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Posted: 16 years ago
#11
haila Rachna thanks a lot for this shonu monu update.....................................................
Oh...so BBR managed to malign Kranti in front of everyone....................................😡😡
Raj is stunned to see that Kranti has left his house after he returns from Rawalpindi..................😲😲
BTW...loved to see how Raj realizes the futility of his existence without Kranti..................so he takes a momentous decision to find her whereabouts!!!!!!!
He balatantly tells everyone:

Kranti never lies. And I believe her. Yes, even after everything she did to me.'......I loved it..................👏👏
he even yells at the policeman and tries to convince him that Kranti is not a terrorist....................👍🏼
The way he tries cleaning her wounds with wet handkerchief shows his concern for her..............................😊
raj has a great presecence of mind.............he cleverly removes the pin of the bomb and throws it towards the exit of the tunnel to save his life.................................
rachna I am eagerly waiting for the next part.....................................kya karoon I am very inquisitive to know what will raj do next.................

once again thanks a ton dear..............







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Posted: 16 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: sami01

first of all i must say a big thankyou for this story , and doing it for me as well .....i know how much i wanted u to pen down ur thoughts.........

part one as i had read before too i reread it and i was able to recreate the images in my mind....magic of ur words was able to paint the picture on canvas of my mind......this was the way i wanted story to go beyond cuircuit house.....in real mrd.....his anxiety to reach amritsar , his fury .......his deep set rules....his beliefs ...his trust in kranti...he knew she never lied .....am so glad u captured it here......and showed kranti's house in amritsar....i was real anxious to finsih story while putting my son in bed...anxiety was there to know what happened next.......
few lines for raj.......when he saw kranti ...his pain and helplessness
badal hai ya dhuaan ....
aag lagi kahaan
jalta na ho kahin mera hi aashiyaan....
angaare the aansoo nahi wo dil ne jo piye...
kaise koi jiye......
abhi me anxious ke aage kya hone wala hai........lets wait and see i want to see the complexity of rk relationship in ur story rachna am sure u will give us that for sure......😳
once again am thanking u from bottom of my heart...for this



Sameera-ji,

😃 You know very well why I started this? And I am mighty glad that you like it and approve of it.

I am more or less going to keep myself in tune with whatever they had shown in the Soap, but am going to use the sequences differently about what it was and what it could have been.

There was always concern and care from Raj's part since the beginning, interspersed with anger. And his kamineeyat as a wakil. 😆

The lines you mentioned stating Raj's helplessness are fabulous. 👏

I hope I will be able to give you a part of what you are looking for.

Poet
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Posted: 16 years ago
#13

Originally posted by: tetuty66

Poet awesome...👏⭐️👍🏼
I loved it....so adventrous and thrilling....
while reading I was wondering where would Raj find Kranti.....
n now what next??.......
how would Kranti get treatment.......?
ohh!! curiosity building up...
plz update soon..
😳



Hi Sana 😊

So u loved it? Hmm ... 😉
Thanks for the thumbs up dear, I seriously needed it.

Well next, a lot of things are going to happen. I hope you like what is goign to come now. Very simple stuff though.

The next update comes up now. 😃



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Posted: 16 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: pennu

Thank you sooooo much Poetic.. for writng such a wonderful piece... I always loved the way you write.... you did a superb job... this update had only Raj and his thoughts... nothing more than that... yet it showed the whole rebel happened inside the tunnel and his eagerness to get to Kranti.. and his love and care towards her... With his breath mine too got stoped when he saw her lying behind the barrels... the way Rajveer said "Kranti" while he pressed the accelater was soo nice... a very usual way a man could react... Great job.... Waiting to see.. what will happen next...



Hello Jaya 😳

You are welcome Dear. But I don't think I can't update everyday, it's a bit hectic now. However, I will try to whenever I get some time. 😊

Thanks a lot for your sweet comments. I am glad you liked the update, I just took a big chance here since my sense of history has gone for a toss. 😆😕

I am just trying for one thing , to show them as normal persons.

I hope I can keep you all happy.

Poet
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Posted: 16 years ago
#15

Originally posted by: sasha722

Poetic Thanks for continuation
Of A New Dawn---Payar ka Bandhan--- Love Regained
it all time my fav story
as u hve started part 11 suspense is killing me
I just love the way uProject raj & Kranti
even diff ideologies but
passion 4 one is there
impatiently waiting 2 read how Raj is going 2 save kranti
pl update quick




Hello Sasha-ji,

I did remember your request, you see 😃

Raj and Kranti are different persons altogether and hence they have different idealogies. It's this inherent dichotomy that attracts them to each other.

Next update coming up.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: Ocean_deep

very nice...
Just read both parts...
Do continue Poetic...
You write very well!



Hi Ocean 😊

Thanks a lot for being here with all of us.

I am posting the next update now. DO tell me if it's ok.

Poet 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#17
Hey, my Friendly Neighbourhood Witch is here. 😳😃 Thanks
😛

Originally posted by: skeptical

Oh ....................... so its drama in the tunnel.......

Of the high voltage kind!

Police behind the KKs ............................hmmmmmmm
Bombs in bags .................... 😊
Kranti shot in the shoulder and she's a fugitive.................😲

Yes, she's on the run ...
And Raj frantic about Kranti's state
Good ........good.................good 👏 😆
(PS I may not be online often since my cat is very sick and needs to be taken care of....... 😭 )



So my Friendly Witch has a cat? How appropriate! 😃

What happened to your Cat BTW?
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: namita25

haila Rachna thanks a lot for this shonu monu update.....................................................
Oh...so BBR managed to malign Kranti in front of everyone....................................😡😡
Raj is stunned to see that Kranti has left his house after he returns from Rawalpindi..................😲😲
BTW...loved to see how Raj realizes the futility of his existence without Kranti..................so he takes a momentous decision to find her whereabouts!!!!!!!
He balatantly tells everyone:

Kranti never lies. And I believe her. Yes, even after everything she did to me.'......I loved it..................👏👏
he even yells at the policeman and tries to convince him that Kranti is not a terrorist....................👍🏼
The way he tries cleaning her wounds with wet handkerchief shows his concern for her..............................😊
raj has a great presecence of mind.............he cleverly removes the pin of the bomb and throws it towards the exit of the tunnel to save his life.................................
rachna I am eagerly waiting for the next part.....................................kya karoon I am very inquisitive to know what will raj do next.................

once again thanks a ton dear..............









Hi Nams 😃

Shonu monu update? 😆 That's so cute and sweet.

The BBR part started long back. And I always wanted Raj to behave like a man and stand up against her. And I wanted those two duffers to use their brains. More is likely to come. 😕

See there needs to be a point where these two start realizing the importance of each other in their lives' and then fall in love slowly but surely. Tabela shouldn't't have been the trigger.


As for the inquisitiv part, you know there is a proverb to this effect - Curiosity killed the Cat! 😆

Sorry, do excuse my stupid sense of humour.

Next update comign up oven fresh for you. Do read it and let me know.

Poet😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part III

Somewhere in Amritsar

Half and hour later

Raj kept on driving wildly, his mind in turmoil. He didn't know what to do. From time to time, he would turn around to catch a brief glimpse of Kranti, to check whether she was fine or not. She was far from being fine, he knew; her precious life blood seeping away, and she was still unconscious, which was definitely not a good thing. He decided to stop for a minute and decide his next course of action.

He stopped near a lamp post and looked around. It was already dusk and there was nothing around. He seemed to be stranded in the middle of nowhere. Alighting from the car, he rushed to the back seat. The dark red splotch on Kranti's left shoulder tore at his heart and he touched the spot feebly. The clot was sticky and warm; her dress had got stuck to the wound and was damp. Raj ran his fingers through his hair, he looked at Kranti's face and felt like howling. Her face had lost colour and her lips were a pale shade of light pink. Raj wished that he had not thrown his coat away; it would have kept Kranti warm at least for some time. He bent down slightly and kissed the top of her head and murmured

'Have faith in me Kranti. I won't let anything happen to you. Please.'

Teardrops threatened to brim over but he knew that he could not cry now. He had to take Kranti to safety first.

Closing the door behind him, he stood outside the car, staring at the horizon in front of him, weighing his options.

Lahore was not a possibility at all; the police would search there first. And Amritsar was a deadly zone for Kranti. Where could he take her now? Rawalpindi was too far away and he would have to travel a lot, which was definitely not good news for either Kranti or him. His mind raced as he tried to remember all his contacts, the one he could trust, while his heart grappled with emotions.

An idea suddenly clicked and Raj felt more alert. It was a risk that he was determined to take. It was the only plan available to him.

He entered the car back again and turned on the ignition, praying to God that He assists him in his endeavor. It was necessary to protect a life.

……………..

IT was well in the evening when his car entered the borders of the British division of Jalandhar. It was a great risk he knew to bring Kranti to Jalandhar, since the town was the headquarters of both Jalandhar Division as well as District and was teeming with Britishers all around. Yet this was not going to be the first spot that the British would search for Kranti. They wouldn't imagine Kranti in Jalandhar in the first place. And he knew only two people in this town.

His childhood friend, Sanjay and his wife, Nirmal, who also happened to be Kranti's cousin sister.

Like him, Sanjay also belonged to a family which aspired to be gifted the Raibahadur tag by the British Government and hence when he fell in love with Nirmal and wanted to marry her, his family was not at all happy. Nirmal was a commoner's daughter after all. Also there were certain misunderstandings from the point of view of Nirmal's family too, and Kranti's maternal aunt was not at all happy with the prospect of their marriage. That left the couple with only one choice and that was to elope.

All hell had broken loose in the two households once the news of their elopement and marriage came through, and being the son of such a prominent personality, Sanjay found it difficult to find sustain a livelihood in Lahore. The two had then shifted to Jalandhar where one of Sanjay's friends had offered him a respectable job. Since then, Rajbir had visited the two in Jalandhar twice or thrice; he liked Nirmal and knew that she was the best thing to have happened to his best friend.

And that is where he was presently heading to. Sanjay and Nirmal's safe abode.

……..

Sanjay and Nirmal's residence

Jalandhar

Around 9 p.m.

Sanjay was sitting in the verandah going through the newspaper once again. Dinner being over, Nirmal was busy inside arranging the kitchen. It was pleasant and a cool breeze was blowing. It was a small house in which they were staying, but both Sanjay and Nirmal were contented. They had seen hard times, and couldn't have asked for more.

This was their favourite time of the day. After dinner, Sanjay would sit down in his favourite chair, overlooking the small garden at the back of their small house, feeling happy and relaxed. Nirmal would join him soon and the two would spend some idle time together, chatting generally about the day and their lives. A time well spent in happiness and laughter, before calling it a day, in preparation of the next day.

It was just another night when a car came and halted in front of their small verandah. Both Sanjay and Nirmal were surprised. Their surprise gave way to amazement and then happiness when they realized that it was Raj's car. Sanjay sprang down the small flight of stairs to greet his friend, who opened the door hastily and climbed out. Nirmal also followed Sanjay down the steps. But they were frozen in their spots when they realized that Raj's dress shirt was soiled with blood.

Seeing Nirmal with Sanjay together, Raj opened the back door of the car, the only words that came out of his mouth was

'Kranti's hit by a bullet. Needs a Doctor now. There's no time to lose.'

Raj sensed complete shock and disbelief in the faces of his friend and his wife. He turned around and his eyes pleaded to them.

The heartfelt pleading spur both Sanjay and Nirmal to action and within minutes, Kranti was inside her sister's household. Raj carefully carried her in his arms and laid her down on the bed. Sanjay ran to find a Doctor while Nirmal washed Kranti's wound cautiously. She was herself shocked and at wits' end. She loved Kranti a lot and was disturbed to see her in such a state. But this was the time for action, Nirmal knew and any sort of weakness on any of their part could prove fatal to Kranti. She needed to change her sister's dress which was heavily blood stained, but Raj just simply refused to budge. He huddled down beside Kranti's prone form, oblivious to everything else, holding her hand in his and staring at her face. Nirmal had never seen him so vulnerable earlier.

Was this the same Rajbir who hated her sister in the initial days of their acquaintance?

…………….

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Posted: 16 years ago
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aha!!......beautiful update Poet!!⭐️
You described wounded Kranti very nicely....👍🏼
Raj's worries were also clearly visible....tears too rolling down...yes he didnt had anytime to waste ......
Glad that Raj quickly remembered SN,so that he can take Kranti to them....
But wont it will be difficult to get a doctor???.....😕😲
umm.....that would be disclosed in next update.....so pls update soon...
I am loving it Poet.....👏👏👏

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