As promised sone se pehle comment..😆
Well...amazing start...niks...it was simply awesome..
The starting scene was described very well...that...awkward moment when kabir stopped in mid way ...and didn't hugged nisha...although its a natural thing...but u described it in a very beautiful manner...I swear while reading it..I feel like that I am watching a movie..and it shows the high quality i
Of your writing skills...
Then it was shown that kabir and nisha both have forgotten about the childhood memories...well this was completely logical and I loved it ...it could have been made...dramatic...and illogical like the daily soaps do...but u chose a logical and realistic scene...so extra claps for that..👏👏
I am eager to know about their university applications... My sixth sense says...that both will get admission into the same college
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The way u introduced each and every character with the flow of story was the major highlight for me...usually it is observed that intro is done separately...and it distrupts the flow of the storyline but I must say that u simply nailed..it...not only intro...but also the history...and relationship of each character was described with perfection and along with that the pace of the story was very good. So well done.
I liked the joke which Ritesh crack...its really difficult to produce these kind of light hearted moments when we r writing a Indian family story...in English coz...these kind of moments can be felt better in Hindi...but the way u did that was extraordinary... It was real funny cute and I was able to connect with the moment.
Dolly - Kabir convo was funny and nicely written...
The family scene was described very well...
Nice to see all the characters positive... (I think that's the USP of ur stories)
Waiting for kirti's entry...
And the upcoming stay of the group.
Overall a excellent update ..
Loved reading it...
Continue soon...
Edited by Sarthak0302 - 9 years ago
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