*NiBir TS-My Angel's Day* part 2-page 6 - Page 7

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Posted: 9 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: Niha0606

awww loved it to the core vaishu😃

👏

massi maa 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: shrutigaur37

it was so so so beautiful..
nibir finally confessed dere feelings..
superb..

thank you shruti 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thank you anshu 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: .vishrutha.

Haww! How did I miss this story?😲

Anyways wil comment now😆

Chap 1:
Such a lovely start!
You described the scene that captured both their attention so nicely! ; Nisha admiring the scenic view and Kabir admiring his angel's view😳
The flashback was written really well!
Nisha welcomed by a hit from Kabir's volleyball and she yelling at him was so cute😆
Kabir being spellbound on seeing her was portrayed well👍🏼
Their interaction in the medical room, his genuine apology, her ddlj dialogue😆, the start of their friendship and he doubting about her feelings for him were all adorable moments!
The Kabir writing his diary scene was really nice! You showed his nervousness and determination to confess his feelings for Nisha at any cost very well!

Chap 2:
Another cute update!
Nisha being angry on Kabir for coming late on her birthday, but melting the moment she sees the chocolates he brought and him apologising in his typical cute way and asking her to come to the beach were all such sweet moments😳
Nisha's hurt when her parents didn't call to wish her was again, well portrayed!
The following KN scene was so dreamy
Nisha mesmerised by the arrangements Kabir has done for her and Kabir being mesmerised by the beauty in white in front of him, an emotional Nisha asking him why does he do so much for her, him replying that she is special, were wonderful!
The proposal and the last kiss made me go awww at them!
Liked how you kept changing from first person to third person narrative throughout. It gives a nice feel and we can read both the character's and the narration at the same time 👍🏼
Is there a third part? If yes please continue soon😊

P.S: sorry for the late comment Vaishu, don't know how I missed your story before😔

awww thank you so so so so much Vishru 🤗
your comment always makes me simle 😊
I haven't yet decided about the third part if I came across any idea I will make this three shot
about your p.s. it's ok it happens 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#65

Originally posted by: itznimi003

Superb update vaissy😊
Kabir late aaya...😉
Nisha gussa h but kabir ne use mana hi lia
Chocolates❤️
Nisha k parents ne use call nhi kia... 😭
Kabir nishu ko propose karne wala h😊

I stepped down my car and walked to the beach what I saw there was mesmerizing I love this beach It's always beautiful but today it looks enchanting
The sky was covered with beautiful orange sun rays which reflected in the vast endless sea the sea waves crashed against the rocks while there stood four pillars on the ground covered with beautiful white n pink cloth the cold winds carried the sweet fragrance of those beautiful red roses and the dimly lit candles and the soft music made the ambiance more romantic
I was admiring the beauty of the place


@pink vaissy tu hmesha apne BG description se mujhe chauka deti h yr...beautifully described 👏 👏

Kabir bechara nervous h...😊

Nibir's POV was written superbly 👏

Finally kabir ne propose kar hi dia

Der kiss❤️

Loved it❤️

awww thank you niju 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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awesome update ... finally both confessed it was beautiful 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: poornima_15

awesome update ... finally both confessed it was beautiful 😊

thank you poornima 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#68
Sooo sooo cute vaishuu
Just lloved it 😃
Kabira KO love at first sight 😉
Sooo beautiful it was 😳

Part 2
Nishu ka bday 😊
Kabira ka cu e face 😆
Their love 😳
Kabiras confession 😳😳😳
So beautifully written 😳
Nisha ka reaction 😲😲😲
Bad I brave ho GI ha 😆😆
But that was ☺️
Sooo superb one
Loved it 😳😳😳
Sorry for late 😃
Posted: 9 years ago
#69
I always say vaishu...
Tu background mast describes karti h 😳
Nisha was adoring nature n kabir was adoring her
Awww
Love at first sight kabir 😉
The flashback... Hamara ladaku viman kabir pe crash hua 😈🤣 uski bolti bandh kar di 🤣
Nishu ka bday h!!! Kabir planning to propose her 😳
Excited to read next 😉
Edited by RoshniVdian786 - 9 years ago
Posted: 9 years ago
#70
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Part 2
Nisha was angry.. As he was late...
Kabir ki cute antics b kam na ayi but chocolates... 😃
Chocolates ne sab sambhal liya 😉
Nisha's weakness n kabir strength 😈🤣
That sorry note inside awww 😳
Beach me invite kiya nishu ko 😳
I think kuch spl hi plan kiya hoga 😉
Nisha getting ready... Mom dad ka phone b nai aya ek b bar 😲
So sad 😕
Kabir is determined to tell her his feelings yet nervous 😃
Loved his impatience 😳
Nisha loved the view... The decoration n all... 😊
Cake cutting on beach ... So romantic yar
Finally he confessed...
Nibir hug ❤️
Kissi ☺️
Awesome story vaishu 👍🏼
Do write more...
Edited by RoshniVdian786 - 9 years ago

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