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Posted: 11 years ago
sorry bhool gayi mai.. šŸ˜†
Edited by -Blind.Dance- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
loved it ..
superb and amazing...

thnks a lot for the pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
res... abhi xams hain so will comment l8rrr
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Posted: 11 years ago
Pata nahi kahaan kahaan se ideas dhund laati hai.. main toh abhi bhi soch rahi hu yeh start kahaan se hua tha aur end kahaan..

pehle toh warning dekh ke I was like 😃 but the divorce.. main paglaa jaungi.. phir uski woh shart mujhe lagaa kuch naughty hoga.. par yeh serious tha...

but I liked the way it all turned out...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Di it was sooo good...

Loved it a lot...

The way you described the tiffs between KriYaansh and how it got solved was such a unique way...Awesome...!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

KriYaansh OneShot - 9

Long time right??I am kinda missing this thread.. I swear aage se kahi aur post nahi karungi OS.. kaisi bhi ho!! even b'day gifts bhi :P So no more bak bak!! Scroll down and please I request a detailed comment for this and please DO NOT ask for second part.. its a OS let it be like that!!

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"Kriya!! " Vicky held her as she bumped into him and was about to fall . Everyone stopped and swayam helped her to stand. Rey looked at her expressionless.

"Sorry Vicky!! Wo galti se "

"koi baat nahi!! Lets start from the top?? " he said smiling. She smiled once and looked front. At one point everyone should move to right together quickly but she missed it and thus Sharon who is on her left banged into her and both were about to fall but the gang somehow managed to catch them.

"Sorry sharon " Kriya said looking down.

"Kriya are you okay?? You seem lost, dhyaan kaha hai tera?? " Swayam asked seeing the continuous mistakes she is doing. From last 30 mins, which is exactly from the time they started rehearsing.

" kuch nahi , I am fine " she faked a smile and stood for the routine .

"Lets take a break Kriya!! I think you need it "Sharon said confused at Kriya's behaviour . Kriya nodded and all took their bottles and settled at places in the Rehearsal Hall. Rey looked at her through mirror. She sat in one corner of the room and deeply lost in her thoughts. He saw Sharon walk to her and both talk something and Kriya smiled at her and Sharon faking a smile not able to find the reason for her depression.

***

" I never thought you can go to this level. What do you want actually? " he said disgusted. From past few days he is falling for her hard. He knew it but not a bit ready to accept it. And one day when she by mistake slipped and ended in his arms and his heart shouted to hug her and love her, he scolded her with all the power he had. He just can't let this girl rule his heart. And to stop his heart and control himself he let his whole frustration on her saying the worst things to her...

She wiped her tears remembering that day!! Its been a week since he said that and now its becoming hard for to even breathe in his house. He is not angry on her, he doesn't hate her. But he feels disgust in her presence , that made her loose the respect for herself.

***

" Guys I am tensed "simmi said after the routine.

"Everything will be fine Simmi!! We will give our best tomorrow and I am sure mere college wale iss affiliation keliye pakka haan bolenge " She smiled making simmi grin.

"And I am sure tum logon ki Dance academy ka sapna zaroor poora hoga " She smiled from heart.

" Humari , wo tum nahi hum hai right?? "Sharon insisted.

" Nahi sharon, Dance academy aap logon ka hai toh mai kaise aaungi usme??" Kriya asked with her calm.

Rey frowned at her.

" Kriya Dance academy keliye hum sab ne milke hardwork ki , and you are also a part " swayam said to her.

"Swayam mai sirf exchange student hun... kal performance khatam hoti hi mai nikal jaungi, toh mai academy ka hissa kaise ho sakti hun?? " she said with a straight face. Rey looked at her immediately shocked.

"WHAT? " everyone were shocked too.

" tum kal jaane wali ho?? "nilesh asked

" Haa guys, kal shaam ko mera flight hai " kriya explained.

" tumne bataya nahi " The words just slipped out of his mouth but he cared less. His heart pained knowing she is gonna leave him again. Isn't it the one he wanted?? Doesn't he know that one day she will return back, but still he don't know why his heart pained. Or may be he knew but not ready to accept it.

She looked at him but as his eyes met hers she looked away.


"Isme batane wali kya baat hai?? Mai 3 months keliye aayi thi and I have to go back now " She said looking away.

" Kriya tumhe batana toh chahiye na ki tum kal jaa rahi ho?? " Sharon asked. She is finding a close friend in Kriya and here she is leaving .

"Guys! ispe baat karke koi faida nahi " Kriya shrugged her shoulders.

***

"Tumne sab pack bhi karliya?? " Rinni said seeing her room. Rey looked around the room and at her. Hurt is visible. Is it that simple to leave him and go??

Enough Rey. She has to go and she will go. Rukhne ka koi wajah bhi nahi , and you can finally live in peace.

He consoled his heart and left the place.

***

" thode din aur rukh jaati beta!! Tumhare jaane ke baad thoda khalipan reh jayega ghar mei " Ranvijay said to her.

" Nahi uncle I have to go. " She smiled and took a step front but stopped , and suddenly held his coat and placed her head on his heart. Ranvijay frowned and even Rey with her this sudden act, but Ranvijay caressed her act and asked.

"Kya hua beta?? " Kriya after few seconds pulled back and said " kabhi pata nahi chala Papa ka presence kaisa hota hai, thanks uncle for making me feel that . " She said left as Ranvijay smiled a bit low. She is such a sweet girl.

Rey took her trolley and walked out of the house. As they were out of the door Kriya caught the trolley. He frowned and looked at her.

" Thanks a lot Rey!! Mei jab injured thi tab meri care karne keliye. Sorry if I hurted or disturbed you at any point. It was purely unintentional. And sorry itne din rukhne keliye, mai usi din chaligayi hoti jab meri chot theek hogayi, but mai uncle ko mana nahi karpaayi bas. Sorry once again if I troubled you. And hopefully ab tak aapa guilt bhi chalagaya hoga. I will go by myself from now. " She said taking the bag from him.

" Mai tumhe airport chod deta hun na " He looked at er hopefully.

"Nahi Rey!! You have done more than enough. And it's time I manage everything alone. " She said looking away and hurt reflecting in her voice as she said that last word.

He stood there numb as she grabbed the bag and descended the stairs. He stood looking at her retreating back. Something heavy started gathering in his heart. He felt it hard to breathe properly. He looked away as his body slightly started shivering and sudden relief passed through him seeing something. It felt as if he was searching for reasons. He grabbed her scarf quickly and ran down calling her.

"Kriya!! " He called her and she stopped , her heart beat getting high. All she wished now was him to stop her. Once , just for once if he will ask her to stay she will just drop everything and stay back. But her heart broke again when she saw him forwarding the scarf. This is the reason he called her.

" tumhara scarf. " he handed to her moving his weight from one toe to other.

"thanks "she smiled a bit and took it and after keeping it in her bag she turned to go when he spoke.

"Mai tumhe airport tak drop kardeta hun na " he asked impatiently . He just want to spend more and more time with her. The thought that these were the last seconds is killing him.

"Nahi Rey I will go by myself." She said not looking at his eyes.

" Arey ab taxi keliye kab tak wait karogi, waise bhi yaha jaldi nahi milte, flight keliye le jaogi na ?? " he asked. His heart is in lead now.

Please say yes.

" Nahi Rey!! Main already cab book karliya, aata hi hoga "she said looking away.

He felt a sudden prick in his heart. It already started bleeding.

"Ohhh!! Toh sab plan karliya tumne. How could I foget?? tum toh sabkuch apni plan ke hisaab se karti hona "he said looking away down with pain.

" achi baat hai, plan karke rakhna achi baat hai, you.. you carry on, happy journey . " He said and walked back with his hands in pockets. He felt his world crash . He stopped at the stairs before climbing them to make himself stable. Everything around him is spinning. He took a deep breathe and stood there blinking hard stopping the tears rushing to his eyes.

***

She walked to the gate and placed her bag aside and looked ahead. She is going through a battle. Battle of mind and heart.

" He didn't stop you, he still dislikes you!! " her mind screamed.

" Aren't you the one who is responsible?? He doesn't know anything. Please go back to him. He still loves you!! You are cheating yourself by not telling the truth to him " her heart cried hard... She closed her eyes tight as the battle took more pace.

He opened his eyes hearing some foot steps. He frowned and turned back to see her walk to him , her bag still at the gate. She finally stood face to face to him and spoke looking at him , but not into the eye.

"Rey wo mujhe aapse... " she fidgetted with her jacket. He waited for her to continue. He is waiting with baited breathe .

"wo mai... "


"actually uss din"


" Rey mom ne "

" Rey " she let her shoulders fall helplessly, she is not able to know where to start . How to start. Tears welled up in her eyes and she stood looking down. They stood there for nearly 5 minutes, one waiting for the other to speak and the other not able to speak up.

She heard the cab driver honk indicating he reached and she looked back. Rey looked at the cab and he breathed out in shock which till now he was holding. She looked at the cab and turned to look at him.

She just can't loose this chance and repent the whole life. And without wasting a second she flung into his arms hugging him tight and crying and that's when his tear rolled down from his eye. He was waiting for this. He knew what he wanted. But was not ready to accept but now he couldn't help but accept happily. Once his tears started falling continuously he hugged her back tight. He giggled in between. She frowned and pulled back. But he himself don't know why he is giggling. But as she pulled back and looked at him he laughed and she took laughed still tears making their way out. He slowly pulled her to him and hugged again tight. She adjusted herself and her head on his heart she spoke slowly.

"Rey "

"hmm "was all he said in return.

" mujhe aapko bohut saare sach batane hai " She said looking up . He looked deep into her eyes.

He now just knew, that he don't know a biggest chunk of their life!! He smiled giving his approval and she just hugged him giving peace to their heart.


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So here ends the OS!! So kindly tell me how it is!! Sorry for typos!! I am sleepy today!! Kal kardoongi 😃

Reviews please.

Love,

Deetha😳
Edited by -Blind.Dance- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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dee it was awesomeee...

somhow the way i wanted story to be.. honestly...

coz i still miss that gusse wala Rey...usko dekhne ka maza alag tha... šŸ˜†


coming to it...i loved how u portrayed Rey's emotions... his confusion...and then sudden realisation abt Kriya going back made him all restless...


then that "Its now or never" moment in the end... der hug... it was just perfect..!!!

Loved how u ended it...

Amazinggg Dee 😃


Edited by akanksha_arsha - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Aaawww... I just loved the way you ended it. :')

Beautiful. Really really loved the whole piece of writing. Ahhh-mazinggg :D

I know tujhe long review chaiye but after reading this m speechless. All i want to say is; this OS is now in the list of My Most Fav OS.

Thank you Dee :* :* :*
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Posted: 11 years ago
Haaayee deetha is on a roll🤣

amazing os mahn
so so waiting for someone to write on the current situations and here you arešŸ¤—

fabulously written

rey's condition was so amazingly described...sachii


and i loved the ranvijay uncle and kria's part a lott
pehle se hi am loving this father in law-daughter in law jodi🤣

and here u made me love them more


Damn i was thinking ki rey end me chillayega filmy style me and she'll stop and then he'll open his arms and blah blah 🤣 🤣 🤣

but yeh toh kria hi aagai🤣

it was amazing re :D really great
Edited by -Ocean.eyes- - 11 years ago

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