Raj's Fall Now Kranti's turn-Uptd Part XVI Pg 30 - Page 21

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Posted: 16 years ago
hey ranju i just completed last three parts of your ff.
its simply great.
i love your ff.
i still don't understand y raj was avoiding krantii.
and love this part especially .
it is something very unusal.
raj's soft feelings for jaliawala bagh .
and when raj find krantii and the mangalsutra part.
but the most interesting part was the last line ofcourse.
yaar who can help raj now.
i am realy worried.
may be shubhankar.
can't say anything.
but for now i love to read your ff.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sami01

very very well written, loved it ranju ......keep it up lets see what happens next.......am curious hope kranti gets to wear pista color kurta in serial too

Yeah I thunk she loos beautiful in that color.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: tetuty66

o wow raj recognised K by her mangalsutra ummmmm lovely
great work i loved it plz continue soon ha....👍🏼

Thanks a lot tetuty.
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Posted: 16 years ago
wow ranju so beautiful u describe
about mangalsutra very touchy
i loved it
waiting suspense 2 open up
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Posted: 16 years ago

Hi Ranjna 😊 dear yet again amazing part.👏👏..

well crafted and the story line is a gripping… i really like the way it is proceeding...the update was outstanding...

liked the way you described the emotions Raj goes through after being at Jallianwala Bagh…not getting affected by such heinous act is just impossible even now….whether Indian or not….across the humanity no one can be impassive to that kind of barbarism….its explicable how people who witnessed it..were agitated

n I have my own notions about whom Raj is going to ask for help…. But of course ll wait to see if i got it right…

continue soon

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sasha722

wow ranju so beautiful u describe
about mangalsutra very touchy
i loved it
waiting suspense 2 open up

Thanks Sasha I am happy that you liked it.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: netu19

Hi Ranjna 😊 dear yet again amazing part.👏👏..

well crafted and the story line is a gripping' i really like the way it is proceeding...the update was outstanding...

liked the way you described the emotions Raj goes through after being at Jallianwala Bagh'not getting affected by such heinous act is just impossible even now'.whether Indian or not'.across the humanity no one can be impassive to that kind of barbarism'.its explicable how people who witnessed it..were agitated

n I have my own notions about whom Raj is going to ask for help'. But of course ll wait to see if i got it right'

continue soon

Hey thanks N2 I am very happy that you liked it.
Yes I think you are right that no one can remain unaffected when they see the sight of that place.
I almost wrote my feelings there when I went there.
Now tell me who do you think Raj will ask help from. Whats your guess.
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Posted: 16 years ago
ok Ranjna
i think it has to be some character like Prem Babu or Badi bi
(as tauji i guess is nt alive otherwise he wd have fitted perfectly)
not subhankar...i dont like the idea of Raj asking him for help...
n subhankar is KK himself at first place.. n knowingly involved Kranti in mission....
how he ll be able to convince Kranti to back off....

n here we need someone who understands emotional n human needs of Kranti...thats my POV


waiting on next update to read your take...

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Posted: 16 years ago

You are bang on N2

Here goes the next part,
Part XIV

Prem babu was the only person who could help him in this matter. But the big question was that would he?

Prem babu was Kranti's father's friend and use to run an independent press on his land. Raj had betrayed him with a false case and ensured that his press was confiscated by the British.

Something he regretted later.

After losing the case Prem babu had lost the purpose of being in Lahore and so he moved to Amritsar. Raj knew about this as he was the one who mailed the copy of the order to him as his lawyer.

Will he help me?He is angry with me he trusted e like his own son and I betrayed him moreover he too is a KK and why will he give me there whereabouts. How ever he is the only hope I have. What was the name of the street Lala chowk or lal chowki to hell with it I have to find out.

After a little asking around he got to know about the area and locating the house ws not much of a problem as every one seemed to know the good and honest Prem Girdhar, the one who use to write against British.

Prem babu was sitting and going through some papers. Suddenly the someone banged the door.

He got up and opened the door.

P: Rajbir Lal?

R:Prem babu I need your help. May I come in?

P: Yes.

PB came in and took away the papers spread in front of him. From a side glance Raj could make out that it was some ind of a map cinfirming his fears, with one respite that PB would surely know about Kranti.

P: What will you have barrister Sahab. Some tea or lassi.

R: Prem Babu I need help.

P: What made you think you will get any from me Barrister Sahab.

R: I always regretted doing what I did to you.

P: No puttar I am not a but bitter about that. But again I would not help anyone who is with british. Be it anyone.

R: So please can you tell me where is Kranti and her partners.

P: Raj what makes you think that I will.

R: I am her husband and I have all rights to know where is she.

P: Shut up Raj and get lost. Wht right are you talking about when you have betrayed her all the time.

R: Prem babu I don't want to explain anything right now just want to know where is my wife and don't tell me if you don't want to I will find out and mind you, I will save her from any trouble and I will do that at any cost.

Raj stormed out, leaving a surprised Prem babu behind.

In the evening that day Prem babu stepped out of his house didn't realizing that a shadow was following his every step.

He was looking over his shoulders again and again to ensure no one is on his trail and he felt the oresence of someone a couple of times but kept moving.

The streets of Amritsar were slowly taing a deserted look it was a combined effect of winters and the giverners visit. People were expecting the trouble to brew anytime.

Prem babu was walking with swift steps and his steps the steps of that shadowy figure were also increasing.

He came by a dilapidated and deserted house. From the look of it anyone could have said that it is a deserted house haunted may be but a dim light emerging from one corner of the broken wall was giving it some life.

Prem babu entered the gate and vanished. That shadowy figure emerged from the darkness, it was Raj.

He knew that Prem babu would never give him the where about of Kranti so he decided ti follow him. He didn't know what danger he was getting himself into.

Raj thought for a moment before stepping inside the house.

*Thud* a sound and Raj blacked out for a moment before turning around, before he could see anyone clearly another bloe across his face, then another they didn't seem to be stopping.

"Raaaaaaaaaj" He hear a loud cry a voice he could recognize from any distance the one which was in his mind all the time.

"Kranti" he could barely whisper before he passed out.

Raj woke up in a dingy room which was very dimly lit. He opened his eyes and saw Kranti's worried face. A smile had spread across those beautiful lips seeing him back in senses.

R: Kranti'. He was barely audible.

K: Raj how are you feeling now? Her voice was still very anxious and quivering as if she will cry any moment.

K: What kind of fool are you why did you come here. Do you realize that you would have got killed if I didn't come in time. Why did you come here. I told you never to cross my path.

She was almost in the verge of tears.

Raj gently lifted his hand and kept it on her face he wiped a single tear on her cheek the defiant one which refused to listen to her.

Kranti jerked it off.

"Ouch" a gasp escaped Raj's mouth Kranti suddenly turned around.

K: What happened you alright?

R: Madame your partners have not taken any mercy on me and now you are jerking my injured hand it is bound to hurt.

K: Shut up Raj and answer me why did you come here. Do you even understand how dangerous it is.

R: Yes I know and that's why I have come here I can't let you in any trouble.

K: Raj you have a life of your own and I have mine and how many times will I have to tell you not to come in my way. I have a mission and I have to work for it and you are not a part of any of my plans. Then why do you keep crossing my path.

R: Kranti why do you keep saying something you don't believe in yourself.

K: Shutup up you brute.

R: I cam never understand you Kranti one side you want me to gie explanations and the other side you kepp asking me to shutup please decide what do you want (mockingly)\

K: Why don't you understand if I had got a little late you would have got ki'.anything would have happened. And what if they had'''. Kranti chocked the words refused to come out of her throat.

Raj was shocked to hear those words and happy at to see those emotions for him.

In spite of pais he got up from the cot and gently cupped Kranti's face in his hands. Now the tears were flowing freely down her cheek. He gently wiped them but they refused to stop. He then bent down and kissed Kranti's tear soaked cheek he could taste all the salt.

He then gently took Kranti's shaking body in his arms, she buried her face in his chest and then the cries were unstoppable and inconsolable.

She didn't know for how long she was standing there sobbing in his embrace.

R: Shall we sit.

Kranti looked up to his face.

R: See I will not be able to stand anymore and have you put on weight I had to struggle to hold you Kranti.

Kranti smiled amidst her tears and sat beside Raj on the cot.

R: Today I got to kiss my wife willfully for the first time and you are salty girl.

K: Enough Raj it is serious matter and you think it is funny.

R: Kranti I'

K: Raj I am here for a purpose and you have to go cos I don't want any trouble for you.

R: And what makes you think that I will leave you here when I know you are heading for an impending doom.

K: Raj I am a KK and I have some duites to fulfill. For my country.

R: And for me'Kranti you can lie hundred times that you don't care but let me tell you that your eyes give you away all the time. So don't play games with me now.

K: Raj you don't understand.

Their conversation was cut short by a knock on the door. Kranti went and opened the door. It was shubhankar. Raj suddenly felt irritated with this intrusion and more so because it was shubhankar.

S: How is he feeling now. (Not looking at Raj)

K: He is alright but in pain.

S: Kranti ask him to go back we have our mission to finish.

K: Yes. Can you leave us alone for a while.

Shubhankar truned to go but his expression didn't escape Raj's keen eyes and that's why he use to hate when ever Shubhankar was around Kranti.

Krsanti turned towards Raj she was about to say something but before she spoke Raj started.

R: Kranti tell me something how did these guys got to know about me.

K: What do you think of KKs Raj they are a bunch of idiots or what. They knew about all your movements since you went to rattowal following me. But I never realized that you would reach this far.

R: Kranti I can go to hell for you and all I had to do was to look for you at Amritsar and I knew that I would find you at Jallainwalah Bagh and if you hadn't some that day I would have visited that place till I saw you there.

Kranti could not say anything and kept looking in those deep brown eyes.

It was foe the first time she looked at Raj so closely. He was indeed a very good looking man his face was well defined with a hard jawline yet his eyes use to give it the innocence of a child.

Guys this part was typed in a little hurry hope you dont mind the typo errors.

Edited by ranjna_m2010 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
ranjna beautiful ...loved it...
At this moment 2(off air) ur FF brought a smile on my face......
thank u so much.......🤗

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