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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: sujji0609

WOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW............ that was an awesome update diii......... i literally got a lump in my throat when i read about her tragic past......... that's was too heartwrenching....... the way you narrated it was terrific......

Haan agreed mere liye bhale hi Shahrukh aur Kapil ek hai both hold the no 1 position in my heart not an inch up not an inch down.......... but apni Rani ke liye Sarja toh Shahrukh se kayi zyaada badkar hai....... aww my hero has come to get his angel out of that tragic life.......... me eagerly waiting to see their interaction........ continue soon dii.........



Thanks Sujju, I know u r SRK crazy... par apna Sarjaa bhi SRK ke se kamm nahi...
I will update next part soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Gr8 update Darshu and loved that Sarje came back to Rani..... Cant wait to know what will happen next😍
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Darsh , the topic u have chosen to write this FF makes me very touchy and emotional . This is the worst condition which woman can bear .... a prostitute??? My heart cries always when i read sumthing like this or watch some character in any movie / drama ....who woman would like to lead this kinda life ? even though they are bounded and compelled by fate but still i feel that they polish their faces by wearing make up but how can somebody hides the scars on souls and hearts which they get everytime by losing their respect ? Everytime they have to die and then again become alive for those evils.........am happy that Rani has got Sarja in her fate who will definetely make her out of that mud but i pray that every girl like Rani will get one Sarja so that they never ever bear those kinda disreputable life .Because those who born in that mud ,are definetely not at fault and those who are forced to bring in that place by getting decieved are totally helpless. Shoudnt we grateful and thankful to God that he made us born in protective shelters where our fathers , brothers and husbands are there to protect and support us ? Thank u Allah 😭😭😭( sorry if u feel that instead of commenting about ur story i went emotional and wrote some essay but whatever came in mind , i typed )

Anyway , Sarja is as usual a gem of a person at heart here in ur FF .... am looking frwrd how he takes his love with him .

Ane one more thing , sorry to say this but cant imagine Anjali like pure girl in that character , mein to kisi larki ko bhi nahi imagine karna chahti , but at the end of the day , its a mere story and i really love how brillaintly u r writing it so continue soon and keep it up.😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
#24
Faizu, Its true yaar.. we are truely blessed and we should be thankful to god about same.....

Coming to story, i knew somewhere not everyone will appreciate it. But there was no way i could find Sarjaa getting some tough competition from his opposite end, except in such cases..... I am trying to keep my story evolved around these two only with dept of emotions, feelings they share for each other... I hope u all will like that...........
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Posted: 14 years ago
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I know Darsh ,like i said its a mere story and u r handling it in a really good manner ...i will love to read all the emotions , nok-jhonk , difficulties they both will see in their relationship..i have a full faith in ur writing skills ..keep it up dear 🤗...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 3

Rani was still not able to recover from shock; she couldn't believe that he visited this place again. He took out bundle of notes from his pocket and threw that in Champa's hand. "For whole night!" he said and headed towards her room. She looked at him surprisingly. He couldn't unnoticed surprise smile on her face when he walked very much close to her. She was on cloud nine. Champa hint other girl to leave them alone and she quickly moved out of the room. Sarjaa entered in room and sat on bed. She turned to look at him. Her heartbeat seems to be paused for a while when she saw that mischievous smile on his face. She turned again and closed the door. Sarjaa finally broke silence between two and told her to seat on bed. Rani came and sat very much next to him.

Sarjaa – "Tera naam kya hain?"

Rani – (She looked at him with puzzled expression and replied) "Rani"

Sarjaa – (He quickly asked next question) "Asali naam?"

She was still with full of attitude.

Rani – "Ayeee, tune bahar jo paise diye wo kya mera naam janane ke liye diye hain? Baat karata hain!"

Sarja – (He was no less even) "Haan usiki liye diye hain. Ab batayegi?"

Rani – "Kya karega asali naam jaanake? Kya usaka acahar dalega"

Sarjaa – "Tu sidhi tarah jawab nahi de sakti…" (He looked at her with so much irritation)

There was pause in between their argument for a while. Both looked at each other with strange expression. But finally Rani broke suspense on him.

Rani – "Asali naam……. Anjali……… Par bolana mat kisiko yahe pe. Koi nahi janata yeh naam yaha pe" (She said sadly)

He nodded positively with all set to fire his next question.

Sarjaa – "Bukhar kaisa hain ab tera? Doctor ke paas gayi thi?"

Rani – "Thik hain abhi. Par tereko kisane bola tha ilaaj ke liye paise dene ko? Main khud ja sakti thi"

Sarjaa – "Mera mann kiya so maine paise diye." (He said arrogantly)

She was really no less in front of his attitude. She got up quickly from the bed and walked near to her cupboard. She took out money from it and angrily walked towards him.

Rani – "Yeh rahe tere paise jo doctor ke paas jaane ke liye diye the. Ek bhi paisa nahi kharch kiya hain. Baki ke paise bhi Champa Tai ke pass hain, wo bhi lauta dungi tuze"

Sarjaa – "Maine paise mange hain tuzse?"

Rani – "Mera mann kiya so main bhi paise lauta diye", she said confidently.

He took deep breath and took out money from her hand. She finally sat down on bed again with winning attitude. He was busy in putting money back to his pocket. But something was going in her mind. She asked him finally.

Rani – "Tune aaj phir puri raat ke paise diye? Iraada kya hain? Uss din to bahut akad ke chala gaya tha."

He thought for a while, smiled and replied,

Sarjaa – "Tere se baat karne ka mann kiya to aa gaya…."

Rani couldn't help out. She burst out into laughter loudly. He looked at her with puzzled expression. Finally she controlled her laughter and asked him. "Didn't you pay bigger amount just to talk to me". Sarjaa said, "Money is not bigger thing for him. He can pay whichever amount he wishes for whatever things he wants". Rani asked him, "Why you are so much arrogant about money you have?". Sarjaa replies he is not arrogant rather he is confident than he can earn enough money to buy whatever he wishes. Rani replied, "You can't everything with money". Sarjaa replied, "But you can't live without it too. Can she think of surviving without money"? She had no answer. Her face turned sad when she recalled how this money has brought her disastrous life. He looked her and asks her what happened? She avoid answering just by saying nothing. She covered her face with plastic smile as quick as she can and starts asking him about his life………………….

That night was most memorable night for both of them……. That night two people shared so much secrets of them breaking the wall of stranger. That night, that room was filled with laughter only. First time ever, they both were so much happy…………… just with each other…………………..

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Darshu again awesome update and liked the attitude displayed by Sarje and Rani Urff Anjali.....😉 Abhi Rani ka asli naam Anjali toh Sarja ka asli naam Kapil kar hi daalo Darshu😛
Wonder what other things they talked abt all night .... hope u will reveal all their conversations and those sweet touches which gradually bring them together....😍
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Posted: 14 years ago
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AWWWWWWWWWWW chooooooooo cute............. loved it..... full on attitude between the 2.... and also having the determination of not giving up easily.......me likes it totally........... Gosh i'm already getting crazy about Sarja character and your FF is making me even more....... continue soon diii eagerly awaiting your next update....
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Darshudi.....yeh dil mange more😳..................

and dont worry about the story..........its going fine................i agree its an emotional subject to many but that doesn't mean that we can just forget and leave away such subjects.Those girls are having hell as living and most of the time, they have to continue doing that, because even if they want to have "pure" life once again, society doesn't create the way for them..........I hope Sarje will....he has that guts

hugs and love from my side from trying something so sensitive like this.....bravo didi 🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Juna04

Darshu again awesome update and liked the attitude displayed by Sarje and Rani Urff Anjali.....😉 Abhi Rani ka asli naam Anjali toh Sarja ka asli naam Kapil kar hi daalo Darshu😛

Wonder what other things they talked abt all night .... hope u will reveal all their conversations and those sweet touches which gradually bring them together....😍



Thank U Juna di. See I managed to fit Anjali and RKAB(Her name from RKAB) very well. Ab Sarjaa ka naam Kapil kaise karu? 😕

Their conversation and sweet touches? In which thing u r more interested Juna di? 😉

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