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lizzie1765

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: aru_86
dear don't think except ridzzi no one is excited for ur ff..the only thing is that you don't send pm so none is aware about ur update..
i read ur chapter 1 and promo and seriously you write very well..and enjoyed reading and worried about ginny's dream

thanks i got little emotional😆 . so you liked it😉 . the message of the dream😲 is there s a huge storm coming this is just the beginning... the statement😲 !!! it will rock the very foundation of ahuja n ahluwalia family !!! you will soon know ginny's dream !!!😉!

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lizzie1765

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Chapter 2 ( Kaisi ... Ye Kashmakash !!!!)

The Next Day ( Morning)

KING RANGERS SCHOOL , PUNE
rocky : ( siting in the clasroom & talking to ayush ) arey mohit kahaan hain subaah se usse dekha nahi ,mr shinde ki class mein bhi nahi tha ??
gokul ( comes to them) mohit aaj school nahin aaya ( tells them & sits besides rocky )
rocky : ( suprised ) par kyun ??
gokul: (confused) pata nahi yaar , kal mein usse baat kar raha tha , aur beech main usne phone call kat kar liya!!! ( getting irritated )
ayush:( confused look on his face ) strange ??
rocky : strange toh hai !! mohit aise kabhi nahi karta toh...(thinking )
ayush( cuts in & says) chodna rocky , i guess uske dad bula rahe the canada se !!!!!
rocky ( thinking & says , while gokul nodding in agreement ) haan yeh bhi sakta hai!!!

deepika(with raavi) : hi rocky !!
rocky& ayush ( gokul just smiles at them) : hi deepika ,hi raavi
deepika : guys tum log aa rahe ho na party ke liye , mere farmhouse par hai raat 7:00pm !!!
rocky & ayush: (smilingly):hum saab aayenge !!!
gokul:(nervous face ), raavi(asking with care ) kya hua gokul, any problem??
gokul: no, koi problem nahi hai ( fake sad smile)
students:good morining sir!!
(rocky,raavi &their friends take their seats)

raavi looking towards gokuls nervous face, he sees her & smiles (sadly)

raavi;(thinking) jarror kuch baat hai , par kya( confused) ??

AHLUWALIA HOUSE , PUNE

sweety: ( on phone) haan papaji ,aap aa rahe haina ??

papaji: haan puttar mein aa raha hoon. Sweety tum lucky ke saath uss business party mein jayo ,baccho ki fikar maat karo ( smilingly) .

sweety: theek hain papaji!!(smilingly) the door bell rings?.

Sweety:papaji mein aapse baad mein baat karti hoon, darwaze par pe koiaaya hain!!!

Sweety opens the door its lucky ji !!! lucky: hayee itni garmi hain !!!( says jokingly & sits on th sofa )

Sweety goes n gets a glass of water ... sweety ji tells lucky ji '..

Sweety: maine papaji se baat kar li hai , woh aa rahe hain !!!!! lucky: (smilingly ) challo accha hua papakji maan gayye !!!

The phone bell rings

Lucky : (picks up the phone ) hello lucky ahluwalia speaking ( happily) '..hello , hello ( confused face ) & puts the phone down

Sweety: lucky ji thode dino se ye wrong number bula raha hain !!( telling her husband)

Lucky: lagta hai koi apne rishtedaar ko bula raha hain , par number lag nahi raha hoga !! ( telling his wife sweety)

Sweety : haan ye bhi ho sakta hain ( thinking suspiciously ) .

Part 2 ends

Edited by lizzie1765 - 13 years ago

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Sadme-Me-Hu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Guys, why isn't there anyone reading FF and all in our forums? FF and all writing stuff will help our forum! Pls read and appreciate!

Amazing Lizzie, Looking interesting. Lets see how it goes along!

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Rumjhum Laha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

hey lizzie didn't update it since long..plus she didn't pm forum members so most members don't know about her ff

and i am missing this ff like hell plz lizzie come and update and also pm plz atleast we would have our nivi through ur ff coz show won't give that

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ABdaKriticizer

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

👍🏼 Initial chapters r brilliant. Looking forward for another one... Gud Job.

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lizzie1765

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

sorry😊 guys i m working like hell n office there was this project deadline , oh well just went through a heartbreak😭😭 so i was really upset dont worry guys i will continue with my FF😳😳 ( my project deadline is over😉 😆)
its going to be really 😳😳 interesting 😉

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lizzie1765

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Chapter 3

(Ye Lamhe)

Pune , Maharastra

The next morning in Pune

In an undisclosed location two people's shadow are seen talking to each other. The first person says:-

1^st person: tum ne sab imtezaam kar rakha hain (in a cold manner) .koi gadbad nahi honi chahiye .(says theartheninglyto the 2^nd person )

2^nd person says: haan, maine sab imtezaam kar diya hain .last time ke jaise koi gadbad nahi hogi .

1st person: good, very good (sly smile) (says to the 2^nd person) ab dekho main un logon ka kaisa haal banyoonguna. (Laughing loudly) the second person smiles evily.

xxx

Scene shifts to classroom full of students …..

ginny is in her social studies class. The teacher is going on about atmosphere& hemisphere .But like the rest of the students ginny is day dreaming. In ginny's dream:-

" There is a white flash where the teachers voice fades and in that white flash ginny hears a voice (bg tune…kaisa yeh raaz hai is going on ) ,mad person in white clothes banging his/her head , the mad person has blood all over his /her clothes and laughing hyseterically – saying

Mad person : main sabko maar dalunga /dalungi , maine sabko maar daala hain . main tumhe bhi maar dalunga/ dalungi

The mad person comes towards ginny with a knife in his/her hand . he /she run towards ginny with a knife , ginny is shocked but she cannot move but before the mad person can attack ginny with the knife *another person * is attacked by the mad person.

The knife is stuck in his stomach , he is bleeding and when he turns around _______the white flash becomes smaller and a voice is screaming " ginny, ginny , ginny ahluwalia ", ginny wakes up from the daymare and looks up to see mrs singh who is looking angrily at her .

Mrs singh : ginny tum class mein sone aayi ho ya padne aayi ho!!!( scolding ginny )

Ginny: ( embarrassed ) um sorry ma'am !!

Mrs singh : theek hain , agle baar class mein sona mat ( ginny nods to mrs singh , mrs singh goes back to teaching )

Sam ,raashi& meenakshi look worriedly towards ginny while a girl ( koel) who is smirking at ginny

Koel under her breath says:-

Koel: ginny sabse badi drama queen hai .bas attention chahiye ladkon se ( smirkingly)

The *boy * siting next to koel hears this and looks towards ginny with a serious look .

The bell rings :

Mrs singh :aaj ke liye itna hi . aap sab mujhe kal subhe 9:30am school courtyard mein mile kuch important news batanana hai .

Students: yes ma'am ( everybody leaves the classroom )

Raashi: ( says)hmmm… kya important news batana hain ma'am ko . maybe kal ya parso picnic ya trip ke liye jaana hoga( thinking excitedly and leaves from there )

Xxx

School stair case scene

Gokul is thinking about something , practically staring into space ( bg tune tumhi batyao raabba from iss pyaar ko kya naam doon is going)

Ayush : hey gokul , ( waking gokul from his thinking mode )

Gokul: hi ayush , rocky kahan hain ?? Ayush: ( says with a naughty smile) rocky yaa raavi ????

Gokul: (gets shocked) raaavi, mujhe raavi se kya kaam hai??woh bas mere best friend ke cousin sister hai!!!

Ayush: bas best friend ki behen hai aur kuch nahi !!!yaar mere se yeh baat chupaho mat , tum rocky aur mohit se ye baat chupate ho , par mujhe pata hai ki tum raavi se kitna pyaar karte ho !!

Gokul:( hides his feeling and says irritatedly): aisa kuch nahi hain !!raavi ek acchi dost hai meri that's all !! mujhe apni friendship break nahi karna rocky ke saath !! rocky ne mere liye kya kuch nahi kiya hai- mujhe emotional support diya hai, mere saath hospital mein raat bhar ruka jab tak papa nahi aaye . I cannot do this with him . ( says sadly)

Ayush : hey im sorry gokul!!(gokul does not hear him , stands up with sad face and leaves from there….)

Ayush : (smiles )says : tumhein pata nahi gokul ki tum ne raavi ko apne dil mein ek alag jagah de di hain , tum laak maana kar do par tumhe raavi se pyaar ho gaya hai . tum jitni baar usssee door jayonge utna hi kareeb payogey …

Part 3 ends

Edited by lizzie1765 - 13 years ago

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lizzie1765

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Chapter 4

(Andheri Raat)

In the afternoon in ahluwalias house

The phone bell rings , sweety picks it up

Sweet: hello!!

Pinky : hello sweety di ,pinky

Sweety : ( smiles) pinky kuch zyada hi jaldi phone kar diya !!

Pinky : sorry di, waise raavi, raashi aur sunny kaise hai ??

Sweety: sab theek hain,aur masti kar rahe hain ( smilingly ) ek miniute mein unko bulati hoon !!raavi,raashi-sunny mummy ka phone hai

All the kids come happily

Sunny : mujhe mummy se pehle baat karna hai !!

Sweety: (smiles n says ) theek hain beta !!

After sunny and raashi talk and ask about papa

Xxx

Raavi : hello mummy ,papa aur aap kaise ho .singapore must be a very pretty place na ( smilingly)

pinky : (smiles)haan bahut acchi jagah hai, its very beautiful !! anways 2 hafte ke baad hum phir pune wapas aajayeyenge .

Raavi: wow mumma , jaldi wapas aana . waise papa kahan hai??

Pinky : beta papa Singapore HFCF BRANCH OFFICE mein hai . ab mein phone rakti hoon , bye my princess .

Raavi:bye mummy ( raavi keeps the phone down and head towards upstairs , but the phone bell rings again)

Sweety(in kitchen) raavi beta, phone uthao do (to raavi)

Raavi:haan mausiji ( smiling)

Raavi picks up the phone which was still ringing

Raavi: hello !?

Person: (says) mujhe aaj raat 8:30pm milo GRANSEN HILL RD HIGHWAY KE pass aur der maat karna ( the person cuts the call before raavi can say anything ). Raavi is shocked and confused .

Sweety : (from the kitchen) kaun tha beta ??( to raavi)

Raavi: mausi koi wrong number wala hai ( she was still confused as to who that stranger was , who had told her to meet him/her near gransen hill rd highway)( leaves from there)

Sweety : (under her breath)uff in wrong number waalon ka kuch karna padega ( thinking)

Xxx

In the evening around 6:30-7:00pm

Sweety and lucky get ready and go while nanu/papaji stays at their place .

Nanu: ( to the kids sunny ,raashi and raavi) ab sweety and lucky gayye hain party ke liye ,ginny shriya ke ghar gayyi hain aur rocky dostoon ke saath gayya hain . par ye rocky puttar ka phone lag nahi raha usse ginny ko pickup karna tha par ye rocky .ab kaun jayeyga ginny ko pick up karne ke liye. Shriya toh Gransen Hill Rd, Antop Hill wahaan rehti hai woh jo Highway ke pass hain '..

Raavi: ( thinking ) agar mein wahan jayoon jahan woh stranger bula raha tha toh mujhe pata chalega ki woh mere saath prank khel raha hai ya sacchi mein milna chahata hai

Raavi : ( says) nanu , mein ginny ko pick up kar lungi Antop Hill se . aur aggar raaste mein rocky mill gayya toh use bhi pick up karlungi ( smilingly)

Nanu: par akele beta , mein bhi atta hoon saath mein !!!

Raavi: nahi nanu , aggar aap jayoyge to raashi aur sunny ghar mein akele ho jayenge .

Nanu : theek hai puttar , phone toh hain na !!

Raavi : haan nanu, mein jaldi jati hoon lagta hai bada sa toofan aanewala hai ''

1^st person: toofan nahi andhi aanewala hai un logon ki zindagi mein ( talking on the phone coldly) .woh log kya sochte hain bala tal gayyi hain , par un logon par itni badi musibaat aanewala hain ki unki saath pushton yaad rakehgi ( laughing cruelly) .

2^nd person : ( on the phone) don't worry sarkar aisa hi hoga ( smirking evilly )

Scene shifts '..

Rocky, ayush and gokul are talking/ walking on the road ( its evening time and its raining ) . suddenly they see two boys arguing with a boy . the two boys start beating the first boy with hockey sticks the boy turns around and it is mohit who is bleeding badly >. Rocky, ayush and gokul are shocked .they run towards mohit .

The boy named shivam says :-

Shivam:ye fattichar tunhara dost hai kya ( mocks with an evil grin)

Ayush : oye fattichar kisko bola , teri toh ( getting angry and rolling up his sleeves)

Rocky : chill ayush , in raaste ke gunde ke mooh nahi lagte hai ( saying sarcastically)

Shivam : oye gunde kisko bola tu !!!

Hooded friend : oye , tumhara dost yaar fattichar hai, tha aur hamesha rahega . aur tum log toh usse zyada ho ( laughing cruelly)

Rocky : hum log.. tum log gunde ho ,the aur hamesha rahoge , im sure laadikiyaan ghass bhi nahi deti hongi ( shoots back at them)

Hooded friend and shivam cant take this insult and come towards them with hockey sticks both the boys group look angrily at each other .scene freezes ''.

Raavi and ginny are coming back from shriya's house when raavi says

Raavi : ginny mujhe kuch batanana hai tumhe

Ginny : ( curious look ) kya raavi di ??

Raavi tells her in flashback mode about the phone incident

Ginny : di mujhe nahi lagta hai ki ye koi prank hai . chalk e dekte hai!! ( advises raavi )

Raavi: ( says ) theek hai !!!

Scene ends '.

Part 4 ends

Precap : the promo 1 scene rain fight scene between shiv ' hooded friend & rocky , ayush gokul and mohit . ginny screaming , all shocked '.

Edited by lizzie1765 - 13 years ago

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ABdaKriticizer

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Posted: 13 years ago

#29

👏
Excellent... Lizzie..
Great thoughts...
Nd awesome chapters...
The gud thing is that. u hav given each and every character, a proper time nd in very gud manner... Welldone...
Continue soon...👍🏼👍🏼