soul mate. But he didn't want to remember her. The memory of her rejection hurt him too much.

So he cried, and remembered, and then cried again. He cried till there were no more tears left, he remembered her until he had exhausted all the memories.

And then he was left bottomless.


Criticism is always welcome. :)
Jhootas and Chappals too. 😳

Love,
Ananya

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beti I really like ur tragic ends
I loved it it is written beautifully it seems so pure
He wanted to erase everything he couldn't handle the rejection he wanted to wash it all his mind said that
But his heart were making him remind all the memories he is caught up between mind and heart

Loved the last part where he cried until no tears were left remembered those memories he was left bottomless wow
I loved it Beti
Muah :*
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Ye toh bahut chota tha Bean 😆
But I liked it 😃
It was somehow relative to 2012 KriYaansh and personally, I love such concepts! Heartbroken lovers, separation ^___^ Sadist hun main 😛

Accha tha Bean 🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
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annu bhanjiii
awesome ree
u expressed his fellings well
its beautiful
I loved this story
update next part soon
waiting eagerly
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Posted: 11 years ago
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You are turning a sadist these days 😳 Two concepts on rejection by you lately. Did you get rejected kya? 🤣
That sig is soo good btw.
"They had developed a mind of their own. It seemed like they wanted to wash away every trace of her in his body. But that was what his mind wanted."

^^ I loved these lines.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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hawww tu bhi writer hai...nice yar...
but ittu sa update...😆

btw awesome update yar...
loved it...love the concept...👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Bhanji...
Super awesome...
The way u described his feelings were beautiful...
Ab mujhe jaldi update chahiye...don't be lazy like your maa...!;)
Love you for giving this story!!:*
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Posted: 11 years ago
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IT WAS SMALL BUT GREAT CONCEPT... LIKED IT
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Rish..

Ye toh bahut chota tha Bean 😆 Haan 😆

But I liked it 😃 Thankss :D
It was somehow relative to 2012 KriYaansh and personally, I love such concepts! Heartbroken lovers, separation ^___^ Sadist hun main 😛 Accha? :P

Accha tha Bean 🤗 Thank you :)

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: FlawlessAshvik

You are turning a sadist these days 😳 Two concepts on rejection by you lately. Did you get rejected kya? 🤣 My inspiration doesn't come from my life. 😆

That sig is soo good btw. Ikr! :')
"They had developed a mind of their own. It seemed like they wanted to wash away every trace of her in his body. But that was what his mind wanted."

^^ I loved these lines. Thanks :D

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