A LOVE STORY - JODHI DRABBLE - Page 5

Originally posted by: vishesh_Tippani

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It's super hot.
I don't knw how u hv emerged with such an exceptional piece of writing😳... thou at some point I was unable to understand what's happening... bt ur description of feelings behind both d characters were awesome.
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told u i have messed up in the end 😆 That to royally...

Originally posted by: sam_premc

no comments!☺️you know what made me say this!!

the missing kiss's story!☺️

wow what a comment... *rolling my eyes* 🤣

Originally posted by: arviabhigya

Firstly I m glad u decided to write a drabble on Jodhi especially on the terrace part, cz it was much needed😊

With the incredible pace the episodic was moving in, it was hard to make sense of the storytellying. But fortunately ur drabble provided just that adding depth to our favorite scene👏❤️

Fabulous drabble❤️❤️

Loved the first part where u are describing Jodhi's emotions and thoughts😃Beautifully penned down👏👏👏

As I mentioned earlier, it added to the depth of the scene😳

From the way u described Josy's thoughts to the part where he senses her presence to the part where Riddhi looks at Jossy's features, every description was beautifulEspecially that part about the description of the eyes which change shades with different emotions😳

Absolutely loved those few lines❤️

And that part where she wants to run away seeing him stare at her with such intensity was

Then the last part was☺️

I also liked how u described their emotions😆

But the best part was when both of them say that they love each other and they are not letting go🤗That one dialogue signifying their love for each other and faith in their love.

It sort of added more intensity and passion, to the entire scene and their story

All in all, perfect yaar Mansi🤗❤️

☺️ m glad it came out some good... because i was hopeless and i still think it could hav been better

Originally posted by: mansi_as18

☺️ m glad it came out some good... because i was hopeless and i still think it could hav been better

Originally posted by: arviabhigya

itni self-critical😆😆 feel like I m talking to some accomplished author😳 well looks like r writer saahiba has matured😉

well yesterday was reading lbld and was laughing at myself how i didnt put much thought writting the feelings than dialogues... so yeah... actually i dont call it getting mature.. it may be another phase of mine, pressing over feelings more than the dialogues... 😆 m far from word accomplished 🤣 but thats nice to hear though😉

waise I like the fact that u write feelings more than d dialogues😉

Originally posted by: arviabhigya

waise I like the fact that u write feelings more than d dialogues😉

it conveys much more.

anyway u r not a scriptwriter for a serial but an author so it makes sense

i prefer feelings and thoughts over dialogues😉

same pinch... me too 😆

Hii mansi 😊

Originally posted by: Anmol333

Hii mansi😊

Sorry mujhe ye pehle mention Karna tha...

No one hate your story if some one do...

Toh use jine ka koi haq nhi hai... Mar jaana chaiye un logon ko or nhi mare toh tumhari fan girl ( main ) pakka maar dungi don't worry 😉🤣

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Originally posted by: mansi_as18

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