Exploring the bond,within FF *part 11* COMPLETEDpage 19 - Page 4

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Posted: 4 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: barkhaa_tpm

Jaanu I know tu mujhse naaraaz hai for being so late to comment ... but believe me .. I saved the best for last. Aaj Saturday hai toh maine aram se baith ke pada. With no other agenda on my calendar looming over my head. I wanted to be free of all jhanjhat of the week when I read your story ... hence the delay. Not because I was putting it off.


No coming to the story ... yaaar it's CRUEL of you to stop there !! How beautifully you've penned the undertones of angst. Shiva knows Raavi cares for him .. yet something is stopping him from wholeheartedly accepting her feelings ... the complexities of the emotional turmoil these two are currently feeling... very few people can express it so beautifully in words like you did 🤗


And that cliff scene MY GOD. The way you have written it .. it was as if I could SEE the scene being played in front of my eyes ...your descriptions .. from the surroundings to the way Shiva spoke .. the imagery was so vivid !! Brilliant mera bacha 🤗 You really have a way with words.. please never stop writing. You're getting better and better with every new chapter 🥳

I was never naraz with you Barkha, I love you a lottttt, and this message means a lot to me and encourages me like anythingggggg

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Posted: 4 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: barkhaa_tpm

Jaanu how could you stop there 😳


Raavi's pain was so palpable .. 😩💔


And Shiva ... I can never understand how this guys brain works .. but you have shown the angst so beautifully 👏


And .. Oh shit ... BACHI KO THOK DI .. woh bhi TRUCK se😲??? FINALLY ..our dreams have come true 🤣 .. Only an accident can push this Gadheda Pandya to change his mind 🤣


Can't wait to read the next part 🤗


Ittu sa chapter parh ke mann bhara nahin I want moreeeee 😒😭

haha but someone had to udaofy na so i did, anyways.........updating soon as you wanted

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Posted: 4 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: lourel24

Shiva reaching there was reality n ravi hit by the truck was also reality.Nice one.Both had dreams of eachother, loosing eachother, craving n longing for eachother. Loved it n got excited that you would be updating next part today only.

yes i would be updating it today

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Posted: 4 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: S_Verma

Januuu yahi kese rok diyaaa....🥺

Agreee likha phastamphasttt...

Raavi's pain and the hallucinations lovinggg this parttttt so mchhh❤️

Also...accident ho hi gyaaaa.

Ab gadhede ko akal aa jayegiii

lol yes but itni jaldi kese??

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Posted: 4 years ago
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So I'm back and I hope you guys like this part....Happy Reading!

Part-4

~Aches & Wounds, blood and tears~

All of it happened in a friction of seconds and it seemed as if the truck might had lost the break control and the truck then tumbled after hitting her and fell down making a large noise which indeed echoed; but as the rain god wept his tears and the droplets of water fastened he was shocked; his mind went blank as he saw her body laid down on the wet road, as the fresh cuts opened, raw blood started oozing out making its way like a stream does amidst of stones and gravel..he watched the scene in disbelief and as if the team around them had stopped, his mind went blank, his heart utterly shocked, and he himself numb...he rushed towards her, took her head in the lap and started patting her cheeks with one hand and tried to stop the blood with the other. He started patting her as she was slowly and gradually loosing Sher conciousness, his eyes grew teary, he panicked now, the fear of loosing her was at peak in his head; millions of emotions were rushing down but right now, reaching to the hospital and keeping her awake was more important to him, than even himself....with blood coated hands he called his friend Aayush who apparently worked at nearby office to come as soon as possible and all he could say to her,

"Raa...RAAVIII...UTTH...UTTHNAAA...DEKH....DEKH....IDHARRR....RRRAAVVIIII...AANKHE...AANKHE KHULI RAKH...MAI...MAI FIRSE..."

And she cutted him in middle but stumbling and her voice so much breaking,she said..."SHI..SHII..SHIVAA...MERI...MERI MANNAT PU...PURI HO..HOGAI...PAN...PAN AAD..AADHI HI...AUR...AURR...AADHHI...TE...TERI...TUJ...TUJHE AB...ME...MERE...SE CHUT...KARA...(she was struggling to breathe as she was speaking but she still managed to complete the sentence)....SHI...SHIVAA..MAI...MAI BURI...BURI..NAHI HU...MAI...MAI TUJHE...Pas....TU...TU BHI...(her eyes shutting down as she was loosing her conciousness)

He again tried and tried patting her cheeks which once he had caressed when he gently slapped to kill the mosquito which sat on her face;the memories of her with him, how much he have been yearing for but not like this; he again said,

"RAA...RAAVI UTH, UTH MAI VOH GAANA FIR..FIRSE BHUL GAYA...KYA..KYA THA VOH...AAKHRI BAAR BATAA....BATAAA NA CHIPKALIIIII"

Him saying 'Chipkali', still made her heart flutter though her beats were slowing down...she managed to say..."Har..har..ghadi badal rahi..hai roop...zindagi...chaav hai...kahi...kahi hai...dhoop zindagi...SHI...SHIIVVAAA MAI...MAI TERE...LIYE...JE..JEENA CHAHTI THI....PAR VOH...NA SAHI...AAJ UPAR...PARCEL...HOJAUNGI......"

"CHUP....TU...TUJHE KUCH NAI HONE DUNGA....AUR ABHI TOH TUJHE AUR LADAI KARNI HAI...YEH...YEH LE..(grabs her hand and starts slapping himself with her hand)...MAI BOHOT BADA GADHEDA HOON NA LE...AUR THAPPAD MAARR....TU ESE CHODKE NAI JA SAKTI CHIPKALI...AANKHE...AANKHE KHULI RAKH...."

Shiva made sure that she stayed awake on their way towards hospital....as he carried her in his arms and rushed towards the hospital gate and then emergency center, hastily running...but maybe his heart beats were racing with his legs....the nurses took her in the OT along with doctors one or two, and he stayed there; alarmingly walking here and there...while Aayush informed the whereabouts of happening to Pandyas and filled the other necessary formalities.

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She was probably focused on a single thing i.e. to tell him how important he was for him and what value he held in her life was beyond anything he would have thought or what he would have predicted, she had very less tume and thus, she pushed him to the sideways and boom, she was hitted by the truck...now she fell...as she was struggling with everything, suddenly her eyes were blinking, it was all blurry now...she was able to see Shiva but she wasn't able to read his face now...she wanted to tell him and so she tried but she didn't knew if she told him whole thing what have been filled inside her or not; and then he started the old tactics which he did in khandar too, she knew that he was purposely asking her to sing for him but can she deny him?In even dreams also, never.As she was loosing consciousness , her eyes were blinking, struggling to keep eyes open or not but suddenly as she started feeling peace, a strange calming feeling which she never felt, it was soothing but he kept waking her and disturbing up that calmness she was feeling...and he wouldn't even let her be in peace, she thought to herself...the last thing she saw was him running as some people dragged her into a strange room, a big white light flashed on her face in that room of darkness with a weird smell...

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Shiva kept walking here and there,back and froth, he was growing more and more restless with passing seconds, each time a different thought stroke him,and one after other the thoughts lingering in a lineage forming a chain and some head-made scenarios,he shrugged his head as if dissenting to the scenarios...His sky blue check shirt, was half covered with blood, leaving stains there and also on his heart because the situation they have been into, the moment it could be when they would get each other or the next moment maybe...they can loose each other.But this time his heart was so firm that it did not let his insecurities and his mind thin of anything, it was then where his heart decided that HE CANNOT AFFORD TO LOOSE HER, NO MATTER WHAT, HE WOULD CHANGE BUT HE COULD NEVER LOOSE HER...it was as if he would lost himself, and she wasn't just anyone...neither a different person she was...she was part of him, and she always had been a part of her, she still is because she was the only one who understood that it was not him and it was the complex which he felt and it was his insecurities bubbled up, and she was courageous enough to confront him the same thing, and she always will stay a part of him....and maybe that was the only reason he was hurt; and after all somewhere, wasn't he also expecting that she might understand his actions....he did, he did expected this.

By the time he was sunk into his thoughts and his unseen turmoil and lineage of various inner fights; he failed to notice the family members had reached there and Aayush who had been calm enough to explain them the whole scenario because it was worthless for anyone to ask Shiva or argue with him right now, reason being...that he won't answer and would rather be silent as he always does and the other, that this all could be discussed later, Raavi's well being was the need of the hour....one hour and thirty nine minutes later, the doctor exited the room, carefully examining some reports; and all rushed to the doctor, but he stayed undisturbed,sitting on the chair...but the doctor was so flooded with everyone's question,...he just said, "Who is Shiva?"....and he stood up...the doctor said, "You should go inside, she kept repeating your name in state of consciousness".

He went in, his heart had skipped beats now, throbbing faster and faster as it can be.



I hope you guys like this, happy reading...I will try to update next part soon.

Edited by Iktara22 - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
#36

JANKKII THISS WAASS BEAUTIFULL ❤️

CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART. UPDATEEE SOON BB

BIG HUGSS🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Janudiii...i m so luckyyy that i read this sbse phele before u u upload it🤣but now whn i read it again my heart wretched from the coreee..

Shiva's fear of losing her love and her fear of not confessing ❤️😭... jaanniii please upload soonn...after wise i will hit u🤣

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Posted: 4 years ago
#38

JANUUUU THIS IS WONDERFUL im kaagaz BUT OMG I CANT WAIT JALDI KAR UPDATE

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Posted: 4 years ago
#39

Awesome 💞❤

Loved itt💞💞💥💥

Jaanuuuu plz upload next part ...💞❤

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: dejavuu

JANKKII THISS WAASS BEAUTIFULL ❤️

CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART. UPDATEEE SOON BB

BIG HUGSS🤗

Hey...Thankyouuu but i didn't recognise you lol please tell me

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