*NiBir TS-My Angel's Day* part 2-page 6

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mishrialways

@mishrialways

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+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#51

vaishu

firstly srry

i dont know teri yeh story mujhse miss ho gyi kaise patata nhi

read both teh parts and it was wonderful

kabir the k king becomes all silent in front on nishu

love at first sight hayyee

nishu's pov he will not let me fall so much trust

nishu somewhere knew ki kabir too loves her

the proposal was amazing love the words

and the hug and kiss full of love

good one vaishu

thanks fr pm

ritika

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shrutigaur37

@shrutigaur37

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Posted: 9 years ago

#52

it was so so so beautiful..
nibir finally confessed dere feelings..
superb..

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Niharika

@Niha0606

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Posted: 9 years ago

#53

awww loved it to the core vaishu😃

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#54

Haww! How did I miss this story? 😲

Anyways wil comment now 😆

Chap 1:

Such a lovely start!

You described the scene that captured both their attention so nicely! ; Nisha admiring the scenic view and Kabir admiring his angel's view 😳

The flashback was written really well!

Nisha welcomed by a hit from Kabir's volleyball and she yelling at him was so cute 😆

Kabir being spellbound on seeing her was portrayed well 👍🏼

Their interaction in the medical room, his genuine apology, her ddlj dialogue 😆, the start of their friendship and he doubting about her feelings for him were all adorable moments!

The Kabir writing his diary scene was really nice! You showed his nervousness and determination to confess his feelings for Nisha at any cost very well!

Chap 2:

Another cute update!

Nisha being angry on Kabir for coming late on her birthday, but melting the moment she sees the chocolates he brought and him apologising in his typical cute way and asking her to come to the beach were all such sweet moments 😳

Nisha's hurt when her parents didn't call to wish her was again, well portrayed!

The following KN scene was so dreamy

Nisha mesmerised by the arrangements Kabir has done for her and Kabir being mesmerised by the beauty in white in front of him, an emotional Nisha asking him why does he do so much for her, him replying that she is special, were wonderful!

The proposal and the last kiss made me go awww at them!

Liked how you kept changing from first person to third person narrative throughout. It gives a nice feel and we can read both the character's and the narration at the same time 👍🏼

Is there a third part? If yes please continue soon 😊

P.S: sorry for the late comment Vaishu, don't know how I missed your story before 😔

Edited by .vishrutha. - 9 years ago

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Nimisha

@itznimi003

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+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Superb update vaissy😊
Kabir late aaya...😉
Nisha gussa h but kabir ne use mana hi lia
Chocolates❤️
Nisha k parents ne use call nhi kia... 😭
Kabir nishu ko propose karne wala h😊

I stepped down my car and walked to the beach what I saw there was mesmerizing I love this beach It's always beautiful but today it looks enchanting
The sky was covered with beautiful orange sun rays which reflected in the vast endless sea the sea waves crashed against the rocks while there stood four pillars on the ground covered with beautiful white n pink cloth the cold winds carried the sweet fragrance of those beautiful red roses and the dimly lit candles and the soft music made the ambiance more romantic
I was admiring the beauty of the place

@pink vaissy tu hmesha apne BG description se mujhe chauka deti h yr...beautifully described 👏 👏

Kabir bechara nervous h...😊

Nibir's POV was written superbly 👏

Finally kabir ne propose kar hi dia

Der kiss❤️

Loved it❤️

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vaishnavi

@crazyvaishu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: Niya_789

Hayee kya update tha😳
I know how Nisha must be feeling😆
Continue soon😳

thank you behna 😆

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vaishnavi

@crazyvaishu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: mansi_as18
Awww... hubby chooo cute 😳

thank you wifey

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vaishnavi

@crazyvaishu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: Amina...
Awesome👏👏👏
Loved it ...

thanx amina 😊

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vaishnavi

@crazyvaishu

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: sujoyricky
Exams ke beech mai updates vo bhi padhku vaishu se 😲 i am shocked 🤣
Love buds bhi karde meri maa 😆
Superb update 👏
I loved it
Nisha angry on kabir 😆 then kabir manofying nisha 😳
Nisha's parents ignored her 😡
Proposed scene was lovely 😳 😳 😳
Nibir 😳
I loved it

But i have a question yeh two shots hai ya three shots 😆
Thanks for pm

jab time milega kar dungi
abhi tak two shots h koi aur idea aaya to three shots bana dungi

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vaishnavi

@crazyvaishu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: mishrialways
vaishu
firstly srry
i dont know teri yeh story mujhse miss ho gyi kaise patata nhi
read both teh parts and it was wonderful
kabir the k king becomes all silent in front on nishu
love at first sight hayyee
nishu's pov he will not let me fall so much trust
nishu somewhere knew ki kabir too loves her

the proposal was amazing love the words
and the hug and kiss full of love
good one vaishu
thanks fr pm
ritika

it's ok ritu it happens 😊
thank you 🤗