Revival : Conquering The Past - A Joint Venture updt scene 15 pg 41

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Shwetha

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Posted: 10 years ago

#101

@Saru Thanks a lot for your detailed view ya. Glad you liked it...😊

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Lekha

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Posted: 10 years ago

#102

The SS started of amazing...well done lachu👏

the second chp with focusing on nisha's fellings and thoughts were flawless...as usual...after all its u anu...awesome scene.👏

the third part was brought out so well...it had such a flow...DaRa Nisha's entry...its perfect.👏

waiting for next part.

hope my scene can stand up to yours.😳

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Shwetha

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Posted: 10 years ago

#103

Originally posted by: Echo.of.Hope
The SS started of amazing...well done lachu👏
the second chp with focusing on nisha's fellings and thoughts were flawless...as usual...after all its u anu...awesome scene.👏

the third part was brought out so well...it had such a flow...DaRa Nisha's entry...its perfect.👏

waiting for next part.

hope my scene can stand up to yours.😳

I am sure you will do really well ya...😊

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Shwetha

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Posted: 10 years ago

#104

Originally posted by: ...Shibu...
Amazing👍🏼
Loved d way Ramy stood 4 Nishu❤️

Thanks Shibu..😊

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blah-blah

@blah-blah

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Posted: 10 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: SaruSenan
unres😉😆

15th post I m unres ng Aftr my come back..😲Phewww😆🤣

First lemme give u a Clap👏 & a hug🤗 4 this thought... !!! We ll done yaarom👏👏👏
Another joint venture.. & Another plot... All the best wishes... 👍🏼Keep Writing more Q ki DMM😃

Read all 3 parts in a row...😉

I was just touched by each part... Each part was Emotionally filled & It really touched me..👏👏👏

Part 1 - Lachu

Liked the way u portrayed how society treat the victim without any mercy👏👏👏
They r only interested in blaming evnthough there is no fault at victim's part.. Sad But Truth😒

Nisha remembering the PC part was nicely written👏

Her father's defeated and broken look flashed before her eyes. Dadaji's state as he witnessed his family getting humiliated in front of the media. Her family and the trouble they had to go through.

These lines was too emotional yaar..😭 felt bad 4 Nisha..

Loved Nishu-Ramy Phone Convo..😊👍🏼
Father-Daughter Bond very well portrayed👏👏👏 Ramesh understands Nisha well...😳

Her voice cracked and she was finding it difficult to speak. Ramesh's heart fluttered thinking of Nisha's state. His daughter was trying hard to conceal her sorrow from him, he understood that much.

See this line proves My point..😊

A gud Update Lachu... 👏👏👏

Part 2 - Anu

As I always says "Anu U r best in writing emotional scenes..👍🏼 U play with words so well dat it wl directly get connected with reader's heart"👏

This part proves it once again...!!!!!😃

In ur part there were less dialogues But Yet it managed to give dat heart to heart connection yaar..
its Definitely Ur Talent & for dat extra clapsss👏

Nisha closed her eyes and tried to concentrate on something better...She tried to remember the smiling face of her father...her father who endured it all for her,her father who battled against the world for her.She tried to remember the cheerful yet tensed face of her mother...the sweet and simple soul who kept worrying about her ... whose sole mission in life was to see her happy...

She tried to remember the happy faces of her cousins who are the closest to her heart,the ones who understood her better than herself.She tried to remember the family members...the ones who supported her through her thick and thin.

Beautiful Yaar Anu... Juss Beautiful... Loved these lines 👍🏼
Nisha remembering her family & again remembering the PC & the whole frustations, Battle with her mind & brain all were excellently penned down..👏👏👏

She opened her eyes,only to see people staring at her...as if she was a criminal...as if she was at fault. She didn't wish to stay here any longer...she didn't want to become a ragdoll for everyone to play and tease...She wanted to get away from the prying eyes of the people...unnoticed...as soon as possible.

How helpless she wl be feeling dat time.. aww...😭 again I cud feel dat state yaar..👏👏👏
She is wandering for peace & every passing minute she feels so bad 4 herself & Nisha Gangwal feel ashamed of herself.. Aww..😭 Juss think A girl with so much self confidence & self proudness has been shattered... totally shattered...😭 & Anu portrayed it so well..👏

Last Nisha's outburst was soo... 👏👏👏 real & was gud👏👏👏

"YES I AM!!!I AM THE GIRL WHO WAS THERE IN THE PRESS CONFERENCE!"She shouted out ,her voice cracking due to the intensity...

This line frm Nisha made me more & more sad...😭😭😭

"I am sorry pappa..."she mumbled..."I am..."her voice trailed off...

Excellent writing Anu...👏👏👏

Part 3 - Shwetss

Another Emotional update...👏👏👏

The consequences of PC at GF was nicely showed by Shwetss👏👏👏
My fav part was Ramesh Supporting His Daughter & saying the right things to Viren & Dadaji..👏
I am quoting my fav part below as I cant chose any one in particular.. Loved all...👏👏👏

"NISHA IS THE VICTIM HERE!" countered Ramesh,

"She has been framed into all this. Don't you all see that? You all think Nisha wrote those mails to conspire against Viraj? To get back at him?" asked Ramesh bemused.

Ramesh ran his hand across his face desperately trying to keep his anger in check. "Yes! She loved Viraj...Is that wrong? She wrote those mails in innocence, to get closer to Viraj...to help him...

"I beg you all to please stop this..." pleaded Ramesh. "Nisha needs support now, at least from her family. She needs hands to help her stand and not feet to stamp her down even more..."

"So? What do you want to do Bauji?" asked Ramesh refusing to succumb. "Sacrifice Nisha so that your family name will be regained? Nisha is the daughter of this house...instead of thinking about her wellbeing...you are thinking about the family..."

"Then I don't need this identity...Nothing is more important to me than Nisha..." answered Ramesh with resolute.

"Bauji! " started Ramesh in a calm voice. "Nisha will come back only when she feels like it. I won't or let anyone force her to come back. She is my daughter...and I know what's good for her...If I cannot make decisions for my children in this house, then..." Ramesh left the sentence to be understood.

@Red Most Fav one...👏

I also liked the part where Nisha came & Ramesh gave her support & hw she jus slowly break down in his father's arms... 😭 how Beautifully U Wrote Shwetss.. Itss Juss PERFECT👏👏👏

Quoting again dat scenes..👏👏👏
"Nishu!" was the only thing he could get himself to speak. His shoulders drooped in resignation.
The moment the voice of her father reached her, she looked up to see worry written all over his face, concern visible in his body. She tried hard not to cry. She didn't want to break down in front of her family, in front of her father. She didn't want to show her pain and her struggle to anyone. But every step her father took to get to her, she could feel her defenses crumble.
Ramesh could see his daughter slowly breaking down. He could feel his own strength crumbling inside. The one thing he could never bear to see was his daughter in tears. He had failed to protect his daughter.
As soon as he reached her, Ramesh gathered Nisha in his arms. He could see his daughter had no strength left in her. She held him tight. She wanted to feel safe and no one apart from her father could make her feel that.
"Papa!" croaked Nisha.
"Ssshh!" silenced Ramesh. "Nothing happened. I am here with you. I won't let anything happen to you...Ok?' He put all his strength on those words.

@Red Literally I saw dat scene b4 my eyes...😭 Very well written👏👏👏

Last But Not Least Lekshmi's Outburst👏👏👏 It was essential..👏

"Bauji! Please...please try and understand. Nisha is not in a state to listen or talk. She needs support and strength. Yes. Whatever happened was bad. But Nisha is the one who is affected the most. You are all worried about the name Gangwal, please think about Nisha too. If you can't, at least leave her alone."

Lakshmi spoke politely, but her words and attitude sent out the message clearly. Unable to control her emotions seeing her daughter in this state, she started crying.

Well Wriiten Part👏👏👏

Do write more..🤗 Q ki DMM😳
Do PM me if possible..😳😊

Finally Finished with my Comment...😆 Nw going 4 Unres ng other posts..😆🤣

saru yaar!

i love you!!!🤗

i am really blessed that u read my works...

the way u analyse it...i am so glad yaar!

thanks a million times!

and a big hug!🤗

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Teogapi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#106

Part 4

Ramesh took Nisha to the hall in his portion of the house. He made her sit on the sofa and asked "Nishu, did u eat something??" Nisha was in a daze. She didn't respond. Ramesh kept a hand on her shoulder shook her slightly and called her again "Nishu.." "No" nisha jerked away his hand. She then realised she was in her house not in the bus stand. She looked at Ramesh and said "papa.." "Shh.. Don't say anything.. Did u eat something? I know u wouldn't have. I will bring haldi wala doodh for u" when he was about about to go Nisha's phone rang. She became tensed and pressed the loudspeaker button in a hurry. "Miss Gangwal we are calling u from ABC news.. We wanted to ask about your relationship with Mr. Viraj Singh Rathore and also about your past.." Ramesh intervened quicky and said " can u guys stop calling us" "but sir we want to know about miss gangwal and viraj" "why are you guys making my life hell...why can't u let me be in peace... Don't u dare call me again" screamed Nisha in anger and threw her phone against the wall.. The phone broke into pieces so did Nisha's confidence. She then let out a small sob. Ramesh was controlling himself. He didn't want to breakdown in front of his daughter. He had to be strong. He hugged Nisha. Nisha hugged him tightly and started wailing. "Papa bus stop... they were looking... sorry papa... brought a bad name.. Don't hate me please" she then broke the hug and looked at Ramesh and continued "papa u don't hate me right?... Please don't hate me papa... I am sorry" She then hugged him again.. Ramesh's heart broke to see her like this. He stroked her hairs to soothe her and he broke the hug. He cupped her face in his hands and said "Nishu, mera happy wala gana u really think I will hate u??" Nisha shook her head negatively."so why do u even ask such questions. Nishu nothing matters to me more than u kids. There is nothing that I love more than u guys. What ever happens u will have your parents with u. Remember that." Nisha looked up at Ramesh and smiled a little and said "thank u papa. And I am sorry that you have to face all this because of me. Those people are gossiping about me and our family. I don't know what to do.."Then don't do anything" Ramesh said. "Huh?" " Nisha do you remember what you said when I was worried for u when u took dolly's blame in the terrace?? You said it doesn't matter what others think about u. What u think about yourself matters the most. And we both know that u were not responsible for this mess. So wipe your tears and become my happy wala gana again. I will go and bring turmeric milk for u".

When he was about to go to the kitchen she held his finger. Ramesh turned and looked at her. Nisha was looking at her father with tears in her eyes. She just wanted him to be with her now. She believed her dad will make everything all right after all he was her superman. Ramesh understood what nisha was trying to do and smiled. He then made her stand up and walked her to her room with Nisha holding his finger all the while. They both entered the room which was dark except for the moonlight entering from the window. He made her lie down on the bed and sang stoking her hairs...

hmm hmm hmm
hmm hmm hmm hmm
aa ri aaja
nindiya tu
le chal kahin
udan khatoley mein
door door door
yahaan se door
aa ri aaja
nindiya tu
le chal kahin
udan khatole mein
door door door
yahaan se door
aa ri aaja

mera to ye jeewan tamaam
mere yaar bhara dukh se
par mujh ko jahaan mein mila
sukh kaun bada tujh se
tere liye meri jaan
zehr hazaar
main pee loonga
tajh doonga duniyaa
ek tere sang jee loonga
o nazar ke noor
aa ri aaja
nindiya tu
le chal kahin
udan khatoley mein
door door door
yahaan se door

He saw Nisha who was sleeping peacefully holding his finger. He remembered the first time she did that when she was a baby.. He used to sing lullaby for her and she used to sleep by clutching his finger in her palms. His little girl. Even now, for him, she is the same, his baby girl. He couldn't imagine people being harsh with her. Her breakdown today had broken him from inside. He then let the tears he was holding flow freely. He kissed her forehead and made a promise to himself that he will make everything all right now come whatsoever.he was determined to make everything all right and he will..

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blah-blah

@blah-blah

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Posted: 10 years ago

#107

awesome!👏

rema u knw to bring out that RN magic with words...

really nice yaar!👏

PS:and someone was saying that someone doesn't knw how to write😆😆😆

LLPOF😆😆😆

Edited by Anagha. - 10 years ago

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Lakshmi G Reghunath

@-Ila-

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Posted: 10 years ago

#108

How do u do it rema dii...RN were magical as usual

beautiful...especially the finger holding and lullaby part

...and Nisha's question if he hated her was heart wrenching...very well done rema dii..

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Teogapi

@Teogapi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: -Lachu-
How do u do it rema dii...RN were magical as usual
beautiful...especially the finger holding and lullaby part
...and Nisha's question if he hated her was heart wrenching...very well done rema dii..

thanks lachu... gaane ne bacha diya... its too short..mobile mein lamba dikha... 😆

Edited by Teogapi - 10 years ago