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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: PurpleCrayon

Will you give us an epilogue? Pretty please? With maybe an angaar kumar or a dhuan kumari? 😳


Originally posted by: drdee142

Read all the 3 parts together, wonderful FF, beautifully written. Really loved it. Kudos to you


I too would love to read an epilogue, it would be like icing on the cake 😊


Dee


Thank you so much for reading and leaving a comment😳 I haven't thought of an epilogue yet.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: What_the

Ohhh...the true vachan of love...finally...adore the way you wrote the vows...

And also fell in love with that aakhri sentence wala metaphor...parched desert and soothing rain...yeah, that one 😉
Very nicely done!

Ok..too sleepy now...but sleeping with a smile on my face..

Will edit in the morning with a better comment...

Gnite!

Edited!!!

Sorry, sorry, sorry!!! Itni der ho gayee!!!

I love your hopelessly-in-love Rudra...the one who grins sloppily, squirms under his Paro's annoyed gaze, who sheepishly wants to rub the back of his neck when she catches him lying, the one who forgets the about the strategising and planning, that he has been doing for years, in a hearbeat and drives to her house impulsively, to confess...because he is in love, so in love!!!

Mami-sa plays the wise, knowing, motherly role, who knows just what will make Paro change her mind...nice touch there!!

My heart almost broke for him when he feels that she may not love him any more...and his love for her is so deep, he is willing to let her go, if thats what makes her happy...
Thankfully Paro bai sa had no plans of going anywhere...
Really..kaisa yeh pyaar hai...where they both are willing to let each other go...if it makes the other happy...no matter that they cannot possible live without each other...

I just loved the way you rewrote the vows...I really look forward to such a scene in the show as well...when he will make up for each cruel word uttered during that fiasco of a shaadi...


Soothing rain, parched earth...beautiful!

I completely agree that losing Paro is the only way to jolt Rudra in to realising his love, his need for her...

This was a very satisfying read... I am so glad that you wrote the additional parts!!!

Lots of love,
Maya


Maya!

@Bold: you picked up on his subconscious gestures. i think when he lets his guard down like he did at Jaipur ( and he smiled that half smile) we might get to see those little gestures so this was my attempt at writing them.

He is see sawing between being gruff and considerate right now. I'd like to think that once he falls in love and realizes it, there'll be a tender side to his warrior persona. Something that none of his comrades or family have see,a side to him that'll probably come out only in Paro's presence.

I tried editing without causing too much of a drastic change. I'll always think it could better😳

Thank you so much for indulging the brat in me and editing your previous post😆😛

Lots of Love!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: snoopy84

Awesome SS loved how Rudra realised his love for Paro and was real sweet how she was going to come back to him loved it


So glad you enjoyed it😃. Thank you so much for leaving me feedback😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: PurpleCrayon

Will you give us an epilogue? Pretty please? With maybe an angaar kumar or a dhuan kumari? 😳



Hey PC I read your comment on Napsters thread 😳 I will try my best for an epilogue.Those dang puppy dog eyes are very compelling. But please don't be too disappointed if I can't post one
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: niyoti



Hey PC I read your comment on Napsters thread 😳 I will try my best for an epilogue.Those dang puppy dog eyes are very compelling. But please don't be too disappointed if I can't post one


No Problem! I wouldn't want to put any pressure on you what so ever😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
so sweet

a loving, pining Rudra

and a sweet innocent Paro
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: IsleOfCapri

simply superb
loved itc



Thank you so much! 😳

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