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Posted: 14 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: sujji0609

AWWWWWWWWWWW chooooooooo cute............. loved it..... full on attitude between the 2.... and also having the determination of not giving up easily.......me likes it totally........... Gosh i'm already getting crazy about Sarja character and your FF is making me even more....... continue soon diii eagerly awaiting your next update....



Thanks Sujji, I am happy that u r liking it...... Their nok-zhok, love and faith in each other will continue..
I am planning to have more dramatic turn in my FF too....... U know very well I cant rid of my dramatic writing habit......😛
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: usmrasul

Darshudi.....yeh dil mange more😳..................

and dont worry about the story..........its going fine................i agree its an emotional subject to many but that doesn't mean that we can just forget and leave away such subjects.Those girls are having hell as living and most of the time, they have to continue doing that, because even if they want to have "pure" life once again, society doesn't create the way for them..........I hope Sarje will....he has that guts

hugs and love from my side from trying something so sensitive like this.....bravo didi 🤗



Thanks Sumi......... whatever u have written, will be part of my FF for sure.... Thats true society doesnt accept them so easily.... Some time I worried to write about sensitive issue as I am afraid I am not writing in wrong manner as this FF is still on Kanjali and we all love them so much 😳😳😳😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awesome update Darsh . Am loving both's attitude ....
And i pray like their sorrows , secrets , happiness have mingled this night , their hearts will also soon😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Darshu sorry for commenting late on your FF. another wonderful part. Loved their attitudes and the way they are becoming friends who can share their feelings with each other.Waiting for them to fall in love❤️❤️❤️ and for Sarja to bring her out of that hell.😊😊😊😊😊

Meri taraf se yeh Jhappi 🤗 for writing a bold story with our fav. characters
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Posted: 14 years ago
#35
Sorry for taking time for this FF

I am posting next part. I hope u will like it
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Posted: 14 years ago
#36

Part 4

It was surprising moment for both of them. Being stranger to each other, they didn't have this feeling even. He was slowly revealing his personal biography on her and she was listening to it quietly. She kept silent coz she has nothing to reveal actually. She was trying to capture all his expressive emotions when he was talking about his family members. Some things she quickly noticed, care he has while talking about his aai, love and smile he has on his face while talking about Chandu and Sonali. Anger he had while talking about Damu and Alka. He talked about everyone except one and that really haunted her mind. She couldn't stop herself from asking question, "Aur tera baap, wo kya karta hain?" His face indeed turned sad. She feared of something and in lower tone asked, "Nahi hain kya……" But before she could finish question even he replied, "Hain na… Police constable Marutirao Bhosale". He gave one sarcastic smile after. "Tu police wale ka beta hain?" she quickly asked. He gave puzzled look. "Tab to tuzase bach ke hi rahna padega. Kya pata jab mann kiya andar daal diya" she said mischievously. "Police walo ko aur kaam kya hota hain? Sahi logo ko andar daalate hain aur jo galat hain unako salaam thokate hain", he said more sadly. "Tuze police wale pasand nahi kya?" she hit the perfect mark this time. But he was in no mood to prolong that discussion. "Chod na, kuchh aur baat karate hain." He said. She understood something and replied, "Bhagane ki koshish kar raha hain tu." He glance at her with almost killing look and asked her, "Kuchh aur baat karein?" She thought for a while and nodded yes. "Accha tere dost log ke bare bein bata", she asked quickly to change his mood. He smiled very cutely and continues to be chatterbox with again those range of expressions.

That night was the most beautiful night in her life. The man she liked was next to her; and he was same as she wanted to be. Though she lost hope having someone very much special in her life quite long back; but his entry definitely enlightened that hopes again. She was sleeping peacefully after many days. May be secured feeling that he is there; just next to her made her more comfortable. Slowly golden sunrays falls on her face making gaps through window. She looked prettier; but there was no one to admire her beauty. He was also sleeping after making available himself for her till late night. She slowly woke up and looked around. Her own room seemed to be different today. Her searching eyes fell on him and a beautiful smile curved through her pink lips. She looked at him admiringly. Her eyes stretched from his rough hand, powerful muscles and then his calm face. He was still in deep sleep. Her lips were stretched more this time, after she finished looking at his muscular figure. Not with admiration of his good physics, but for his kind, love filled heart to which not many people managed to reach even. For admiring fact, that he didn't touch her even in spite of spending money for a whole night.

She also didn't understand what made him pay so much money for chat they had whole night. She stepped outside of room and quickly ordered for tea. Other girls saw her and quickly noticed glow she has on her face today. One of them quickly teased her, "Kya Rani, aaj bahut alag lag rahi hain. Lagta chaheeta customer aaya hain!". Other girl quickly added, "Areey, tuze pata nahi. Usaka Shahrukh aaya hain na..Isliye!"…. They laughed out quickly. She was boiling with anger; not anger even fake anger! "Bas ho gaya, jab tum logo ke liye Shahrukh khan aayega na tab mein dekh lungi", she quickly replied. Her order was ready next. She quickly grabbed two of cup tea and entered in her room again.

Sarjaa was in deep sleep but when she opened the door to move out that broke his trance. He woke up slowly and tried to gain some senses to understand where he is. He found it strange that clock is ticking 7.00 am in the morning and he spent whole night at place where he didn't wish to visit before. He sensed urgency of reaching home as he knew what could be waiting for him. He quickly grabbed his shirt and was trying to put that when he saw her entering in room with cup of tea. "Chai", she said with smile. "Nahi Rani der ho rahi hain", he said worryingly. "Areey, chale jaana par ek cup chai to pi sakta hain na", she said cutely and he couldn't resist that. He grabbed the cup and finished it quickly as soon as he can. He returned cup to her with some tea left in it and said, "Chal, main chalata hoon". He was in hurry to leave when she asked him again, "Phir aaoge na?" There was a thirst in her eye when asked this question. She was trying to search something in him. Something which she knew no other man in the world can give her. She kept looking at him with hope. He was probably spell bounded by her! He smiled and replied, "Aunga, aaj rat ko". Her hope turned true and she naturally asked "Pakka?"……. He smiled more and replied, "Tuze Sarjaa ki baat par bharosa nahi kya?" She smiled even more and nodded with great yes. "Chal, ab der rahi hain" he said and quickly rushed out of there. She blushed this time with imagination of one more night with him. As she looked down her attention caught by the cup he returned to her and some tea he left in it in hurry. She slowly brought that cup near to her lips to sense that very much touch of him.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow.......... that was superb........ loved it to infinity....... aww such a sweet update...... especially Anjali's hope mixed with her desire in asking Sarja whether he'll come...... and the way Sarja couldn't resist himself in saying Yes..... wonderful narration..... i was so engrossed in reading it....... Gosh now me dying to know what happens in their next meeting....... please continue soon......
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Posted: 14 years ago
#38
Another superb update Darshu..........her asking him to come again and he promising her😳 her anticipation......everything superbly written. loved it Darshu🤗 meri taraf se.
Jaldi se update kar do nxt part😃 your FF is the consolation to us poor souls who r tortured by non existent story of Sarja in PMMKA.😉😕
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Posted: 14 years ago
#39
Sorry Darsh that u had already updated n am late in commenting but its better late than never ....
This FF is a superb piece of writing by u ...everytime i read , it touches the heart n soul .....keep up the good work n update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Darshu I have to agree that this update was superbly described and it was like watching scenes from a good well made movie as while reading I could picture every expression, thoughts and feelings of Anjali aka Rani and
also Sarja towards the end when he assures her that he will be back tonight he wanted to make her feel secure and comfortable as he sensed the urgency in her wanting to know his answer to her question....

Well done Darshu loved it and pls continue soon dear....

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