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Posted: 18 years ago

Originally posted by: patraj

Me first. Good chapter but Ajay nallavana? Kettavana?
As you know I really don't like Ajay 😡 and anything that would make him look bad makes me happy. Looks like there are going to be more twists and turns in this story. Keep it up Leena. 👍🏼

Can't wait for the next chapter.

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Pat

Same here Leena. Super work, I love the chapter. I hate this Ajay character as i really want to smack him and tie him up in a pole and make him swing around the pole until he learns his lesson soon 😆.

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Posted: 18 years ago
Great chapter Leena. I think Ajay will be a good one at the end, coz he stops his wedding with Deepa, right?
Deepa will decide to marry Ajay, without knowing the truth about Swetha, I wonder who is the father of her child? not Ajay I hope? 😆 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
Once again a nice chapter, Jiggly. Why would you think that you bore us with this story? It is way better than anything I've read recently and miles ahead of what any serial story writer can come up with. You write so well.

Please.. take as long as you want to finish this story.. no hurries to finish this off.. At the same time, you got me all excited about the new fan-fic you're writing.



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Posted: 18 years ago

thank you everyone for all your comments!😳😳

okay, my new fanfic will be on deepa & kailash as well. but i'll change their names. it'll be a love story cos i can't get enough of the meera & prajin romance. lols!😆😆😆

anyways, here's the latest chapter of my current fanfic.😉

CHAPTER 50

deepa was watching ajay's & kailash's arguments from the corner of her eye. they both looked annoyed & all of a sudden she saw ajay striding towards their table. he looked smug & confident. kailash on the other hand had a shocked expression on his face. deepa jumped back in surprise when ajay knelt in front of deepa. he took out a small brown box from his jeans pocket. he snapped it open it reveal a gorgeous solitaire diamond adorned with a graceful platinum band. "what are you doing ajay?" deepa asked him after getting over her momentary shock. "deepa, will you marry me?" ajay went in a very serious tone. deepa tried to look for hints of a trick but ajay was serious. dead serious. that whole hullabaloo had attracted the attention of the other patrons in the restaurant. they were all witnessing that spectacle with curiosity. one little boy started chanting "say yes! say yes!". soon the entire restaurant was urging deepa to say yes.

speechless with shock deepa just stared open mouthed at the ring. it was too much fro her to bear. kailash had come over & was openly staring at deepa, awaiting her reply with bated breath. "don't say yes deepa. please don't say yes." he prayed silently. deepa's face looked panic stricken. she was about to burst into tears. kailash saw her glance at him. he shook his head as to tell her to refuse the proposal. but deepa's eyes hardened & a determined look came into them, "yes I will marry you." deepa replied to the proposal, knocking the wind out of kailash. the entire restaurant burst into applause as ajay beamed proudly. "deepa was finally his. she is MINE!" he grinned at her. deepa smiled tightly & shot a look at kailash. she felt that he was finally getting a taste of his own medicine. kailash looked shattered. tears were streaming down his face as the realisation that he had lost deepa hit him like a ton of bricks. "why? why? WHY?" his heart screamed in agony. deepa was lost to him forever & it was mostlyhis fault. but what was kailash to do? he was compelled to hide the truth from deepa. he had never meant to hurt her. which man could hurt the woman he loved more than his life?

wiping his tears & hiding his sorrow, kailash got up & congratulated ajay & deepa. "congratulations ajay. you won." he told him sadly. "thanks man. now that deepa's & my marriage is almost fixed, let's all be friends. no hard feelings okay?" ajay joked, obviously on cloud nine after deepa's acceptance. "yes. let's all be friends. you're a lucky man ajay." kailash told him but looked at deepa. her soft eyes looked sad but she remained silent. kailash then moved on to her. "congratulations deepa." kailash's voice cracked with emotion. "thanks." deepa replied in an almost inaudible voice. her eyes sparkled with untold emotion & kailash felt like pulling him to her but alas she belonged to ajay now. after 15 torturous minutes, kailash took leave. he bid a sad farewell to the couple but not before ajay invited him to their pre-wedding party. kailash didn't know if ajay was purposely rubbing salt on his wounds or was he genuinely being nice. either way, kailash's pain didn't decrease. kailash agreed with a heavy heart & left the restaurant. deepa watched him leave & a tear crept out from the corner of her eyes. she quickly hid it before ajay could see it. deepa didn't want questions on why she was crying on looking at kailash leaving. "shall I call your parents?" ajay enquired later on in the evening. deepa nodded not even taking in a word he said. she thought about seeing kailash at the pre wedding party & her heart skipped a beat.

look out for the pre-wedding party.😃 there'll be some intense moments in it between deepa & kailash. comments & suggestions are welcome!

~ leena 😛

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Posted: 18 years ago

Me first I think. A very touching and sad episode. I could feel the emotions. Great work Leena. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Pat
Edited by patraj - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
me 2nd yeah!!!! No Deepa cant marry Ajay 😡 😡 😡 poor Kalish. Thx for sharing info on yr next story Leena.

Anyways, brilliant chapter Leena cant wait 4 da next.
Edited by usha_pooja - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
Leena, where are you sweetie? Waiting for the next chapter!
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Posted: 18 years ago

Originally posted by: patraj

Leena, where are you sweetie? Waiting for the next chapter!

i'm here pat! sorry, i was just writing out my latest chapter.😉 thanks for your comments & also thanks usha for your comments.😃

hey, how come lesser & lesser people seem to be reading my fanfic? has it become that boring?😆😆😆

anyways, for all those who still love my story, here is my chapter 51.😊

CHAPTER 51

the pre wedding party was a grand affair. the celebrations were really going in full swing. ajay huge mansion was adorned with all sorts of decorations & people were all streaming in dressed in flashy clothes. kailash had half a mind to turn back & leave but ajay spotted him before he could make his escape. kailash sighed inwardly & forced a smile upon his face & strode towards him. "wow man! you look great!" ajay complimented him. kailash smiled in reply not saying anything. kailash was wearing a collared black polo shirt & a pair of dark blue jeans. he looked simple yet dashing. ajay on the other hand was decked out in a flashy gold kurta. kailash felt that it was a little too filmy & flashy for a pre wedding party but thought that the rest of the guests were also decked out that way. "it must be a way of the rich." he thought to himself as he followed ajay into the brightly lit living area.

kailash had to admit that he was feeling a tad too underdressed for the occasion. he could see designer suits & saris everywhere he turned. the other guests gave him polite nods as ajay introduced them to him but kailash saw the coldness beneath all their eyes. they all had their own agenda to be at the party. it was just but another business deal for them. kailash thanked god that he wasn't like those cold heartless elites. "kailash, you haven't met the most important person in the party. come let's go meet deepa!" ajay brought kailash to a room. the door was ajar & ajay rapped it lightly. "come in!" said that soft voice that sent shivers down kailash's spine. ajay pushed open the door to reveal deepa sitting at the dressing table, still only half ready.

"ajay.. I need to talk to you.. it's about.." deepa paused abruptly as she spotted kailash standing beside ajay. he looked cute in his simple classy ensemble & deepa realised that she's been staring at him through the mirror & caught herself before ajay saw that slip. kailash on other hand was openly admiring deepa. unlike the other women in the party who were decked out in gaudy saris or gagra cholis, deepa was dressed in a sweet dark red sari. matching jewellery adorned her neck & ears. ajay let out a whistle when he saw deepa, kailash almost did the same but stopped himself in the nick of the time. deepa was looking stunning that day & kailash fought down the urge to kiss deepa. she was looking just too pretty that day.

"you look beautiful!" ajay walked up & hugged deepa lightly. he was besotted with the woman in front of him. deepa was the perfect girl for him & he felt like he was the luckiest man in the world because deepa had agreed to marry him. he bent down to kiss deepa & she pushed him away. ajay thought it was because kailash was in the room but it was also because deepa didn't want to kiss ajay in the first place. deepa was trying to put on some bangles but they wouldn't fit through her hands. "here let me try!" ajay volunteered brightly.

but as deepa held out the bangles, ajay's cell shrieked to life & he had to rush away to attend an important phone call. due to his rush, ajay had forgotten that kailash was in the room. he had unknowingly left deepa & kailash in a private place. deepa not wanting to face kailash, turned away & tried to put the bangles on herself. "ouch!" she yelped in pain as the glass scraped her hand. kailash was by her side in a moment. he took her hand without a word & dabbed the cut lightly with his handkerchief. he then placed the hanky on the dressing table & took the bangles. deepa was shocked as he slipped them on one by one without any trouble. he didn't force or hurt her in anyway.

"all done." he told her softly as he slipped the last bangle on. deepa looked up into kailash's face. the intensity in his eyes made her heart skip uncontrollably. she saw passion, love, sorrow & most of all pain evident in kailash's dark eyes. the pain that she had caused him. kailash was overwhelmed at the moment. he felt tears stinging his eyes when deepa looked into his eyes. he knew that she could see all his emotions & pain through them. she gave him that searching look. the look that made kailash want to reach out & scoop her into his arms.

deepa was heart achingly delicate & sweet but she wasn't his. "she isn't mine." kailash thought bitterly for the millionth time. "deepa.. deepa? are you still here?" ajay's voice came from the hallway. kailash immediately moved away from deepa & took his place near the door. "ohh kailash! you're here eh? wow deepa! you managed to put on the bangles by yourself?" he asked her enthusiastically. deepa nodded her answer but her eyes remained locked onto kailash's for a few seconds. she then looked away, took ajay's arm & strode out of the room. kailash stood in the silent room for a while, gathering up his scattered thoughts. then he spun around & followed the couple down to the cheerful living room.

hope this chapter was like i promised it would be.😉 comments & suggestions are welcome!

~ leena 😛

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Posted: 18 years ago
love the chapter leena buddy. It's kool lets hope Deepa ditches Ajay the sly soon!!!!!!. Great work leena. 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
Oh yeah 4got Im first YIPEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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