Nibir ff - Mystery( part 9 updated on page 58)

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Sameeha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#311

Hi sarthak it was amazing but i think u shud describe suspect's emotions like wat they r thinking or wat is der condition during the investigation...leaving that it is superb pls keep writing..sry if u felt bad,me pointing out ur mistakes..

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shreya52

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Posted: 9 years ago

#312

Mind blowing update
Please update next part soon

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Piya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#313

Happy republic day to u

Am so so happy that u updated

This myster is getting more mesterious

Am so loving it

Pls pls continue it

I hope u will definitely get good responses

Edited by Piya1199 - 9 years ago

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.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#314

Interesting update!

So priya was made to ingest rohypnol. Since its a prescription-only drug I feel someone with authority is involved.

Liked the interaction b/w the team.

The interrogation was good too but I feel you could have split the four and made them interrogate different people instead of all four interrogating the same person at a time. In that way they could question more people and get to know more info. It would be nice if you could elaborate the interrogation so that the reader gets more clarity of the interrogatee's perspective.

Good pacing of the story.

Over all very nice update.

Please continue soon and thanks for pm

Happy Republic day to you too 😊

Edited by vishruthaLN - 9 years ago

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Anmol

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Posted: 9 years ago

#315

Superb update 👍🏼

Loved ❤️ it

Please Continue soon 😊

Thanks for PM 😳

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Sarthak

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Posted: 9 years ago

#316

Originally posted by: Sameeha151
Hi sarthak it was amazing but i think u shud describe suspect's emotions like wat they r thinking or wat is der condition during the investigation...leaving that it is superb pls keep writing..sry if u felt bad,me pointing out ur mistakes..

no I don't feel bad at criticism actually it feels good that people r thinking so much and reading the story so attentively.

But what u pointed out is wrong because there is no suspect its just a mystery man...so jiska impersonation nahi hua uske emotions describe nahi ho sakte😆

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sujay kumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

#317

Awesome update sarthak 👏
Ismai bhi priya 😭 😭
Thanks for pm

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Sarthak

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Posted: 9 years ago

#318

Originally posted by: vishruthaLN
Interesting update!
So priya was made to ingest rohypnol. Since its a prescription-only drug I feel someone with authority is involved.
Liked the interaction b/w the team.
The interrogation was good too but I feel you could have split the four and made them interrogate different people instead of all four interrogating the same person at a time. In that way they could question more people and get to know more info. It would be nice if you could elaborate the interrogation so that the reader gets more clarity of the interrogatee's perspective.
Good pacing of the story.
Over all very nice update.
Please continue soon and thanks for pm
Happy Republic day to you too 😊

hmm...thanks for pointing out...I was also thinking the same...😃