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Posted: 10 years ago
Anu u did it again yaar... Superb scene...loved it to the core... Super... Loved how u described Nisha's nightmare.. And rn scene... Loved it... Superb...
Ab mera kya hoga... U have raised the bar yaar...
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Posted: 10 years ago
chp 8 review:

This may be a bit sadistic of me, but I always yearned to see a scene of a broken down Ramy. Not in terms of his own life, but in terms of Nisha's life and I'm glad I got to see it in this fic. Well written Anu. I love how Laxmi attempted to sooth him but when Nisha came, he almost exploded. Although I do wish he had exploded on her more, I understand that it would've been counter-productive as it would've alienated Nisha even more.

Speaking of whom, wonderful job in pinning down her emotions. Love love the scene where she just breaks down and talks about how all her decisions backfired. I think that sort of thinking pattern was exactly what the CVs were assuming Nisha was thinking whenever she agreed to any marriage in NAUC, but it's nice to see it written out. Gives much more clarity to the situations and her decisions. Very believable. And that end scene with Ramy hugging her securely and Laxmi stroking her hair in a calming manner was sweet.

LOL man reading these fics is so bittersweet because they cloud my memories of NAUC -- I start thinking that what's written in thse joint fics is what actually happened on the show! It's a compliment btw 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
chp 9:

so the dichotomy between the moods in this chapter and the previous chapter was a little jarring to be honest. We went from sad to almost happy. Perhaps I'm reading it wrongly.

But I did enjoy Laxmi's small monologue. I always love hearing Laxmi's thoughts.

And now to her nightmare. I was wondering, did you purposely draw a parallel between this media/Viraj situation and her pilani incident? Because the two dreams started out quite similarly -- Nisha in ponytail surrounded by white curtains. Perhaps it was an unconscious thing? Or perhaps it was you just using a basic nightmare frame to describe a nightmare? Not sure, either way, I found it very interesting and intriquing. I especially liked the bit where some guy came and applied some sindoor to her maang (as I had just finished watching some anime, in my head, the guy was faceless--- making the scene even more darker/ scarier 😆 ). Clearly she's not ready for marriage and I'm glad she subconsciously/ perhaps consciously recognizes it.

The RN bit was cute as always. Im glad Ramy has gotten his determination back. Good chapter!
Edited by lovely_lady - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Guys sorry yaar.. I know this part is blah but i wrote it in a hurry and didnt proof read it too..
Thanks to shweta for bearing my torture and helping me out to write this one.. 😆
Thank u so much shweta..

Part 10

She woke up that morning with the memories of last night. She turned a bit saw her father and mother besides her bed sleeping with their head on the cot. She smiled a little seeing them. No matter how much she messes up they always help her out. The night was stressful to them as it was to her. She felt sad that her problems always affect them. She saw her mother stirring. "Nishu, u woke up.. Are u fine??" Lakshmi asked. Nisha smiled. "Lakshmi relax me I am fine now lets wake papa up" she said. "Papa utho.."" Sone do Nishu"ramesh mumbled. "Now only one way is left" she smiled wickedly. "What Nishu" lakshmi asked. "Wait ma. See the action". Nisha picked up her dirty socks and placed it near Ramesh's nose. " Nishu" he screamed and woke up. Nisha and lakshmi broke into laughter. Ramesh looked at her and smiled. She was again putting up a facade for their sake. "What are u looking at papa??" Ramesh just shook his head and said "nothing beta. You freshen up. We are going to our room" he said and left with Lakshmi.

Nisha closed the door and dropped her fake smile. She was putting up a facade in front of
her parents. She knew they are hurt and she did not want to hurt them more. She picked up
her clothes and went to freshen up. She came back wearing a long kurta with a jeans. She was applying kaajal when she saw herself in the mirror.


She was standing in front of the mirror. She wasn't able to recognise herself. Was this the same Nisha Gangwal who never cared about what people thought about her?? Was this the same Nisha who took up the blames for her cousins' mistakes and never cared?? What was her fault that she was being punished so harshly??? She stared at her reflection in the mirror. This was not the Nisha Gangwal she knew.. This was someone else. Maybe this was her mistake. Maybe everything will be fine if she becomes the old Nisha.. She will become the old nisha again she decided. She took a tissue and wiped our her kaajal lipstick and the light makeup she had put on. Her skin became red coz of the wiping. She then took a pair of scissors and cut her hair short. She moved to the cupboard and took her old clothes and moved to change.
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Some argument was doing on when she came out of her room. She could hear virendra tauji
furiously arguing with Ramesh. She stopped a little when she was in the steps closed her
eyes and took a deep breath. You can do it Nishu. You are strong. You have to be strong for
ma papa and your cousins she kept repeating in her head. She knew what will happen when she
reaches downstairs and she was preparing herself for it. She opened her eyes and went
down.

She felt her family member's eyes on her. She saw her cousins confused and her parents
worried. She saw Rupan taiji and virendra tauji shaking their heads in disgust at her attire. She was wearing her old torn jeans, black t shirt and her red checked button down shirt on top."What are u wearing nisha?? You want to cut our nose in ur sasural??" Viren spat out in disgust. " you have started your drama again. Pls have some mercy on us. What will the boy's family think if they seeing u in this attire?? Atleast think of your cousins. Already You have brought a bad name for the family and now this?? How will my daughters get married if it goes on like this". "Bhabhi please stop it" ramesh intervened. He knew nisha was putting up a facade of being strong and this attire was sort of a defense mechanism for her . He did not want anymore discussion on the topic." Rehne de Ramesh this is all happening because of your freedom. Your daughter is spoiling the family name coz of you. Our family name is being butchered in the media." Viren said. "Bhaiya the media is no longer waiting in front of our house. The news was hyped by media.Now they got another news so they disappeared.For that fake news we can't do injustice to
our daughter" ramesh said. " The family should not pay for your daughter's mistake chote. This matter has reached Dolly's sasural. Leelaji called today. She was taunting me about our upbringing. Nisha should have been taught a lesson when she was caught in the terrace with her boyfriend. The matter would not have escalated to this extent." "Bhaiya why are u bringing in that??? There is no connection between these two matters" Ramesh replied." Ramesh this in what encouraging nisha to do mistakes. Had she been punished earlier she wouldn't have made this mistake" viren said angrily. Dolly was feeling guilty that her sister was paying for her mistake. She decided she will tell the truth. She came forward held nisha's hands and started "papa pls dont blame nisha without knowing the truth.."Dolly was cut off by viren" Did u see that chote??? Did u see dolly talking back?? This is all coz of ur kids. Our kids are getting spoiled coz of u kids". " I always used to say ramesh and his kids are spoiling our kids but no one agreed. This is all because of ramesh and his upbringing" said rupan. "Enough" shouted nisha. She could bear people talking about her but not about her parents. "Taiji why are u dragging papa in this??" Nisha questioned. " nisha u keep quiet. U have already spoilt the family name and now this??? U know the you are going to get married and u are dressing up like this?"Rupan said. " taiji I don't know why u are making a mountain out of a molehill. This is the way I dress up and u all are acting as if u ate seeing me for the first time. This is nisha and if u are not comfortable with my dressing then its ur problem not mine.I will wear what I want.This is my life and not yours and stop blaming my father for everything that happens in this house" nisha said furiously. "And tauji about leela aunty at least I am not asking money from my samdhis and enjoying it. Another thing though my dad has never said anything, we all know what happens in the shop" nisha said. She then turned and angrily went towards the room and shut the door with a bang. Dolly then came forward and started calmly "papa you blamed Nisha for the terrace incident right?? so let me tell you the truth.That day in terrace it was me with sumit not nisha with her boyfriend. Nisha took the blame for me and do you know why I didn't tell u?? It was because i was scared of u.Today i am telling this to u coz i dont want to become like u and do what u did with chachu with nisha. I am sorry papa but i am with nisha in this"and left to her room. The cousins Ramesh and Lakshmi left with her leaving behind a stunned viren and Rupan.

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Edited by Teogapi - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
I already told you...Great part yar...😊 Superb as usual.
So old Nisha is back..Or say Nishu bro is back..😆

You missed out on RLs thoughts yar...😆 No problem...I'll cover up...😉😆

Great part as usual...Loved the media bit especilly.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Shwets1502

I already told you...Great part yar...😊 Superb as usual.

So old Nisha is back..Or say Nishu bro is back..😆

You missed out on RLs thoughts yar...😆 No problem...I'll cover up...😉😆

Great part as usual...Loved the media bit especilly.

i know.. but i felt ki i will mess up rl for sure so isse acha i will leave it..😆
thanks to u for bearing my torture..😆
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Teogapi

i know.. but i felt ki i will mess up rl for sure so isse acha i will leave it..😆

thanks to u for bearing my torture..😆


Arey...no torture and all yar...This SS is a JV...we have to help each other..😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
wow...how do u guyz use your words soo well...it's just amazing...can't describe...loved it
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Posted: 10 years ago
res😉

UNRES NO 12:😆

Chapter 8(By Anu):
Anu yaar...🤗 U r the bestest in portraying Emotional scenes 👏As I always says😊
This Chapter Made Me Cry yaar..😭😭😭😭 I was crying along with Ramy-Lekshmi & Nishu
Emotionally Connected to the Core😭😭😭😭 very well Written👏👏👏👏


"What right thing did I do?E-mailing my own boss pretending to be his friend?Loving him knowing that he would never accept me?What was right pappa?Disgracing my family?Every single time I took a decision,it brought only disgrace to the family...every single time you gave me freedom,I misused it...Dadaji gave me permission to join Lakshya Academy to mould a career for myself...to prove myself worthy...and what did I do?I proved myself unworthy."Nisha continued,her voice getting louder with each word she spoke.She no longer had the courage to look up .

"Everytime...every...single... time ...you had...you had to fight for me..p-pappa.I am a burden for ev-everyone.I disappointed everyone-dadaji,dadi,cousins,...maa..pappa...everyone.You were so disappointed by my actions that you didn't even attend my call...pappa."Nisha spoke in hushed tone between her sobs...Her voice was no longer audible as they were drowned by her own sobs.

"I d-don't want to do it anymore..."she stammered,gazing down.She wiped her tears and choked back her sobs. She could sense her parents looking at her with tears in their eyes.She couldn't look up at her parents.She knew she would give in to emotions and start crying again.

" I don't want to be a burden...so I am ready to marry...maybe that's the solution to all problems."she said.

@Red Loved each & every single word to the core👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

But all she could hear was her own sobs which she was trying hard to swallow.She felt her father's tight embrace -something which spoke a thousand words...that he will be there to protect her from everybody-even if that meant going against his dear ones...that it was she who mattered to him the most... She could feel her mother stroking her hair ...her mother who always cared for her...She hugged her father tightly and cried into his chest...She felt safe as houses in his arms...cause she knew...nowhere else in the world can she find an emotion as pure as her
parents' love for her.

@Bold Awieee Loved it Anu.. ❤️The strong bond b/w Nishu & Her Parents U described well👍🏼👏👏


Chapter 9 (By Anu)
Anu yaar ek baath poochu?? how do u do it yaar? 😲 I mean How cum u describe the pain so well dat it reaches straight to reader's heart👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Loved the way U described Nishu's Nightmares..👏👏👏 I felt Like I was simply watching it alive.. Ur words has so much Power yaar Anu👏👏👏👏👏👏

Loved Father- Daughter- Mother Trio light moments😳 The way Ramesh Assured Nisha Awieee Suprb.. Well Written...!!!!👏👏👏

My Favourite Part @RED Love it to the core...!!!
(Just Like Me I m also greedy 4 My Papa's Affection😳)

The one thing that she was always greedy for was her father's affection.His love for her was pure,unconditional and unfathomable.


Do write More...🤗 Q ki DMM😳😆🤣
Edited by SaruSenan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome update rema
It was awesome old nishu back
Family discussion was perfectly described
Rn supporting each other was so nice
Finally dolly speaking out truth was superb and revealing viren's lie in process was double superb

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